The Witches' Kitchen
What is in the Witches' Brew?11 total reviews
Comment from jsalslamher
I can see why your number one. Grest poem wow you have so much picture words in every line of this piece. I really enjoyed reading your poem it is inspiring to me. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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I can see why your number one. Grest poem wow you have so much picture words in every line of this piece. I really enjoyed reading your poem it is inspiring to me. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review. I am so happy that you enjoyed! Have a beautiful evening!
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Your welcome you as well
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through you poem. It was terrific and children will love it. Speaking as a big child, I loved it too lol. It was creative and had a good rhythm.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through you poem. It was terrific and children will love it. Speaking as a big child, I loved it too lol. It was creative and had a good rhythm.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you so very much for the wonderful review! I'm so happy that you enjoyed!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Poet,
I love the artwork! It catches your eye right away.
You set the stage with your first verse. Good rhymes and fun witchy stuff... a bubbling cauldron.
"Witches' brooms and Warlock stubble
Three old hags spell triple trouble.
Mixing in the cauldron hot
Candy in, but out... it's not!" ... but the kids might not understand the last line. I didn't get it.
Now for the ingredients,
"Eye of troll and sting of bug,
Lizard scales or tongue of slug,
Gizzards, guts and tail of cat...
Bubble over in the vat." ...Maybe I'm being picky, but I think the correct spell is
(Eye of troll and legs of bug,
Lizard tail and slimy slug,
Gizzards, guts and nails of cat...
Bubble over in the vat.) ...just a suggestion~
I like the change of color in each verse. It's effective.
Again in this last verse, I didn't understand the last line,
"Mushy, sticky, grimy, gooey,
Slimy, icky, even chewy!
Eyeballs, liver, tiger drool,
Crooked fingers, brains or gruel...
Reach your hand in...if you dare...
Tell us what you think you fare..."
But this is a fun entry. Most little kids love cooking with Mom or Grandma, so they would get a charge out of it.
Good Luck in the contest! Of the ones I've read so far, this is tops.
Cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Hi Mystery Poet,
I love the artwork! It catches your eye right away.
You set the stage with your first verse. Good rhymes and fun witchy stuff... a bubbling cauldron.
"Witches' brooms and Warlock stubble
Three old hags spell triple trouble.
Mixing in the cauldron hot
Candy in, but out... it's not!" ... but the kids might not understand the last line. I didn't get it.
Now for the ingredients,
"Eye of troll and sting of bug,
Lizard scales or tongue of slug,
Gizzards, guts and tail of cat...
Bubble over in the vat." ...Maybe I'm being picky, but I think the correct spell is
(Eye of troll and legs of bug,
Lizard tail and slimy slug,
Gizzards, guts and nails of cat...
Bubble over in the vat.) ...just a suggestion~
I like the change of color in each verse. It's effective.
Again in this last verse, I didn't understand the last line,
"Mushy, sticky, grimy, gooey,
Slimy, icky, even chewy!
Eyeballs, liver, tiger drool,
Crooked fingers, brains or gruel...
Reach your hand in...if you dare...
Tell us what you think you fare..."
But this is a fun entry. Most little kids love cooking with Mom or Grandma, so they would get a charge out of it.
Good Luck in the contest! Of the ones I've read so far, this is tops.
Cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thanks so much for the great review! This was written originally for the end of a Halloween tour where there were 3 witches stirring a pot. The kids gave up their treat bags to put their hands in to see what they could imagine was in there... slimey, ooey, gooey things... Of course, their guesses turned into extra goodies (candy treats, etc.)! Again...thank you so much for the great review and wishes in the contest - so happy you enjoyed!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
'The Witches Kitchen' contains shades of Macbeth, great end rhymes like 'stubble' and 'trouble,' 'motion' and 'potion,' 'drool' and 'gruel,'' internal rhymes like 'Lizard' and 'gizzards,' great assonance like the short 'u' sound in 'tongue of slug' combine to make this an appealing Halloween poem for children of all ages. Older ones will probably have fun saying it aloud like a chant. Delightfully 'icky' for first graders on up, I would say. Super contest entry!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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'The Witches Kitchen' contains shades of Macbeth, great end rhymes like 'stubble' and 'trouble,' 'motion' and 'potion,' 'drool' and 'gruel,'' internal rhymes like 'Lizard' and 'gizzards,' great assonance like the short 'u' sound in 'tongue of slug' combine to make this an appealing Halloween poem for children of all ages. Older ones will probably have fun saying it aloud like a chant. Delightfully 'icky' for first graders on up, I would say. Super contest entry!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, Crystie for the lovely review! I was hoping that it would be as much fun to read as it was to write! Have a beautiful day!
