Could I Be Losing You
Trying to rebuild a fading love45 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a rich poem, that I find enormously nostalgic.
I particularly liked the phrases:
What once was true is true no more,
and
Please hear my call.
As an aging reader, as well as the actual words I appreciated the presentation (large words, good contrast without umbragenic olours. Thanks)
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This is a rich poem, that I find enormously nostalgic.
I particularly liked the phrases:
What once was true is true no more,
and
Please hear my call.
As an aging reader, as well as the actual words I appreciated the presentation (large words, good contrast without umbragenic olours. Thanks)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from godlucifer
love remind us of fulfillment and happiness through out our life. your love was fulfill and your happiness was treasure with memories of a fading love. your poem was well written and well express. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
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love remind us of fulfillment and happiness through out our life. your love was fulfill and your happiness was treasure with memories of a fading love. your poem was well written and well express. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your love poem, Jay. I enjoyed reading it. Your words flow smoothly with an interesting rhyme scheme that works well. I like how the last short lines of each verse have the monorhyme. Your message is strong. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
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You did a great job with your love poem, Jay. I enjoyed reading it. Your words flow smoothly with an interesting rhyme scheme that works well. I like how the last short lines of each verse have the monorhyme. Your message is strong. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written and heartfelt poem about a love that will last for eternity beyond the grave. A true love never let the other down or in making them look like the fool.
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A very well-written and heartfelt poem about a love that will last for eternity beyond the grave. A true love never let the other down or in making them look like the fool.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Teri7
Jay, This is a very well written poem of love and wanting. You used very good descriptive words. It is amazing that you wrote this poem in 1984 and so many things have happened since then. I enjoyed reading and reviewing my friend. May God bless you! Teri
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Jay, This is a very well written poem of love and wanting. You used very good descriptive words. It is amazing that you wrote this poem in 1984 and so many things have happened since then. I enjoyed reading and reviewing my friend. May God bless you! Teri
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A true lament that cries for attention. It seems you got it and married.
The poem is well structured and definitively states its case in no uncertain terms. Well done, as usual.
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A true lament that cries for attention. It seems you got it and married.
The poem is well structured and definitively states its case in no uncertain terms. Well done, as usual.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Awe! This is a sad poem, and a happy sad ending from your notes! I love how you rhymed the last line of each verse with the next verse! Did she ever get to read this one? I'm sure you count your blessings to even have won her back. xoxo
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Awe! This is a sad poem, and a happy sad ending from your notes! I love how you rhymed the last line of each verse with the next verse! Did she ever get to read this one? I'm sure you count your blessings to even have won her back. xoxo
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a lovely poem about love. Words can express a lot of their treasures, experiences in a person's life. If we didn't have love and faith in each other and our God above, it would be a tough world to live in.
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What a lovely poem about love. Words can express a lot of their treasures, experiences in a person's life. If we didn't have love and faith in each other and our God above, it would be a tough world to live in.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Iza Deleanu
So sorry for your loss and your beautiful poem is a constant reminder of your blessed love. Pain will always be there, but bringing your happy memories will smooth this pain. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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So sorry for your loss and your beautiful poem is a constant reminder of your blessed love. Pain will always be there, but bringing your happy memories will smooth this pain. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Jaybird, this is a very moving poem - biographical, and your wording is beautiful. Sad when a loved one dies - but life goes on. Lovely read. Thank you for posting. Regards Dorothy
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Hello Jaybird, this is a very moving poem - biographical, and your wording is beautiful. Sad when a loved one dies - but life goes on. Lovely read. Thank you for posting. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
