Love Life
Live life as if you meant it.31 total reviews
Comment from Susan Morritt
This is a wonderful piece of writing. You have taken this form of poetry and built on each word, reminding me of a waterfall, or an inverted pyramid. My favourite line is the final, especially, "Born to fly high in the sky, roll the die". Brilliant.
Susan
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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This is a wonderful piece of writing. You have taken this form of poetry and built on each word, reminding me of a waterfall, or an inverted pyramid. My favourite line is the final, especially, "Born to fly high in the sky, roll the die". Brilliant.
Susan
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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I am so grateful for your wonderful connection my work created for you.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork, JLR.
-A good loop poem with
a good topic and rhyme.
-The use of dance to show
how we should celebrate life
is effective.
-I like the ending lines, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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-Very nice artwork, JLR.
-A good loop poem with
a good topic and rhyme.
-The use of dance to show
how we should celebrate life
is effective.
-I like the ending lines, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Pam, your comments are a delight for me to read today especially, thank you.
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You are very welcome, JLR, I am glad you liked them.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Love Life", is short, succinct and very much to the point. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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"Love Life", is short, succinct and very much to the point. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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I am delighted with your comments
I'm delighted to read this.
Comment from royowen
Loop poetry like French repeating line poetry, is not as easy as it appears. So well done you've done well my friend, with an excellent, philosophical theme to season this good work with. Well done, good look, blesskngs, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Loop poetry like French repeating line poetry, is not as easy as it appears. So well done you've done well my friend, with an excellent, philosophical theme to season this good work with. Well done, good look, blesskngs, Roy
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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My sincere and humble thanks for your kind words and always blessings.
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Most welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written loop poem about never take life for granted and live like you mean it every second of the day. Love when you have the chance it may not happen again.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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A very well-written loop poem about never take life for granted and live like you mean it every second of the day. Love when you have the chance it may not happen again.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Thank you Sandra..
Comment from Susan Larson
Geeez, I really admire anyone who can write a loop poem. Not saying I can't, but even if I tried, it would take me forever to transition through all the repeated words giving new, yet related meaning to the next line as you have done. Excellent. Wish I still had a six to give.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Geeez, I really admire anyone who can write a loop poem. Not saying I can't, but even if I tried, it would take me forever to transition through all the repeated words giving new, yet related meaning to the next line as you have done. Excellent. Wish I still had a six to give.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Oh my, thank you so much for your kind comments. Write one for the pure challenge it might surprise you...
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you deliver a well penned Loop Poem (truly not one of my favorite styles as I consider it a bane to writing sensibilities LOL) that adheres to the rules of form flawlessly. The content is expertly engineered as you use words with a bit of flavor and complexity to move from line to line in seamless agility. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you deliver a well penned Loop Poem (truly not one of my favorite styles as I consider it a bane to writing sensibilities LOL) that adheres to the rules of form flawlessly. The content is expertly engineered as you use words with a bit of flavor and complexity to move from line to line in seamless agility. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Thank you, I found this style cumbersome to say the least and it forced me work outside of my free verse safe zone.
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's true. Not every chance you take in life will work out the way you want it to, but if you don't take them you miss out on a lot. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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That's true. Not every chance you take in life will work out the way you want it to, but if you don't take them you miss out on a lot. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Thank you Cindy.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
the style of your poem is really good. I must write one of those also for the contest. Good luck in the contest. The words at the end of the sentence and the beginning of the sentence are correct.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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the style of your poem is really good. I must write one of those also for the contest. Good luck in the contest. The words at the end of the sentence and the beginning of the sentence are correct.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Thank you for that validation the directions were a bit fuzzy.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Good use of the loop form. My one question is if the poem should end with the word the poem starts with, to make a full loop? Good luck with your contest entry.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Good use of the loop form. My one question is if the poem should end with the word the poem starts with, to make a full loop? Good luck with your contest entry.
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Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Darlene, that question you pose is very welcomed, when you have time give your thoughts about my work around to address this, thx so very much!
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Hmm, I might remove one phrase from the ast line, and change the final phrase to "and take a chance, too."