Comment from NickieT
I appreciate all of the vivid and creative descriptions. Your poem is both fun and clever in its use of rhymes and color. My only suggestions would be to change the last line to read, "how you fare," instead of "what you fare," because fare in this case is a verb so it is more of a "how' than a "what" if that makes sense.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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I appreciate all of the vivid and creative descriptions. Your poem is both fun and clever in its use of rhymes and color. My only suggestions would be to change the last line to read, "how you fare," instead of "what you fare," because fare in this case is a verb so it is more of a "how' than a "what" if that makes sense.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks, Nickie for the great review. Great suggestion on the use of "fare!" So glad you enjoyed and than you again for the wonderful review!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an excellent contest entry. Your words are well chosen and the rhyme scheme works well. The picture is a good addition. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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This is an excellent contest entry. Your words are well chosen and the rhyme scheme works well. The picture is a good addition. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Hi, Susan! Thank you so much for the kind review! It was fun to write and am so glad you enjoyed!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved this take on Shakespeares three witches, you did a superb job and I wish i had a six for you, spells, ghosts and witches broomsticks help to make this a magical Halloween write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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I loved this take on Shakespeares three witches, you did a superb job and I wish i had a six for you, spells, ghosts and witches broomsticks help to make this a magical Halloween write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Hi, Dolly! I do love Shakespeare's witches and was hoping it would come across as a fun-take on the three. Thank you so much for the great review!
Comment from humpwhistle
As a kid, my brother wouldn't even eat ice cream. Slim chance he'd sample this concoction.
I must find out where witches shop. Even Whole Foods doesn't carry tongue of slug.
Lots of fun here. I'm sure kids would love all the 'icky'-ness within.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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As a kid, my brother wouldn't even eat ice cream. Slim chance he'd sample this concoction.
I must find out where witches shop. Even Whole Foods doesn't carry tongue of slug.
Lots of fun here. I'm sure kids would love all the 'icky'-ness within.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Ha! Ha! Have you tried Costco? So happy you enjoyed and thank you so much for the great review!
Comment from Sallyo
Ick ick ick! That's a picture that's likely to stick in my poor brain. This one is gooey gruesome fun and I think it would go well in an anthology of festival poems. I'm putting one together, as it happens!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Ick ick ick! That's a picture that's likely to stick in my poor brain. This one is gooey gruesome fun and I think it would go well in an anthology of festival poems. I'm putting one together, as it happens!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Hi, Sallyo! Am so happy you enjoyed this! I actually wrote it as part of a scene played out in one of our annual "Halloween in the Park" festivals. This was the last stop of a tour where 3 old witches stood around a big, eerily-smoking cauldron. Kids would be asked to put their hand in the pot to guess what they could feel (ooey, gooey, slimy ick)! What they ended up with was a bag of goodies to take home from the tour! Thanks again for the great review and good luck to you, too, on your Anthology of Festival Poems!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer (--wink--)
What a deeeelightful children's poem. hahaha I don't know any child who doesn't adore goopy, gross, scary stuff - that's over THERE.
hahaha This should do very well in the contest. Good luck!!
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Dear Mystery Writer (--wink--)
What a deeeelightful children's poem. hahaha I don't know any child who doesn't adore goopy, gross, scary stuff - that's over THERE.
hahaha This should do very well in the contest. Good luck!!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, Robyn, for the delightful review! So happy that you enjoyed! Thank you again and have a beautiful evening!
