Blessings, Day and Night
In rhyming lines of 6 syllables...17 total reviews
Comment from Carla Trinklein
I don't know if this is an existing form or not, but it should be! I found it lyrical and lovely. Reminded me of family vacations to the ocean. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I don't know if this is an existing form or not, but it should be! I found it lyrical and lovely. Reminded me of family vacations to the ocean. Well done!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thanks for your review, Carla.
Comment from poetwatch
Well done LisaMay. Never seen it done but I must say it sounds OK. If it doesn't exist then you invented it. :) Either way it is poetic. There are many forms out there that are written a certain way to be. I don't follow rules. If it sounds and feels good to my heart and soul... to me it is good poetry, but that is me... I don't know how to write correctly. :)
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Well done LisaMay. Never seen it done but I must say it sounds OK. If it doesn't exist then you invented it. :) Either way it is poetic. There are many forms out there that are written a certain way to be. I don't follow rules. If it sounds and feels good to my heart and soul... to me it is good poetry, but that is me... I don't know how to write correctly. :)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Sorry for late response to your review. I hardly ever follow a proper poetic form as I don't like rules either. This poem sort of invented itself.
Comment from BeasPeas
Your poem is well composed with 6 syllables per line in this interesting poetry form. Lots of alliteration and good word choices as well as internal and end rhyming. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Your poem is well composed with 6 syllables per line in this interesting poetry form. Lots of alliteration and good word choices as well as internal and end rhyming. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for your review and good wishes. xx
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is well-written, and lovely. It vividly celebrates nature and romantic love, both powerful forces in our lives. The rhyming is creative, an effective enhancement.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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This piece is well-written, and lovely. It vividly celebrates nature and romantic love, both powerful forces in our lives. The rhyming is creative, an effective enhancement.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much for these nourishing words.
Comment from lyenochka
It's a Alit-Arhyme-LisaMayan quintet. Maybe we need to make that name a little shorter. Pantygynt may come up with a good one.
You are on such a creative roll! Loved this one, too!!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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It's a Alit-Arhyme-LisaMayan quintet. Maybe we need to make that name a little shorter. Pantygynt may come up with a good one.
You are on such a creative roll! Loved this one, too!!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Hmmm... that is rather complicated!
Thanks for your kind words and support.
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Hmm. Then maybe just LisaMayan Quintet
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That sounds like a Mesoamerican musical group.
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Lol!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written love poem with excellent rhyming words that makes the lines flow from line to line. It is also an excellent photo that complements your poem.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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A very well-written love poem with excellent rhyming words that makes the lines flow from line to line. It is also an excellent photo that complements your poem.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much for your kind review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a well penned Rhymed Poem. The rhyme is natural and rolls easily off the tongue as the reader travels from line to line. The meter is subtle, yet ever present throughout carry one along on a lyrical zephyr. Well done and thank you vey much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a well penned Rhymed Poem. The rhyme is natural and rolls easily off the tongue as the reader travels from line to line. The meter is subtle, yet ever present throughout carry one along on a lyrical zephyr. Well done and thank you vey much for sharing it.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for this terrific review! 'Lyrical zephyr' is a lovely description.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Love the 's' alliteration in the first stanza, then the 'm' alliteration next in the beginning of the second stanza. I think the last two lines say everything. How fun to invent a form. I think the colors here also produce a happy mood. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Love the 's' alliteration in the first stanza, then the 'm' alliteration next in the beginning of the second stanza. I think the last two lines say everything. How fun to invent a form. I think the colors here also produce a happy mood. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for reviewing. This poem is a relatively short one for me - any more would have overcooked it. I think that form has enough going on with the alliteration and the rhyme in 2 stanzas, so Day and Night suited it as the subject.
Comment from Gail Denham
Interesting form - and fun to make them up. You did this well. Your first stanza about a sunny, shimmering day at the beach made me want to be out there in the sun.
good job.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Interesting form - and fun to make them up. You did this well. Your first stanza about a sunny, shimmering day at the beach made me want to be out there in the sun.
good job.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for your positive comments, Gail. I hope you enjoyed some sunshine today.
Comment from June Sargent
This format is new to me, but it works! In a few short lives you've painted a lovely scenario. Day or night, we are blessed by creation's beauty and the knowledge that we are loved.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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This format is new to me, but it works! In a few short lives you've painted a lovely scenario. Day or night, we are blessed by creation's beauty and the knowledge that we are loved.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thanks for this nice review, June.
