Once in a While
Sometimes, this old house gets lonely...20 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very nicely done acrostic poem. Yes the nostalgia does creep in every once in a while. I was told often enough, enjoy them while you can, but as you know all was not perfect and years fly by and then they are gone. But remembering the really fun times and all the love helps to assuage the fact that you don't have them in the backyard anymore Good Luck.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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A very nicely done acrostic poem. Yes the nostalgia does creep in every once in a while. I was told often enough, enjoy them while you can, but as you know all was not perfect and years fly by and then they are gone. But remembering the really fun times and all the love helps to assuage the fact that you don't have them in the backyard anymore Good Luck.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful review -- always so good to hear from you!
Comment from Kazzawin
It's tough looking back and longing for happier times. Especially when it involves children. I think that has to be a memory shared by many.
You have done a great job with your acrostic, the words really fit and flow nicely and the topic, whilst slightly somber, works well. Nice artwork too : )
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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It's tough looking back and longing for happier times. Especially when it involves children. I think that has to be a memory shared by many.
You have done a great job with your acrostic, the words really fit and flow nicely and the topic, whilst slightly somber, works well. Nice artwork too : )
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thanks much for this great review -- much appreciated!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I really like this true to form and well thought out work you've penned here. I really like the beautiful story that it tells and the way you were able to cause it to flow so effortlessly. This is good work and I enjoyed reading it. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I really like this true to form and well thought out work you've penned here. I really like the beautiful story that it tells and the way you were able to cause it to flow so effortlessly. This is good work and I enjoyed reading it. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thanks much for this awesome review, Jeffrey!
Comment from judester
They call them grandchildren...ha ha. Great acrostic poem, smooth and evokes a vivid portrait of a wistful mom. The artwork is perfect. My favorite so far. Cheers, judester
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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They call them grandchildren...ha ha. Great acrostic poem, smooth and evokes a vivid portrait of a wistful mom. The artwork is perfect. My favorite so far. Cheers, judester
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Good morning and thank you for your review. I did want to give you a heads-up, however, that this post is written by an author you have muted. I'm not exactly sure all the details involved in a 'mute', but, perhaps, there has been an error you may want to contact the site manager about...?
Have a good day up there (from the mystery author who has no idea what provoked the muting, but does miss reading your posts). Take care of you and yours and happy Fall.... :)
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"Willow" probably should not be capitalized.
"Voice" should be "voices" as it refers to more than one child.
When the nest grows empty the change can be difficult.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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"Willow" probably should not be capitalized.
"Voice" should be "voices" as it refers to more than one child.
When the nest grows empty the change can be difficult.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very lovely, descriptive poem--sweet nostalgia at its best, remembering when the kids were still at home, . . . One thing: Your poem
says, "Din . . . would dance." Did you mean the kids would dance?
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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This is a very lovely, descriptive poem--sweet nostalgia at its best, remembering when the kids were still at home, . . . One thing: Your poem
says, "Din . . . would dance." Did you mean the kids would dance?
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the review -- much appreciated! Din = Noise.... joyful din = joyful noise.
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I know what "din" means. My question was this: Did you mean that noise danced? :-)
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Yep. ;) :) :)
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is wonderful, and poignant in its sadness. I love the title and the acrostic that goes along with it. The flow is nice and easy, and the rhymes work well. My favorite line is the third one, "Chortles and squeals ignite the air..." Not only does it bring up the sounds in my ears so clearly, but it allows the reader to feel the joy of the writer who misses these sounds coming from their own children from long ago. The artwork is beautiful and adds a nice flavor to the poem. Thank you for sharing your memories with us.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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This is wonderful, and poignant in its sadness. I love the title and the acrostic that goes along with it. The flow is nice and easy, and the rhymes work well. My favorite line is the third one, "Chortles and squeals ignite the air..." Not only does it bring up the sounds in my ears so clearly, but it allows the reader to feel the joy of the writer who misses these sounds coming from their own children from long ago. The artwork is beautiful and adds a nice flavor to the poem. Thank you for sharing your memories with us.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your wonderfully encouraging review!
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You are very welcome.
Jesse
Comment from Joan E.
I relished the symbolic, nest artwork you selected to reinforce your theme. Your reminiscences in the acrostic resonated for me as well. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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I relished the symbolic, nest artwork you selected to reinforce your theme. Your reminiscences in the acrostic resonated for me as well. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the review, friend.
Comment from pome lover
very good and a different and original choice for accompanying picture.
This poem portrays the lament of the aging and the lonely - memories of the young in one's life.
You captured the feeling well with good descriptive phrases.
pome lover
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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very good and a different and original choice for accompanying picture.
This poem portrays the lament of the aging and the lonely - memories of the young in one's life.
You captured the feeling well with good descriptive phrases.
pome lover
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the review, friend.
Comment from jenintorre
'Once in a while' is a lovely poem. I really enjoyed reading it and savouring the images that it created. A very well constructed Acrostic poem. Good luck in the contest. Jen.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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'Once in a while' is a lovely poem. I really enjoyed reading it and savouring the images that it created. A very well constructed Acrostic poem. Good luck in the contest. Jen.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you.
