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Aaron's Dragons

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An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs

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Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
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I like this little adventure that you've served up for us here. The bored lad has discovered a rare find. It will be very interesting to see what hatches out of the eggs. I hope that nobody goes to the house that was suppose to be inhabited by a witch. Perhaps a witch may show up. You've got me interested! I enjoyed reading this interesting, engaging, and very well written work. Well done! Keep them coming!

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
    Thanks. I'm so glad you like this little adventure. Chapters 2 and 3 are now posted.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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A very well written and interesting chapter, my friend. I'm excited too see what hatches from the 13 eggs. I read the second chapter first, so I know about the first one~Debbie

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
    Thanks. Glad you're enjoying the story. I have a few surprises planned.
Comment from Adri7enne
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I enjoyed your opening chapter. Your old knight speaks with a southern drawl. Lol! You leave a lot of room for imagination to conjure up all kinds of possibilities. I'm sure I'm going to enjoy reading you. I look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
    Thanks. I'm going to get busy with chapter 3 tomorrow.
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Hello Cindy!
Oh! How I do enjoy dragon stories, and yours is no exception! So pleased I happened upon your delightful story this afternoon. It flows well, shows creativity, and leaves the reader wondering about all those eggs!
If I were to offer one suggestion it would be to edit the following sentence: An egg, laid by a creature long believed to have been driven from the world, a forest dragon.
(An egg, laid by a forest dragon, a creature long believed to have been driven from the world.)

Thank you for sharing and best wishes! I am looking forward to Chapter 2!
diane

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thanks. Glad you're enjoying my story. I'll take another look at that line.
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Cindy, so here I am, reading the first chapter of your book. Now what could be in the other eggs. Just normal chickens I suppose. I've gone all Hans Christian Andersen here, but remember I grew up in Denmark, after all. I'm glad I've caught up now and can follow along. All best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thanks. These 'chickens' are guaranteed to be anything but ordinary. Did Hans do 'The Woodman and the Goblins?' Seems to me it might have been him.
reply by Ulla on 23-Sep-2019
    No, that it was not. That was SamuelFrench? What I was thinking of was the ducling eeg that turned into a beautiful swan. Nothing to do with a dragon, of cours, but a similar thought. Ulla:)))
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Cindy Warren

How nice to meet you here on Fanstory. Smiles, I read the first chapter of your fantasy tale of the found dragon eggs.
I like how fun I had imaging in my mind of the dragon eggs will they all hatch.?

Gert

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
    Thanks. They'll hatch. I just posted the second chapter. The first one hatches. I hope you will enjoy the story.
reply by Gert sherwood on 22-Sep-2019
    Hello Cindy I will look for the 2nd chapter and book mark it
    Gert
Comment from damommy
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I think Aaron's going to have thirteen pet dragons. I'm glad he didn't turn them in. It will interesting to see what does hatch. I have no suggestions for you. I think you're doing a lovely job on your own. I'm eager to read the next chapter. Well done! Excellent writing.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
    Thanks. I just posted chapter two. There will be some interesting creatures hatching. I hope you will stay tuned and enjoy the story.
Comment from Loren .
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This can go in so many different directions. Is it philosophical? That would be my direction as it could pose some profound questions for us to consider. Loren

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
    Thanks. It isn't too deep. Some of the dragons are nice, some not so much. I hope you will stay tuned and enjoy the story.
Comment from Katherine M. Kean
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This is an exciting start to the book. I always love it when the reader is thrown in at the deep end! This is only the second time I have setout to read a book as it grows, so I am really looking forwards to the experience.
My eggs would contain dragons of the size and colour of countries: green great Welsh ones (that are impossible) and small blue Scottish ones to start with. I would also have one that never learned how to breathe fire, and another that breathed flames of many different colours according to the different chemical elements (I have a deep, long-ago memory that Bariumflames are blue).

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
    Thanks. I hope you will stay tuned and enjoy the story. The dragons will be all sizes and colors. Some correspond with the elements earth, air, fire, and water. I like the idea of countries, perhaps a huge protective Chinese dragon.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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What a great start! I love fantasy stories about dragons and medieval times. Such a romantic period! Since you have ideas for half of the eggs, perhaps you could develop the rest into either the female counterpart (since you need male and female to carry on the line) or some could be twins. Hope this might be helpful. I look forward to enjoying this as you post more! xoxo

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
    Thanks! I hope you will stay tuned and enjoy the story. The hatchlings will be all colors, some corresponding to the elements. I'm thinking some are hybrids. This promises to be a fun write.
reply by Diana L Crawford on 22-Sep-2019
    I can?t wait! There are only a few stories that draw me in here and this will be one I will love following! xoxo