Consumption
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Rayly Any Hope Left for Me?"A Collection of Heart Felt Poetry.
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Comment from Lulube
Seriously, you are not heading for another try at suicide are you? You can't give up with the little time that we have here on earth anyway. You know that we all pass through this lifetime so why rush the end of now? There is meds that will stop this low down thinking, give them a try. won't you?
lulube
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Seriously, you are not heading for another try at suicide are you? You can't give up with the little time that we have here on earth anyway. You know that we all pass through this lifetime so why rush the end of now? There is meds that will stop this low down thinking, give them a try. won't you?
lulube
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Suicide?
My Ex Girlfriend.
Tee, hee,hee?
Ricky
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you sly dog, you!!
lulube
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Interesting use of metaphor at the end with riding the next chariot - calls Elijah to mind for me. This is well penned and emotionally stirring as are all of your posts. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Interesting use of metaphor at the end with riding the next chariot - calls Elijah to mind for me. This is well penned and emotionally stirring as are all of your posts. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thanks Mystic for this review.
Ricky
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is one of your better poems/writings, my friend. I am glad you keep presenting info on organ donation as it is so much needed. I can't be an organ donor because of my health, but will donate my body for research/science~Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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This is one of your better poems/writings, my friend. I am glad you keep presenting info on organ donation as it is so much needed. I can't be an organ donor because of my health, but will donate my body for research/science~Debbie
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thanks Deb and do this about 500 times.
Ricky
Comment from Iza Deleanu
We all try to live up to his calling, and some of us are doing this better than other. I like the ending of your poem is full of hope :" I'm going to hitch a ride in the next Chariot and head on my way/because life for Me? well it's become more than just another day." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your stories.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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We all try to live up to his calling, and some of us are doing this better than other. I like the ending of your poem is full of hope :" I'm going to hitch a ride in the next Chariot and head on my way/because life for Me? well it's become more than just another day." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your stories.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thanks Iza.
Ricky
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
So sorry about your son. Organ donations are a great way to help people live. I'm sure if your son donated, he lives on. If he was your only son, that is sad enough.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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So sorry about your son. Organ donations are a great way to help people live. I'm sure if your son donated, he lives on. If he was your only son, that is sad enough.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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At Age Eighteen?
They don't realize that Death could be around the corner.
We of course decided.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Your poem is soberinh and dramatic of impending death. The cadence seems right.
My conservative side sees the message of conditional salvation. It's as if you're in suspense whether you'll be accepted by Divinity.
Toward the last stanza, you cite your gooness. That imlies self righteousness, which directly conflicts with Divine Grace.
Perhaps, I've misread this ; correct me if I'm wrong.
You indicate some humility. Therefore, a positive attitude toward God seems to clash in conditional salvation. Conditional means uncertainty, and hoping personal good, or virtue, will stack up to equal or overcome the negative.
Though conservative in background, I'm actually progressive. My assurance of Heaven is my discipleship granted me, that I harmonize with Godliness.
Don
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Your poem is soberinh and dramatic of impending death. The cadence seems right.
My conservative side sees the message of conditional salvation. It's as if you're in suspense whether you'll be accepted by Divinity.
Toward the last stanza, you cite your gooness. That imlies self righteousness, which directly conflicts with Divine Grace.
Perhaps, I've misread this ; correct me if I'm wrong.
You indicate some humility. Therefore, a positive attitude toward God seems to clash in conditional salvation. Conditional means uncertainty, and hoping personal good, or virtue, will stack up to equal or overcome the negative.
Though conservative in background, I'm actually progressive. My assurance of Heaven is my discipleship granted me, that I harmonize with Godliness.
Don
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thanks Don
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from country ranch writer
Sometimes we have to let go of our love ones so others can life on. It is a selfless act of love for others. So great a story as life goes on.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Sometimes we have to let go of our love ones so others can life on. It is a selfless act of love for others. So great a story as life goes on.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thanks for your review and kind thoughts.
Ricky
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Smiles
Comment from Wabigoon
Ricky
Yeah, okay. Hey, just knuckle under, huh! Don't fight back. Don't go to the damned spot where your son was (gunned down) hit and killed. Just play it as if it's all okay. Everything cool, yeah. sit in the bar and take a drink and try to bury that anger about what happened. Hey, shit, it's all figured out, programmed. Has NOTHING to do with you and your will and your feelings and your agonized love which is nothing like anything I have sen before. Get over it! But, it seems you can't. What, there's a crossroads, a kid, a smashed up bike, a dead body, Hey, dream into that doctor. I have been there. I was hit from behind on the top of the Berkeley Hill in Berkeley California by a hit and run driver and left for dead. I was not dead and I doubt your son is dead and...if he is to you I think you should get him back! Now.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Ricky
Yeah, okay. Hey, just knuckle under, huh! Don't fight back. Don't go to the damned spot where your son was (gunned down) hit and killed. Just play it as if it's all okay. Everything cool, yeah. sit in the bar and take a drink and try to bury that anger about what happened. Hey, shit, it's all figured out, programmed. Has NOTHING to do with you and your will and your feelings and your agonized love which is nothing like anything I have sen before. Get over it! But, it seems you can't. What, there's a crossroads, a kid, a smashed up bike, a dead body, Hey, dream into that doctor. I have been there. I was hit from behind on the top of the Berkeley Hill in Berkeley California by a hit and run driver and left for dead. I was not dead and I doubt your son is dead and...if he is to you I think you should get him back! Now.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thanks for your comments and review.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
After the brain dead, Jason asked if any hope left for him, he had been a good son of his father, his life is pure, so he thinks the day like another day; not worried about death; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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After the brain dead, Jason asked if any hope left for him, he had been a good son of his father, his life is pure, so he thinks the day like another day; not worried about death; well said, well done.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thanks again my friend.
Doctor Ricky 1024
