Could I Be Losing You
Trying to rebuild a fading love45 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
If there's a window in heaven where messages are read... I know she heard you, Jaybird. You are very steep with your poetry. I can feel your emotions as they pass the heart. Your 25 years my senior I hope I have love in my heart like you. Thank you for sharing a piece of yours.
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If there's a window in heaven where messages are read... I know she heard you, Jaybird. You are very steep with your poetry. I can feel your emotions as they pass the heart. Your 25 years my senior I hope I have love in my heart like you. Thank you for sharing a piece of yours.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I am very sorry for your loss. You were so fortunate to be able to have the happiness you sought
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I am very sorry for your loss. You were so fortunate to be able to have the happiness you sought
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Just imagining, she is no more, but you are trying as you wish to rebuild a fading love in memories and appealing to her to make your love as bright as noon, well said, well done.
Typos:
More then I could realize -- More than I could realize
from the morn, til fullest moon -- from the morn till full moon or from the morn till the full moon
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Just imagining, she is no more, but you are trying as you wish to rebuild a fading love in memories and appealing to her to make your love as bright as noon, well said, well done.
Typos:
More then I could realize -- More than I could realize
from the morn, til fullest moon -- from the morn till full moon or from the morn till the full moon
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very well-written, moving, romantic poem spoken from the standpoint of a lovelorn man whose love has said goodbye. Of course, your notes tell how well that worked out. Line 1: Then should be than.
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This is a very well-written, moving, romantic poem spoken from the standpoint of a lovelorn man whose love has said goodbye. Of course, your notes tell how well that worked out. Line 1: Then should be than.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Mia Twysted
I am so sorry about your loss but am glad you had that kind of love. The poem left me feeling wanted and loved. Very well done.
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I am so sorry about your loss but am glad you had that kind of love. The poem left me feeling wanted and loved. Very well done.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
