Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello jaybird1
I like that you used free verse for your poem, especially,
how you expressed your felling- is well done with so much
love.

Could you love me, love me soon,
from the morn, til fullest moon
and make my life as bright as noon-
Please hear my call.
Gert

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2019

Comment from evesayshi

Excellent

In my opinion, a lovely verse to a beloved partner, wishing for love's renewal, though dimmed by time, still true and cherished. My heartfelt condolences for the loss of your wife and your words of hope, with apparent love and commitment...

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2019

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hello Jay. Yes, I remember you told us you lost your bride in numerous pieces of poetry. Each poem, just as this one were profound in their voicing your wondrous love for her and the tremendous hurt of your loss. Bless you, Jay. Bob

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2019

Comment from Cedar

Exceptional

What a beautiful romantic poem, Jay. It's so sad that we all ust face losing the ones we love more than anything.

However, our lives go on until it's our turn to take that Heavenly flight.

Take care...Bill

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2019

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I adored the sentiments, the form, the flow and the rhymes and this reminded me of an Emily Dickinson poem, very well executed and from the heart, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2019

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

This is a beautifully penned poem with excellent rhymes. I am so sorry you lost such a true love. Sounds trite, I know--at least you have good memories~Debbie

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2019

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

Love can conquer all things I believe. Sorry, you lost your love so soon. Thank you for share this intimate story through poetry my friend.
God bless
Steve

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2019

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

Hello Jaybird. I enjoyed the story in the poem. The rhyme and meter was excellent as usual but the verse carried the story. It's a nice homage to to your wife. Robert

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019

Comment from Dihalia

Excellent

I liked your poem. Its really romantic! I liked your structure, four stanzas. I liked how you expressed the emotions and told your poem as if it was a story. Keep writing! I greatly enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This definitely tugs at the heart strings, Jay. The lonesome feeling of yearning filled with hope and a little fear is brought into our hearts through your finely crafted poem.

So happy to learn it turned out well in the end for you two. :)

Many thanks for sharing.

Gloria

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019