Blessings, Day and Night
In rhyming lines of 6 syllables...17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
What a coincidence that we both wrote about the sun this morning Lisa, you must have wrote this before I stole it the sun! Much enjoyed and reminded me of my walks along the beaches here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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What a coincidence that we both wrote about the sun this morning Lisa, you must have wrote this before I stole it the sun! Much enjoyed and reminded me of my walks along the beaches here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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We woke up under the same sun at different times and got inspired.
Comment from Kazzawin
Really like this composition.
The flow needed a second read for me to 'feel' it. Love the day to night switch. Nice rhyming poem and the artwork is gorgeous and supports the piece well : )
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Really like this composition.
The flow needed a second read for me to 'feel' it. Love the day to night switch. Nice rhyming poem and the artwork is gorgeous and supports the piece well : )
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for this lovely review!
Comment from tfawcus
I imagine there are almost as many poetic forms as poets. It's fun experimenting with new rhythms and rhyme schemes and I rather like this one of yours.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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I imagine there are almost as many poetic forms as poets. It's fun experimenting with new rhythms and rhyme schemes and I rather like this one of yours.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for the thumbs up, Tony.
Comment from Aiona
I like it. You should name the form! It can also easily be put to a melody. I envision something of a lullabye. I like the alliteration, as well as the internal and terminal rhyme!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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I like it. You should name the form! It can also easily be put to a melody. I envision something of a lullabye. I like the alliteration, as well as the internal and terminal rhyme!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for this super review!
Comment from Susan X Smith
The rhyme and rhythm of this short poem work well together. It flows very nicely with well chosen words and successful alliteration. It is a simple, yet elegant piece.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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The rhyme and rhythm of this short poem work well together. It flows very nicely with well chosen words and successful alliteration. It is a simple, yet elegant piece.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your comments. That is a nice way to describe my poem: 'simple, yet elegant'....
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your poem is all shimmery and glittery fun in the sun and all is good when we go home blessed :"Simmering summer sun,
sinking into the west;
it shimmered then glimmered
'til our fun day was done.
We'll go home, feeling blessed."
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Your poem is all shimmery and glittery fun in the sun and all is good when we go home blessed :"Simmering summer sun,
sinking into the west;
it shimmered then glimmered
'til our fun day was done.
We'll go home, feeling blessed."
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for your shimmery positive review!
Comment from JudyE
As long as a poem 'works', the form shouldn't matter ( say I who know nothing about poetry) but of course, it's a rhyming poem contest so I guess it does matter to some degree. Good luck. I enjoyed it and liked the alliteration.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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As long as a poem 'works', the form shouldn't matter ( say I who know nothing about poetry) but of course, it's a rhyming poem contest so I guess it does matter to some degree. Good luck. I enjoyed it and liked the alliteration.
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Judy. I never get bogged down with poetic forms - this one turned into a pattern all by itself when I wrote the second stanza - then I noticed the scheme and put it in the author note... and then I figured, because it did actually have a scheme, I should enter it in the rhyming poem contest.
