Dawn Light
Poem 1-5-76 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Zanya... I like this verse that implies that as light enters a situation or problem, the fear inherent in the unknown flees and is scattered by the awareness the light brings. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Hello Zanya... I like this verse that implies that as light enters a situation or problem, the fear inherent in the unknown flees and is scattered by the awareness the light brings. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Ulla
Hi Zanya, I liked this 1-5-7 poem a lot. Yes, as it becomes light all the demons lurking in the dark of the night dispersed. I wish you good luck with the judges. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Hi Zanya, I liked this 1-5-7 poem a lot. Yes, as it becomes light all the demons lurking in the dark of the night dispersed. I wish you good luck with the judges. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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And thanks for reading zanya
Comment from persevere
This poem epitomises the breaking of dawn as an antidote to any fears that may have been harboured in the dark. The accompanying illustration is ideal. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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This poem epitomises the breaking of dawn as an antidote to any fears that may have been harboured in the dark. The accompanying illustration is ideal. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautiful and oh-so-peaceful contest offering...even your pic evokes gentle feelings of ease in the reader... ;) I would only suggest, perhaps, the use of a comma after "earth" so that there's not a 'bump' making the reader go back and reread to figure out where the 'change' happened.. ;) :) Thanx for sharing such a lovely vision and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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A beautiful and oh-so-peaceful contest offering...even your pic evokes gentle feelings of ease in the reader... ;) I would only suggest, perhaps, the use of a comma after "earth" so that there's not a 'bump' making the reader go back and reread to figure out where the 'change' happened.. ;) :) Thanx for sharing such a lovely vision and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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A considered and frank response- very much appreciated zanya
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is true to the Senryu format. The picture displayed is one of tranquility and the poem presents a similar atmosphere. Hopefully, it is also true in real life. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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This is true to the Senryu format. The picture displayed is one of tranquility and the poem presents a similar atmosphere. Hopefully, it is also true in real life. Keep writing.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 1-5-7 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest my friend! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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This is a very well written 1-5-7 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest my friend! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
