Greeting the Day
A Pantoum Snapshot Poem37 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello damommy, this is a really lovely Pantoum, written true to form and your repeated lines in each stanza slip seamlessly into place and do not sound at all contrived. Each one could stand alone as a poem. The content of your poem is charming with a lovely accompanying picture. Lovely work. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hello damommy, this is a really lovely Pantoum, written true to form and your repeated lines in each stanza slip seamlessly into place and do not sound at all contrived. Each one could stand alone as a poem. The content of your poem is charming with a lovely accompanying picture. Lovely work. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you for such a wonderful review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Pantoum about sitting on the verandah watching the children play from the rocking chair. A lovely place to relax and look over the garden.
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A very well-written Pantoum about sitting on the verandah watching the children play from the rocking chair. A lovely place to relax and look over the garden.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks, Sandra.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your fun pantoumn, Yvonne. Its presentation is great--the warm color scheme, the great picture, the font choice, and the message. Your words flow well. The repeated lines fit in nicely. I could envision myself sitting in that great rocking chair watching the critters play on a summer's day. I like the personification of the Sun. Your well-chosen words create great imagery. I really like how the Sun greets the newborn day and the 'shadows limbs to look like lace. Great use of alliteration, too. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan.
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I enjoyed your fun pantoumn, Yvonne. Its presentation is great--the warm color scheme, the great picture, the font choice, and the message. Your words flow well. The repeated lines fit in nicely. I could envision myself sitting in that great rocking chair watching the critters play on a summer's day. I like the personification of the Sun. Your well-chosen words create great imagery. I really like how the Sun greets the newborn day and the 'shadows limbs to look like lace. Great use of alliteration, too. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the wonderful review!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh wow, what a wonderful piece with excellent abab and repeating lines making the emphasis on each stanza and still let them stand on their own. Loved the content
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Oh wow, what a wonderful piece with excellent abab and repeating lines making the emphasis on each stanza and still let them stand on their own. Loved the content
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Barb.
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is another type of poem that I don't much about. I see how it's done but I haven't totally figured it out yet. I like it though, it's very pretty.
The words are descriptive enough to be able to enjoy it even without the picture. Although the picture is pretty. I'd like to sit in one of the rocking chairs. Good luck on the contest.
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This is another type of poem that I don't much about. I see how it's done but I haven't totally figured it out yet. I like it though, it's very pretty.
The words are descriptive enough to be able to enjoy it even without the picture. Although the picture is pretty. I'd like to sit in one of the rocking chairs. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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It's a pantoum. Fun to do. Thanks, Patty.
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You're welcome!!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
It's a wonderous day for a brave heart that is searching the beauty of the world before it falls apart. Thank you for sharing. And good luck with your writings.
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It's a wonderous day for a brave heart that is searching the beauty of the world before it falls apart. Thank you for sharing. And good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
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Every day is beautiful. Thank you, Iza.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Greeting the Day", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. To me, this is a six, but I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Greeting the Day", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. To me, this is a six, but I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you.
You're welcome. ( I hope I'm not stuttering!)
Comment from Gloria ....
It sounds like there is some great action going on over in your yard, Yvonne. Having a rocking chair on the deck to watch the goings on is a ton of fun and gave you much fodder for this awesome snapshot pantoum from your slave-driver teacher. LOL. Shh don't tell him I said so.
Most enjoyable read this evening. :)
Gloria
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It sounds like there is some great action going on over in your yard, Yvonne. Having a rocking chair on the deck to watch the goings on is a ton of fun and gave you much fodder for this awesome snapshot pantoum from your slave-driver teacher. LOL. Shh don't tell him I said so.
Most enjoyable read this evening. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
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My lips are sealed. lol. Thank you, Gloria.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an ambient and clever write filled with a joyful newborn day, the dewy air and the fun commencing among the wildlife, altogether uplifting and a delightful read, well balanced, good meter and rhymes, love Dolly x
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This is an ambient and clever write filled with a joyful newborn day, the dewy air and the fun commencing among the wildlife, altogether uplifting and a delightful read, well balanced, good meter and rhymes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from NickieT
The pattern of this poem works very well for your chosen subject. I like how the lines echo - almost like how when you are outside your attention bouncing back and forth. Beautifully done =)
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The pattern of this poem works very well for your chosen subject. I like how the lines echo - almost like how when you are outside your attention bouncing back and forth. Beautifully done =)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you. What a lovely thing to say.
