Tragedy on Beacon Bridge
His pain became intolerable.26 total reviews
Comment from shaffer40
I think I'm too late to vote in the contest, and I don't have a six-star rating left to give, but I think this story is beyond excellent. It is well-written and poignant. I agree with the mental health directive. As the culture becomes more chaotic and harder on its citizens, we have cut back services. Just like the double whammy of destroying the rain forest and producing more meat.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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I think I'm too late to vote in the contest, and I don't have a six-star rating left to give, but I think this story is beyond excellent. It is well-written and poignant. I agree with the mental health directive. As the culture becomes more chaotic and harder on its citizens, we have cut back services. Just like the double whammy of destroying the rain forest and producing more meat.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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I am so grateful for your kind and gracious words. I also agree with on the issue of mental health, which unfortunately takes a backseat when it comes to our healthcare priorities.
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a short flash fiction piece with a strong emotional pull. That's hard to achieve with so few words to play with. It's nicely constructed {smiles}.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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This is a short flash fiction piece with a strong emotional pull. That's hard to achieve with so few words to play with. It's nicely constructed {smiles}.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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thank you for making my day better.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This one made me tear up! You have told a wonderful, moving story with your few words (as required by prompt). Sometimes a few words from the right person can prevent a tragedy.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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This one made me tear up! You have told a wonderful, moving story with your few words (as required by prompt). Sometimes a few words from the right person can prevent a tragedy.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This one made me tear up! You have told a wonderful, moving story with your few words (as required by prompt). Sometimes a few words from the right person can prevent a tragedy.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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This one made me tear up! You have told a wonderful, moving story with your few words (as required by prompt). Sometimes a few words from the right person can prevent a tragedy.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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thank you.
Comment from Scarbrems
This is a powerful piece with such a strong ending. We see the pain of the unnamed man, but also you've shown us the others who are victims of suicide in the voice of the daughter on the phone. It is to be hoped that if this scenario occurred in real life, the voice of the child would be enough, but sadly you wonder how many times it happens like this and the person contemplating ending his or her life is just too far gone to be reached. Heartbreaking. Bravo for tackling a difficult subject.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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This is a powerful piece with such a strong ending. We see the pain of the unnamed man, but also you've shown us the others who are victims of suicide in the voice of the daughter on the phone. It is to be hoped that if this scenario occurred in real life, the voice of the child would be enough, but sadly you wonder how many times it happens like this and the person contemplating ending his or her life is just too far gone to be reached. Heartbreaking. Bravo for tackling a difficult subject.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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your words are most kind, thank you.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Powerful little story. I trust he went home, because it would be far too cruel for him to take away her other parent. Suicide is selfish, and I hope he realizes that. Once we have kids, the goal of our lives changes. We must iive FOR THEM. And they in turn will bring us happiness again.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Powerful little story. I trust he went home, because it would be far too cruel for him to take away her other parent. Suicide is selfish, and I hope he realizes that. Once we have kids, the goal of our lives changes. We must iive FOR THEM. And they in turn will bring us happiness again.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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appreciate your comment, thank you.
Comment from royowen
Boy this really tears at the heartstring, oh, yes, suicide is a major problem and it creates a shadow that is hard to erase, this is a marvellous story, I adore my kids, and grands, they keep me grounded in many ways. Beautifully written, I loved the thought behind this. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Boy this really tears at the heartstring, oh, yes, suicide is a major problem and it creates a shadow that is hard to erase, this is a marvellous story, I adore my kids, and grands, they keep me grounded in many ways. Beautifully written, I loved the thought behind this. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Your kind words were awesome, thank you so very much..
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Most welcome
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
This is so sad...am I to conclude that he didn't jump? Because I love happy endings this is what I want to believe.
You are quite right, mental health is a serious issue and it should not be ignored.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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This is so sad...am I to conclude that he didn't jump? Because I love happy endings this is what I want to believe.
You are quite right, mental health is a serious issue and it should not be ignored.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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thank you. your correct in the ending.
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Great, thanks for that. You are very welcome.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Tpa. That's a touching story. It is a tragedy that is headed for another sad event but the call reminds him that life is all around us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Hello Tpa. That's a touching story. It is a tragedy that is headed for another sad event but the call reminds him that life is all around us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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thank you
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You're welcome.
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thank you
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You're welcome
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Tpa
Your entry into the 80 Word Flash Fiction. caught my eyes and glad I did knowing your character in your up-lifting words from a daughter who was going to take her own life.
Called her dad on a cell phone.
Gert
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hello Tpa
Your entry into the 80 Word Flash Fiction. caught my eyes and glad I did knowing your character in your up-lifting words from a daughter who was going to take her own life.
Called her dad on a cell phone.
Gert
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you, but it was the dad taking his life. I let the reader make the conclusion of staying alive after his daughter's call.
