Pushed Too Far
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Out for Blood"Shocking news sends Jeremy over the edge.
18 total reviews
Comment from Sylvia Page
You are lucky I had a six to offer for this brilliant episode. This is full of action. Paul fighting off a wild boar and Jessica also badly injured has lost the baby she was carrying. Wonder what Jeremy had in mind when he suddenly took off.
Best wishes
Sylvia
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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You are lucky I had a six to offer for this brilliant episode. This is full of action. Paul fighting off a wild boar and Jessica also badly injured has lost the baby she was carrying. Wonder what Jeremy had in mind when he suddenly took off.
Best wishes
Sylvia
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for such a marvelous review. I am so honored. Thank you for the encouraging words. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. You'll find the answer to your question in the next chapter.
Thank you again for all your support, your encouragement and friendship. It means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I really liked how you settle the scene :"An eerie stillness hangs heavy in the crisp night air. The frigid northern wind that had been blowing just moments ago is completely still. The boisterous calls of the nocturnal wildlife have completely ceased. " You keep the narration going on multiple levels, in one Paul is fighting for his life, in the other Jessica and Jeremy are getting closer. I can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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I really liked how you settle the scene :"An eerie stillness hangs heavy in the crisp night air. The frigid northern wind that had been blowing just moments ago is completely still. The boisterous calls of the nocturnal wildlife have completely ceased. " You keep the narration going on multiple levels, in one Paul is fighting for his life, in the other Jessica and Jeremy are getting closer. I can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your terrific review. I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter. That you liked my description and the split scenes.
Thank you again for all your support. It means a lot to me, take care.
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You are welcome:)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Even though I was not going to care about Paul you snaped the setting and plot in such a way that we found ourselves taken up with the danger the character was in and the efforts he was making to save himself. We might even have secretly been rooting for him. But then we are now left wondering what happens. And I am caught up waiting for Chap 6. I have to give this an A+
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Even though I was not going to care about Paul you snaped the setting and plot in such a way that we found ourselves taken up with the danger the character was in and the efforts he was making to save himself. We might even have secretly been rooting for him. But then we are now left wondering what happens. And I am caught up waiting for Chap 6. I have to give this an A+
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for such a marvelous review, and the A+ I am honored. I'm glad you secretly rooted for Paul. He needs all the help he can get. Chapter 6 is in the making.
Thank you again for such a fantastic review, You made my week, take care.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well it sounds not so good for Mr. Paul. Sounds like a goner, maybe. Jessica seems to have her memory back. Now Jerr is off to be a hero again. Waiting for the next chapter. Rox
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Well it sounds not so good for Mr. Paul. Sounds like a goner, maybe. Jessica seems to have her memory back. Now Jerr is off to be a hero again. Waiting for the next chapter. Rox
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter. You're right, things are looking pretty bad for Paul between the boar, Jeremy and the police. It'll be a race to see who gets to him first. Jessica remembers some things but not all yet.
Thank you again for all your help, support and friendship. It means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from KatyM
Really good chapter. You had me drawn into the chapter when Paul was being attacked by the boar. The only thing is, I missed the part about Jeremy's disease. What does he have? I didn't see anything that needed to be changed. Hopefully, this is long enough to get posted.
Everything is good over here. At the end of October we go to Texas to see my sister and friends. Can't wait. We are flying this time instead of driving.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Really good chapter. You had me drawn into the chapter when Paul was being attacked by the boar. The only thing is, I missed the part about Jeremy's disease. What does he have? I didn't see anything that needed to be changed. Hopefully, this is long enough to get posted.
Everything is good over here. At the end of October we go to Texas to see my sister and friends. Can't wait. We are flying this time instead of driving.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your continuous reviews they are always greatly appreciated. I explained his disease chronic tic disorder a form of terretts in the first chapter, but you're right, that was four chapters ago. I put it in the notes at the bottom, cause I couldn't find a good place to add it where it wouldn't take away from the story. I will be sure to add it in the next chapter. Maybe go back to 3 or 4 and add it there. Thanks for pointing that out.
I'm glad things are good with you. I hope you have a safe trip, have lots of fun.
Thank you again for all your help, support and friendship. It means the world to me, take care.
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Well we are flying into Houston and will see our peeps we know there. We used to live there for a long while. Then will go see my sister and her hubby. Then James wants to get up to Dallas to see his family. Not sure how that's going to go. Whenever we are around they don't seem to ever want to see us. He was adopted when he was 2. Parents long gone. Only the cousins now. laters.
