You Chose Him
The sacrifices of divorce18 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written sad poem you have penned for the Sadness contest. Your words were so heart felt and so deep. It made me sad reading this. I hope things get better for you two. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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This is a very well written sad poem you have penned for the Sadness contest. Your words were so heart felt and so deep. It made me sad reading this. I hope things get better for you two. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Thank you Teri. I'm sorry it made you sad reading it, but then I guess that's the whole point of a sad poem. I cried while writing it, and even though it sucks for structure, I left it as is. It fizzed in the contest too, but I am not worried about that! Thank you again my sweet friend xoxoxo
Comment from Janetsue
I was in the sixth grade when my parents broke up. My dad had recently returned from Korea so my brother and I chose to live with him. When I was in the tenth grade, my brother was already out of the house and I left and went to live with my mother. Teenage years are difficult and I needed to be with her at that point. I understand the sorrow in your posting. I managed to hurt both of my parents, just at different times. All I can say is that there is no way to completely avoid sadness in this present world. My strength comes through my faith. It helps to know there is someone who is pure goodness who loves me no matter what.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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I was in the sixth grade when my parents broke up. My dad had recently returned from Korea so my brother and I chose to live with him. When I was in the tenth grade, my brother was already out of the house and I left and went to live with my mother. Teenage years are difficult and I needed to be with her at that point. I understand the sorrow in your posting. I managed to hurt both of my parents, just at different times. All I can say is that there is no way to completely avoid sadness in this present world. My strength comes through my faith. It helps to know there is someone who is pure goodness who loves me no matter what.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thank you Spangle, for your review, the six stars and for sharing your own experience. I know I made many mistakes during that awful phase, and that was probably why she chose to live with him. I wonder sometimes, when I'll ever get a chance to make up for that, or explain myself to her, but...? It is very hard indeed!
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Have you tried mailing her a letter? If you don't feel you could do that, you can still write one and mail it to yourself. Doors sometimes open in front of us when least expected. xo
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Have you tried mailing her a letter? If you don't feel you could do that, you can still write one and mail it to yourself. Doors sometimes open in front of us when least expected. xo
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Have you tried mailing her a letter%3F If you don%27t feel you could do that%2C you can still write one and mail it to yourself. Doors sometimes open in front of us when least expected. xo
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I did that years ago. Trouble is, I'm a Cancerian, given to hanging on to the past a bit too much. In saying that, it took a counsellor after five years of me suffering to point out that I was grieving her loss. So add ignorance to stubbornness and I'm still at a loss! She also is a stubborn Gemini, who is too much like her virgo daddy. Methinks this is a lose-lose situation lol!
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Sometimes you have to be the one to step up to a closed door and turn the handle. There is nothing for you to lose....
Comment from Edna Estrada
This poem definitely sticks to the sadness topic. I like how you see the story play out. From an obviously painful marriage, to a life changing night to the heart wrenching aftermath. I also thought the way you set up the rhymes was very clever.
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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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This poem definitely sticks to the sadness topic. I like how you see the story play out. From an obviously painful marriage, to a life changing night to the heart wrenching aftermath. I also thought the way you set up the rhymes was very clever.
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thanks Edna xoxo
Comment from LyndaS
What a brave post! I have not walked in your shoes but down a very similar path. Takes guts to put this down and post it. That being said, the form of this poem is lovely. I like the rhyme scheme with the free verse thrown in. Very effective. Sending a big hug and a few stars. Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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What a brave post! I have not walked in your shoes but down a very similar path. Takes guts to put this down and post it. That being said, the form of this poem is lovely. I like the rhyme scheme with the free verse thrown in. Very effective. Sending a big hug and a few stars. Well done!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thanks Lynda, for your thoughts, kind words and the sixer xoxo
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Most welcome my friend.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow, Gypsy.... there are no words to even begin to review this one -- it is beautifully written and just oozes the sadness that you've woven in the lines... a wonderful offering for this unique contest... though so very, very sad.. Yvette
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Wow, Gypsy.... there are no words to even begin to review this one -- it is beautifully written and just oozes the sadness that you've woven in the lines... a wonderful offering for this unique contest... though so very, very sad.. Yvette
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thanks Yvette, it made me cry writing it! I also thought twice about entering it, but decided to in the end. Not worried what the voters think either; it was cathartic in a way, so that's important xoxo
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Never worry about what voters think on something like this that goes from heart to pen, Gypsy -- yes, we write for others, but sometimes? Yeah, sometimes we write for us! ;) :) Take care of you out there... as long as there is time on your clock hope lives on... :) :) Yvette
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Very true Yvette. I'm fizzing in the contest, but I don't really care. The entries out in front are very deserving anyway. And yes, time is still on my side!
Comment from Gail Denham
Oh wow. This is so emotional and sad to the bone. I'm very sorry. Divorce is nasty business no matter what others might say. In our family, two sons were "cast out" and the children suffered, altho custody was joint. A prayer for you and daughter. You tell your tale very well.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Oh wow. This is so emotional and sad to the bone. I'm very sorry. Divorce is nasty business no matter what others might say. In our family, two sons were "cast out" and the children suffered, altho custody was joint. A prayer for you and daughter. You tell your tale very well.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much Gail, for your thoughts, prayers and review xoxoxo
Comment from Bill Pinder
I would give you six stars for this if I had it. I'm glad that you posted this in a creative way of helping you to take a step of healing. Stay on the road of healing for yourself and your daughter sake. Keep writing! Bill
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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I would give you six stars for this if I had it. I'm glad that you posted this in a creative way of helping you to take a step of healing. Stay on the road of healing for yourself and your daughter sake. Keep writing! Bill
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks Bill, for your kind words and the virtual six! I'm glad you enjoyed this xoxoxo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sadness poem. It is hard to divorce from a person you thought will be at your side for a lifetime. To take a child also away from you to go to the other parent is a most devastating experience.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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A very well-written sadness poem. It is hard to divorce from a person you thought will be at your side for a lifetime. To take a child also away from you to go to the other parent is a most devastating experience.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks so much Sandra. It is very hard indeed xoxox
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is well-written, heart-wrenching, and full of raw emotion.
There are situations we never get over, that affect every area of our lives--those WHY's, like the one your poem centers around.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Your poem is well-written, heart-wrenching, and full of raw emotion.
There are situations we never get over, that affect every area of our lives--those WHY's, like the one your poem centers around.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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I guess we'd never question if life wasn't full of WHY's. But bloody heck they're frustrating! And, as is often said, sometimes a person never finds out WHY and just has to accept the situation as it is.
Thank you for a thoughtful review xoxoxoxox
Comment from w.j.debi
It pulls the heart strings to read this so I cannot imagine how hurt you were when your daughter left. Hopefully, you can reach out to each other and heal that hurt.
The poem is well written. The repeating line adds impact to the message. Reading it a second time after reading the notes makes it even more poignant.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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It pulls the heart strings to read this so I cannot imagine how hurt you were when your daughter left. Hopefully, you can reach out to each other and heal that hurt.
The poem is well written. The repeating line adds impact to the message. Reading it a second time after reading the notes makes it even more poignant.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you for not only reviewing this, but for actually reading it and the notes. To be honest, I think writing should be able to stand alone without notes, but sometimes they're called for. So again, thanks for taking the time you did to read both the poem and the notes xoxoxox
