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Comment from Rikki66
I am dumfounfed by style amazed by the content I kept waiting for a mention of the great pumpkin.)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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I am dumfounfed by style amazed by the content I kept waiting for a mention of the great pumpkin.)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Haha, Ricky. The subject was ghoulish, and the style repetition took up a lot of poem space, thanks for reviewing kindly!
Hugs. Trisha
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Forget halloween celebrate the day of the dead.
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Trisha,
You can't beat a Halloween poem, eh?
Thanks for teaching a new poetic form. I've got to start compiling these in a notebook. I've never heard of an oxylet. I think it would be extremely difficult if it wasn't for the repeating lines. Your oxymoron phrases are perfect, "living dead/good grief/kind cruel/calm panic/quiet loud". I think the best is "living dead" with "good grief" a close second.
I noticed forced rhyme in this line,
"A kind cruel Reaper did behead"
Can I make a suggestion? "kind" and "cruel" are oxymorons when used together, but they don't make a lot of sense to me. Can the Grim Reaper be cruel and kind at the same time? You might go for the opposite of Reaper though, in a two-syllable word. For example,
(A strewing Reaper would behead)
or,
(A flinging Reaper could behead)
But you've done Halloween proud. Your artwork shows the Grim Reaper, sickle in hand, on a spooky purple night. And he prowls through your poem! Don't let him find you!
One thing you have to explain though. Where does the "B" come into play in your poem? I see 8 lines that all rhyme. I thought a's and b's, c's and d'd were for rhyme, but you've got them for repeated lines too. I'm all mixed up.
I think this is the first Halloween poem I've seen this year, but I'm sure there will be many more.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Hi Trisha,
You can't beat a Halloween poem, eh?
Thanks for teaching a new poetic form. I've got to start compiling these in a notebook. I've never heard of an oxylet. I think it would be extremely difficult if it wasn't for the repeating lines. Your oxymoron phrases are perfect, "living dead/good grief/kind cruel/calm panic/quiet loud". I think the best is "living dead" with "good grief" a close second.
I noticed forced rhyme in this line,
"A kind cruel Reaper did behead"
Can I make a suggestion? "kind" and "cruel" are oxymorons when used together, but they don't make a lot of sense to me. Can the Grim Reaper be cruel and kind at the same time? You might go for the opposite of Reaper though, in a two-syllable word. For example,
(A strewing Reaper would behead)
or,
(A flinging Reaper could behead)
But you've done Halloween proud. Your artwork shows the Grim Reaper, sickle in hand, on a spooky purple night. And he prowls through your poem! Don't let him find you!
One thing you have to explain though. Where does the "B" come into play in your poem? I see 8 lines that all rhyme. I thought a's and b's, c's and d'd were for rhyme, but you've got them for repeated lines too. I'm all mixed up.
I think this is the first Halloween poem I've seen this year, but I'm sure there will be many more.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Dear Kimbob , I?ve never physically virtually met you. Does the oxymoron of ?living dead? make sense, because you can?t be living and dead at the same time! You make a good point, now IM all mixed up over the rhymes.
What I?m sure of is my gratitude that you reviewed at all!
Hugs, Trisha
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Hi Trisha,
Why, yes! Of course, there can be living and dead at the same time. We are living in the "Zombie Age", didn't you know? Back in 1968, the original "Night of the Living Dead" scared me to death! There's been a revival of sorts in the last few years. So many zombies! But I've never seen a real one yet!
Keep up the good work!
Cheers
Kimbob
Comment from robyn corum
BL,
hahahahaha! I have stopped being amazed at the number of new and varied poetry forms the Potlatch Group manages to come up with. (Though it took a while for me to reach that point. hahaha)
This is a cool submission for this challenge. Thanks for sharing -- and it's good to see you, btw. It's been a while!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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BL,
hahahahaha! I have stopped being amazed at the number of new and varied poetry forms the Potlatch Group manages to come up with. (Though it took a while for me to reach that point. hahaha)
This is a cool submission for this challenge. Thanks for sharing -- and it's good to see you, btw. It's been a while!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I?m here, hiding in the shadows! I?m very glad that you enjoyed the poem.Thanks very much
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Oxylet with great oxymorons in every line. The rhyming scheme should be ABaAabAB like a Triolet. The capital's meaning the repeating lines.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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A very well-written Oxylet with great oxymorons in every line. The rhyming scheme should be ABaAabAB like a Triolet. The capital's meaning the repeating lines.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thanks very much
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from damommy
Good use the oxymorons in this poet. 'Living dead' is exceptionally good.
Great presentation.
I see you're getting Halloween ideas. It's getting that time, isn't it?
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Good use the oxymorons in this poet. 'Living dead' is exceptionally good.
Great presentation.
I see you're getting Halloween ideas. It's getting that time, isn't it?
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Yes, it?s an option for my poetry when I draw a blank as to subject! I appreciated your complimentary review, as I do so enjoy the challenge clubs.
Hugs, Trisha
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Thank you.
Comment from Cheryl I
This oxylet is only the second one I have ever read. You did a good job on it. It is creepy and just in time for Halloween. I especially like "good grief". Nice job.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This oxylet is only the second one I have ever read. You did a good job on it. It is creepy and just in time for Halloween. I especially like "good grief". Nice job.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Cheryl. The challenge clubs are great for exercising my aging brain! Have a great weekend
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You meet the Club Challenge beautifully by delivering a well penned Oxylet with a most compelling and timely Halloween theme. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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You meet the Club Challenge beautifully by delivering a well penned Oxylet with a most compelling and timely Halloween theme. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Initially, drew a blank as to subject choice, so I?m glad you enjoyed the final result. Thanks for your complimentary review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an interesting oxylet with some unusual oxymorons. The repetition is very effective and the poem describes well the holiday of Halloween. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This is an interesting oxylet with some unusual oxymorons. The repetition is very effective and the poem describes well the holiday of Halloween. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your positive review. The challenge clubs are just for fun, but sometimes we can enter a contest in addition.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! So, you "Oxy-ed" Halloween, eh? I see what you've really been up to!! ;) :) What a fun offering for the 'ghoulish spirit', Trisha -- Good grief!! ;) :) LOL! Thanx for sharing such a cool creation! ;) :) Yvette
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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LOL! So, you "Oxy-ed" Halloween, eh? I see what you've really been up to!! ;) :) What a fun offering for the 'ghoulish spirit', Trisha -- Good grief!! ;) :) LOL! Thanx for sharing such a cool creation! ;) :) Yvette
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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I?ve been brain washed by commercials. So when I read your review, my brain read So, you Oxy cleaned Halloween. Thanks Yvette, have a great weekend
Hugs, Trisha
