Could I Be Losing You
Trying to rebuild a fading love45 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
To face life without the echo of your heartbeat, the answer to your questions, the questions you love to answer, etc. It is one of the mist difficult tasks that the surviving spouse has to endure. Happily my wife and I are still together and even if we should separate, as long as I could on occasion hear her voice, see her face I would be OK. If, however she should leave this life. I do not know how I could go on. So I feel your pain, but not as deeply as I would if I were truly in your shoes.
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To face life without the echo of your heartbeat, the answer to your questions, the questions you love to answer, etc. It is one of the mist difficult tasks that the surviving spouse has to endure. Happily my wife and I are still together and even if we should separate, as long as I could on occasion hear her voice, see her face I would be OK. If, however she should leave this life. I do not know how I could go on. So I feel your pain, but not as deeply as I would if I were truly in your shoes.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
Comment from papa55mike
What a beautiful love poem, that worked! It's always those flashing eyes that get you! Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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What a beautiful love poem, that worked! It's always those flashing eyes that get you! Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
Comment from Boogienights
This is lovely. I'll bet she was very special to inspire those beautiful words. This touched my heart because i too have a love like that. Thanks for sharing.
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This is lovely. I'll bet she was very special to inspire those beautiful words. This touched my heart because i too have a love like that. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Jay!
What a moving and heartfelt poetic offering. I so enjoy reading your verses about your marriage. Of course, "love wins again!" A beautiful rendering...
Thank you!
diane
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Hello Jay!
What a moving and heartfelt poetic offering. I so enjoy reading your verses about your marriage. Of course, "love wins again!" A beautiful rendering...
Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
Comment from dmt1967
This is a beautiful poem, full of tenderness and love. It gets you in the heart as one reads the words and sees the love of two people blossom. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a beautiful poem, full of tenderness and love. It gets you in the heart as one reads the words and sees the love of two people blossom. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
Comment from QC Poet
Interesting format with this poetic offering, reads as three rhyming lines and a comment line. Very smoothly blended together and
a pretty unique format. Thank you for Sharing your creative style of writing. Blessings to you.
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Interesting format with this poetic offering, reads as three rhyming lines and a comment line. Very smoothly blended together and
a pretty unique format. Thank you for Sharing your creative style of writing. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
Comment from Coco Jane
Neat love poem.
In line 6, consider using "since fate came IN and closed the door" to maintain the iambic meter.
I especially like the first stanza. That alone is a poem unto itself.
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Neat love poem.
In line 6, consider using "since fate came IN and closed the door" to maintain the iambic meter.
I especially like the first stanza. That alone is a poem unto itself.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
Comment from Sally Law
Wow, this is so romantic, Jaybird. I can't imagine any woman saying no to this one, of course unless she is married. Beautifully penned on your signature blue formatting. Sending you my best today as always.
Sally :+)
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Wow, this is so romantic, Jaybird. I can't imagine any woman saying no to this one, of course unless she is married. Beautifully penned on your signature blue formatting. Sending you my best today as always.
Sally :+)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
Comment from Gail Denham
This again is a good reflection of your feelings back then - and well written form of rhyme. It would seem you lost that love back in that time - and it is a sad time.
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This again is a good reflection of your feelings back then - and well written form of rhyme. It would seem you lost that love back in that time - and it is a sad time.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
Comment from Reese Turner
Poetry that rhymes is not only good, it is poetry to me. Otherwise, it is prose or rambling. I assume you wrote this piece 36 years ago and I will hope that love worked out. I enjoyed it.
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Poetry that rhymes is not only good, it is poetry to me. Otherwise, it is prose or rambling. I assume you wrote this piece 36 years ago and I will hope that love worked out. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
