Tanka(daffodil ballet)
An ekprastic poem30 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Pam, This is a very well written and very nice tanka poem you have penned for the contest about the daffodils ballet. You used great words and your painting went really well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
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Pam, This is a very well written and very nice tanka poem you have penned for the contest about the daffodils ballet. You used great words and your painting went really well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
Comment from dragonpoet
NIcely done ekphrastic poem. It uses dance as a extended metaphor and describes the foliage well. I like that you use your own artwork.
Good luck and keep writing
Joan
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NIcely done ekphrastic poem. It uses dance as a extended metaphor and describes the foliage well. I like that you use your own artwork.
Good luck and keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Lovely and how multi-talented are you? Bright, uplifting, both in the poetry and the artwork. Highly impressive. A great thing to see and read on this very early Sunday morning. Keep up the good work. This is one that would be lovely framed and hanging up someplace! Consider marketing it!
Wendy
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Lovely and how multi-talented are you? Bright, uplifting, both in the poetry and the artwork. Highly impressive. A great thing to see and read on this very early Sunday morning. Keep up the good work. This is one that would be lovely framed and hanging up someplace! Consider marketing it!
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
Comment from Mark D. R.
Your painting is very good Pam!
Not sure if this type of verse needs a period after your second line; the comma after 'colors' is your poetic style.
If you want a new alliterative title for your oil on canvas artwork, I'd suggest: "Dancing Daffodils"!
Good luck in the future voting.
Mark
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Your painting is very good Pam!
Not sure if this type of verse needs a period after your second line; the comma after 'colors' is your poetic style.
If you want a new alliterative title for your oil on canvas artwork, I'd suggest: "Dancing Daffodils"!
Good luck in the future voting.
Mark
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
Comment from karenina
Hello stranger! How are you feeling? Your painting (with those clever little ballerinas embedded!) and your poem come together like cream in my coffee! Really unique to have your tanka in all lower case...kind of "e.e.cummings meets Basho!"--Smiles to you...Karenina
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Hello stranger! How are you feeling? Your painting (with those clever little ballerinas embedded!) and your poem come together like cream in my coffee! Really unique to have your tanka in all lower case...kind of "e.e.cummings meets Basho!"--Smiles to you...Karenina
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
Comment from Gail Denham
How cute - and apt as we view the first daffodil blooms of spring. It's the yellow spots now under the trees, where only snow was a few weeks ago. Your poem also reminder me of the poem "I gazed and gazed with little thought what wealth to me this scene had fraught" - we had to learn that in school and I love it still. Dancing with the daffodils.
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How cute - and apt as we view the first daffodil blooms of spring. It's the yellow spots now under the trees, where only snow was a few weeks ago. Your poem also reminder me of the poem "I gazed and gazed with little thought what wealth to me this scene had fraught" - we had to learn that in school and I love it still. Dancing with the daffodils.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
Comment from Susan Larson
What a vivid imagination you have for both words and pictures. I can see my daffodils dancing on their willowy stems, just as a ballerina might do. I can see a video of dancing flowers set to soft music being played in a doctor's waiting room to calm down patients as they wait their turn. How much better than a talk show with five people screaming at each other. I think you've inspired me to write a poem about that! Beautiful poem!
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What a vivid imagination you have for both words and pictures. I can see my daffodils dancing on their willowy stems, just as a ballerina might do. I can see a video of dancing flowers set to soft music being played in a doctor's waiting room to calm down patients as they wait their turn. How much better than a talk show with five people screaming at each other. I think you've inspired me to write a poem about that! Beautiful poem!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Pam. I loved seeing your artwork and how you ascribe daffodils to dancers... for they certainly seem so when the breeze is buffeting them around. Very nice.
Melissa
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Hello Pam. I loved seeing your artwork and how you ascribe daffodils to dancers... for they certainly seem so when the breeze is buffeting them around. Very nice.
Melissa
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
Comment from l.raven
Hi Pam, so good to see you my sweet friend...
I have missed your painting you...have been off and on...and missed a lot...hope to catch up somewhat...
I love your poem sweet girl...beautiful dancing Daffodils...in a bouquet of watching flowers...very nicely written...and I love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
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Hi Pam, so good to see you my sweet friend...
I have missed your painting you...have been off and on...and missed a lot...hope to catch up somewhat...
I love your poem sweet girl...beautiful dancing Daffodils...in a bouquet of watching flowers...very nicely written...and I love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
Comment from Janetsue
I really like your posting...both the tanka and painting. It is full of energy and beauty. Flowers can have an emotional affect on people and I can understand why you have rendered the ballerinas dancing so joyously.
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I really like your posting...both the tanka and painting. It is full of energy and beauty. Flowers can have an emotional affect on people and I can understand why you have rendered the ballerinas dancing so joyously.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