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It sounds like an adventure. I hope you have a blast.
You guys must love to live near the ocean, choosing the states you did.
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lol Well, I was born and raised in Corpus Christi, Texas. Went to Houston for a job in 1985 after graduating UT at Austin. Met James in 1989 and we married in May of 1990. Left Texas in 1997 and went to Georgia then eventually went to SC and have been in Charleston area for about 19 years now.
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Sounds like you like coasts as much as I do mountains. I was born in Ill, but once mama moved me to Missouri I couldn't get enough. I've lived in MO, AR, and Co.
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I love mountains too but not enough to deal with the cold! lol I'm definitely a beach bum girl. lol
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Heck, Sparky's poop is a lot smarter than him. Better looking too." (I love this line. my friend.)
This is well written and interesting. The reader can identify with the characters.
I love the pig climbing the tree!~Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Heck, Sparky's poop is a lot smarter than him. Better looking too." (I love this line. my friend.)
This is well written and interesting. The reader can identify with the characters.
I love the pig climbing the tree!~Debbie
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter, Jeremy's bit of humor. He's a sweet, fun-loving guy. It's too bad the others are too quick to judge to see it. Believe it or not, a boar can climb six feet. Not any easy feat for a 300lb beast.
Thank you again for your kind review and for all your encouragement. It means a lot to me, take care.
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Six feet! That's amazing!~Debbie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Some nasty, exciting stuff here. I can't believe you write this when I have a hard time just reading it. Good job, though. It's a good thing that Jess lost the baby. That would have held her back for ten years.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Some nasty, exciting stuff here. I can't believe you write this when I have a hard time just reading it. Good job, though. It's a good thing that Jess lost the baby. That would have held her back for ten years.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your review. I'm glad you found it exciting despite the gruesome stuff. The hospital scene was written with you in mind. There will be more romance to come, I promise.
Thank you again for all your help, encouragement and friendship. It means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from forestport12
Nice description in the opening narrative to set a mood and help the reader visualize the setting. Very dramatic but realistic with the whole wild boar thing. Not something to trifle with. Made a big impact toward the rest of the installment.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Nice description in the opening narrative to set a mood and help the reader visualize the setting. Very dramatic but realistic with the whole wild boar thing. Not something to trifle with. Made a big impact toward the rest of the installment.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your fantastic review, I am very honored. I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter that you found it realistic, was able to picture it in your mind. Those are the things I struggle with most.
Thank you again for such a marvelous review and for all your praise. Your help support and friendship always means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mistydawn
I must say you know how to draw me to your writing. You have a clever way of leaving us in suspense what happens next and direct our attention to another exciting story you are writing which is well worth reading.
Gert
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Hello Mistydawn
I must say you know how to draw me to your writing. You have a clever way of leaving us in suspense what happens next and direct our attention to another exciting story you are writing which is well worth reading.
Gert
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for all your praise I am so glad you continue to enjoy my suspenseful stories. That you find them a worthy read. Your encouraging words and friendship mean the world to me, take care.
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You are welcome Mistdawn
Gert
Comment from w.j.debi
Great job creating the setting in the first paragraph to get the reader right into the scene. The action is immediate and what is more terrifying than being attacked by a wild animal, and a boar no less? Your blow-by-blow description puts us right in the moment. Then you leave us hanging as Paul falls to the ground. He may have been safer being found by the police.
Excellent job with the dialogue between Jeremy and Jessica to show their bond. Excellent internal dialogue for Jeremy.
Two cliff hangers in one chapter. It will be interesting to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Great job creating the setting in the first paragraph to get the reader right into the scene. The action is immediate and what is more terrifying than being attacked by a wild animal, and a boar no less? Your blow-by-blow description puts us right in the moment. Then you leave us hanging as Paul falls to the ground. He may have been safer being found by the police.
Excellent job with the dialogue between Jeremy and Jessica to show their bond. Excellent internal dialogue for Jeremy.
Two cliff hangers in one chapter. It will be interesting to see what happens next.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for such an encouraging review. Knowing what you liked will help me with the following chapters. And it's how I learn and grow as a writer.
You're right he'd be a lot safer with the police. He has the boar to contend with and Jeremy is on his way.
Thank you again for taking the time to read my story it means a lot to me, take care.
