Tanka (wild bird contestants)
An ekphrastic poem34 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
NIce mix of words and artwork. It seems the apples are their rides to the ground. The first one to the ground gets to eat first.
Keep writing
Joan
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NIce mix of words and artwork. It seems the apples are their rides to the ground. The first one to the ground gets to eat first.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
Comment from Susan Morritt
This is a very visual poem. I love the line, "stab red apples with sharp claws." I also love your amazing painting that you have posted as well. It is as unique as the concept of birds as contestants. Well done.
Susan
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This is a very visual poem. I love the line, "stab red apples with sharp claws." I also love your amazing painting that you have posted as well. It is as unique as the concept of birds as contestants. Well done.
Susan
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Susan
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Thank you, Susan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a wonderful presentation Pam and I have missed your poetry and your artwork. The artwork first of all is amazing, and your words do it justice, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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This is a wonderful presentation Pam and I have missed your poetry and your artwork. The artwork first of all is amazing, and your words do it justice, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Dolly. Nice review. Thank you. Good to see you
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Thank you, Dolly. Nice review. Thank you. Good to see you
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Tanka (wild bird contestants) is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this standard I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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"Tanka (wild bird contestants) is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this standard I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you, duchess
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Thank you, duchess
Comment from Sally Law
You are so talented. I love your oil painting, a perfect illustration for your fine poem. I'm wishing for a six today for this is indeed worthy. Please accept my five with kind regards,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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You are so talented. I love your oil painting, a perfect illustration for your fine poem. I'm wishing for a six today for this is indeed worthy. Please accept my five with kind regards,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Hi, Sally. Thank you for the virtual 6. Much appreciated
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Hi, Sally. Thank you for the virtual 6. Much appreciated
Comment from Gail Denham
Birds (and bees ) do congregate around fresh fruit. Our son & wife are picking grapes to make wine - the bees are swarming. They love the sweetness. I don't quite understand why the birds must reach green grass??
Enjoyed the poem
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Birds (and bees ) do congregate around fresh fruit. Our son & wife are picking grapes to make wine - the bees are swarming. They love the sweetness. I don't quite understand why the birds must reach green grass??
Enjoyed the poem
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Hi, Gail. It is a fantasy. They are bird contestants and their goal is to reach the grass first. Thank you for the review and the four stars
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Hi, Gail. It is a fantasy. They are bird contestants and their goal is to reach the grass first. Thank you for the review and the four stars
Comment from Mastery
Hi Pam. Good tanka here. Super job on the painting for this poem. Your birds are varied and colorful of course. Great variations. "Dancing Nature" sounds like a great title btw. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Hi Pam. Good tanka here. Super job on the painting for this poem. Your birds are varied and colorful of course. Great variations. "Dancing Nature" sounds like a great title btw. : ) Bob
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Hi, Bob. Thanks for the great review. I still plan to explain some things about why I have little time to review
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Hi, Bob. Thanks for the great review. I still plan to explain some things about why I have little time to review
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:) it's okay, Pam. Bob
Comment from kahpot
What a gorgeous painting and you have written your excellent Tanka describing the fun birds may have in their own way, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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What a gorgeous painting and you have written your excellent Tanka describing the fun birds may have in their own way, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you, kahpot l had major back surgery month and fell 3 days later from a seizure. That is why I got so far behind on responding to reviews. Thank you for all of yours
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Thank you, kahpot l had major back surgery month and fell 3 days later from a seizure. That is why I got so far behind on responding to reviews. Thank you for all of yours
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Wow! please don't be sorry, I just hope you are well and OK****kahpot
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are joyful, fun, interesting and creative. I really
like the painting! I pondered on the theme of this poem and
how nature brings so much joy. The poem flows and connects
well. Pam sorry to hear about the hospitalizations. Hope you
are having a good day!.............Maria
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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The author's words are joyful, fun, interesting and creative. I really
like the painting! I pondered on the theme of this poem and
how nature brings so much joy. The poem flows and connects
well. Pam sorry to hear about the hospitalizations. Hope you
are having a good day!.............Maria
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Maris for the nice review.
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Thank you, Maris for the nice review.
Comment from Pantygynt
I liked this tanka but I would like it even more if you got rid of the three definite articles in there. That would give it a more Japanese flavour and 5-7-5-7-7 is a maximum not a target.
The third line is an excellent pivot and a pretty good satori into the bargain. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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I liked this tanka but I would like it even more if you got rid of the three definite articles in there. That would give it a more Japanese flavour and 5-7-5-7-7 is a maximum not a target.
The third line is an excellent pivot and a pretty good satori into the bargain. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Hi, Jim. I am sorry I can?t review now. I got so far behind responding to reviews due to all my health issue. Thank you for the helpful hints. I will keep that in mind.
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Hi, Jim. I am sorry I can?t review now. I got so far behind responding to reviews due to all my health issue. Thank you for the helpful hints. I will keep that in mind.
