Grand Finale
An Autumn Terza Rima35 total reviews
Comment from Ogden
My compliments on this fine work. I appreciate your imagery, unstrained rhyming, and sometimes somber tone. (Let's hope you get no call from Him.)
Don
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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My compliments on this fine work. I appreciate your imagery, unstrained rhyming, and sometimes somber tone. (Let's hope you get no call from Him.)
Don
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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I am delighted you enjoyed my autumn imagery, Don. Many thanks for your kind praise of my terza rima.
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You're very welcome.
Don
Comment from CrystieCookie999
There are some really original-sounding lines in this poem, a terza rima. One line I like is: a gush of glamor as lush green adjourns. It helps the reader get the idea that autumn comes in full-blown and glamorous, as summer greens begin to retire. There is some great 'f' alliteration in the line: see the tattered fronds of all those ferns
This line: The trees' bold colors soon will shriek.
had a sound reference, but I thought it was missing a foot. The whole poem is well done in the way of meter, though, otherwise. Thanks for entering the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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There are some really original-sounding lines in this poem, a terza rima. One line I like is: a gush of glamor as lush green adjourns. It helps the reader get the idea that autumn comes in full-blown and glamorous, as summer greens begin to retire. There is some great 'f' alliteration in the line: see the tattered fronds of all those ferns
This line: The trees' bold colors soon will shriek.
had a sound reference, but I thought it was missing a foot. The whole poem is well done in the way of meter, though, otherwise. Thanks for entering the contest!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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I truly appreciate the time you spent reading AUTUMN RAPTURE, your very kind praise--and your sharp eyes! I did leave out a foot in that line, the word ?maple.?
Comment from Gypsymooncat
I enjoyed how this poem flowed down the page, and also admired the form. A bit restrictive, but you crafted yours perfectly I thought. I also loved the presentation: the green font over the butter background and that beautiful picture - all balanced well to produce an excellent entry for the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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I enjoyed how this poem flowed down the page, and also admired the form. A bit restrictive, but you crafted yours perfectly I thought. I also loved the presentation: the green font over the butter background and that beautiful picture - all balanced well to produce an excellent entry for the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your high praise of AUTUMN RAPTURE. I am especially pleased you enjoyed its flow and presentation.
Comment from zanya
Nature's Pastorale so exquisitely portrayed here in this Terza Rima - the garden comes alive for the reader presented in such effective language and a lovely metaphor sitting comfortably at its heart
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Nature's Pastorale so exquisitely portrayed here in this Terza Rima - the garden comes alive for the reader presented in such effective language and a lovely metaphor sitting comfortably at its heart
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, zanya, for your effusive praise of AUTUMN RAPTURE and those six bright stars. I am so pleased the garden ?came alive? for you.
Comment from royowen
I'm so glad you associate autumn with nature's reflection of glorious death, not the end but a beginning. Winter is like Christ in repose for three days, and spring the resurrection. Beautifully written in rhyming triplets and a finely styled couplet, aba rhyming, a lovely work, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I'm so glad you associate autumn with nature's reflection of glorious death, not the end but a beginning. Winter is like Christ in repose for three days, and spring the resurrection. Beautifully written in rhyming triplets and a finely styled couplet, aba rhyming, a lovely work, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Roy, for your very kind praise of GRAND FINALE.
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Most welcome
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Well done
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem, is very lovely and well-written. Yes, each beautiful summer element that fall banishes is replaced with myriad new beauties unique to the incoming season.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Your poem, is very lovely and well-written. Yes, each beautiful summer element that fall banishes is replaced with myriad new beauties unique to the incoming season.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, Janice, for your kind praise of GRAND FINALE.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the beautiful summer garden that bows down and make a grand finale before winter strips him bare of any color and start its black an white scenes with cold temperatures.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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A very well-written poem about the beautiful summer garden that bows down and make a grand finale before winter strips him bare of any color and start its black an white scenes with cold temperatures.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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One can applaud the end of the growing season, but dread the coming of Winter. I know I do. Many thanks for your kind praise of GRAND FINALE, Sandra.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Grand Finale", is an extremely well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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"Grand Finale", is an extremely well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I am so pleased you found GRAND FINALE "spiritually-uplifting." That was my intent! Many thanks for your very kind praise.
Dear ANON,
It certainly was.
Take care and God bless,
the Duchess :)))
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A beautiful glimpse of the garden of Eden here in the form of a Terza Rima, I have a couple of suggestions for you below to improve the flow and grammar, I enjoyed your ambient words describing autumn colours with emotion, love Dolly x
(October (came) my garden's Autumn-kissed)
(I too have reached my crest, an early Fall.)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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A beautiful glimpse of the garden of Eden here in the form of a Terza Rima, I have a couple of suggestions for you below to improve the flow and grammar, I enjoyed your ambient words describing autumn colours with emotion, love Dolly x
(October (came) my garden's Autumn-kissed)
(I too have reached my crest, an early Fall.)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Hi Dolly. I appreciate your sharing GRAND FINALE and your very kind praise and tips.
I chose October's COME because I wanted the internal rhyme with Autumn. I love to play with sound in poetry. And TOO, when it means ALSO, is usually set off with commas.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This melodious autumn Terza Rima is a nice contest entry, October has come, you are humbled with Nature's pastorale, grand finale on this early Fall, your garden is autumn kissed, stunned with colour changes, well said, well done.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This melodious autumn Terza Rima is a nice contest entry, October has come, you are humbled with Nature's pastorale, grand finale on this early Fall, your garden is autumn kissed, stunned with colour changes, well said, well done.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, Alcreator, for your kind praise of my contest entry.
