Before the Dawn
Kyrielle Sonnet ~ More European forms class31 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
You certainly captured the experience of watching the sun rise. I enjoyed your use of alliteration and your rhymes and repeats in this kyrielle sonnet. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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You certainly captured the experience of watching the sun rise. I enjoyed your use of alliteration and your rhymes and repeats in this kyrielle sonnet. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hi Joan. I am so glad you like the kyrielle sonnet. It is a bit of a challenge to get it right, but a fun puzzle to figure out. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Melissa, I don't know the details of the kyrielle sonnet, except that there are repeating lines. However I enjoyed the serene beauty of your write. You paint a lovely picture, I like the "cup of coffee" .
Excellent rhyme which is important since this is an entry in a rhyming poetry contest.
Good luck.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hello Melissa, I don't know the details of the kyrielle sonnet, except that there are repeating lines. However I enjoyed the serene beauty of your write. You paint a lovely picture, I like the "cup of coffee" .
Excellent rhyme which is important since this is an entry in a rhyming poetry contest.
Good luck.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you Julia. The kyrielle sonnet is made up of 14 lines with the last line of each stanza a repeating line. The first and last line of the first stanza create the closing couplet. :). I am glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment from David R. Davis
Being an early riser, your words were well taken. I now live in the desert and we have several mountain ranges near. There is something very special about an early walk and watching the sun rise over the mountain tops. Thank you for your imagery. The repetition of the "to watch the sunrise break below." Was lovely and spot on. Go well.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Being an early riser, your words were well taken. I now live in the desert and we have several mountain ranges near. There is something very special about an early walk and watching the sun rise over the mountain tops. Thank you for your imagery. The repetition of the "to watch the sunrise break below." Was lovely and spot on. Go well.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hello David. Thank you so much for the lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Melissa, what a beautiful sonnet, effortless, smooth read with excellent rhythm and wonderful rhyming throughout.
A gorgeous piece of writing
Mitchell
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hi Melissa, what a beautiful sonnet, effortless, smooth read with excellent rhythm and wonderful rhyming throughout.
A gorgeous piece of writing
Mitchell
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hello Mitchell. Thank you so much for the lovely review!!
Melissa
Comment from BeasPeas
Your Kyrielle Sonnet is beautifully composed. Many good lines within and illustrated appropriately for theme. I particularly like stanza two. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Your Kyrielle Sonnet is beautifully composed. Many good lines within and illustrated appropriately for theme. I particularly like stanza two. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hello Marilyn. This sonnet form is constructed a bit differently than the Shakespearean ones. I ALWAYS find sonnets challenging. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
You should be teaching these European forms classes. Apparently, you are exposed to a new format and automatically work magic with it. I have said that all along. I remember when you were "practicing tankas," and I was blown away by the beauty of your craftmanship.
I never thought about the sunrise breaking below. I like that image a lot.
This entire poem is extraordinary. No sixes to award of course. This one is deserving though.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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You should be teaching these European forms classes. Apparently, you are exposed to a new format and automatically work magic with it. I have said that all along. I remember when you were "practicing tankas," and I was blown away by the beauty of your craftmanship.
I never thought about the sunrise breaking below. I like that image a lot.
This entire poem is extraordinary. No sixes to award of course. This one is deserving though.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hello Debbie. Your review really warms my heart and encourages me to keep trying and learning all I can about writing. Thanks, dear friend!!
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, bring on the mountain top -- what a wonderfully uplifting offering, Melissa!!! Love the feeling of anticipation you give the reader as we wait on that sunrise!! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
morning's rhythm nice --> morning's rhythm's nice OR morning's rhythm, nice [don't know for sure, but there seems to be a 'catch' here... ?? Just ignore it if you don't agree -- the grading might be making me crazy! :) LOL!]
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Oh, bring on the mountain top -- what a wonderfully uplifting offering, Melissa!!! Love the feeling of anticipation you give the reader as we wait on that sunrise!! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
morning's rhythm nice --> morning's rhythm's nice OR morning's rhythm, nice [don't know for sure, but there seems to be a 'catch' here... ?? Just ignore it if you don't agree -- the grading might be making me crazy! :) LOL!]
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Haha.. hey crazy lady that grades all day!! LOL. Thanks for the review and I will definitely check out the suggestion on that phrase. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
So in a Kyrielle sonnet the first and last line are the couplet and the last line is repeated in every stanza. Right Melissa? I like it. The rhyme is 8 beats of ho-HUMM? Not the standard 10 iambic pentameter like the English counterpart. That's the way I see it. This is a good entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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So in a Kyrielle sonnet the first and last line are the couplet and the last line is repeated in every stanza. Right Melissa? I like it. The rhyme is 8 beats of ho-HUMM? Not the standard 10 iambic pentameter like the English counterpart. That's the way I see it. This is a good entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much, Jose. I am glad you liked this kyrielle sonnet.
Melissa
Comment from Janetsue
This is a beautiful rhyming poem about being on the quiet mountain top and watching a new morning begin. I would love to be there doing just that. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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This is a beautiful rhyming poem about being on the quiet mountain top and watching a new morning begin. I would love to be there doing just that. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Janet. I am delighted you liked it.
Melissa
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You're very welcome! :-)
Comment from DonandVicki
Your sonnet is the type of verse that engages the imagination of the reader. Your choice of the image helps to transport me to a far away place that I cannot go physically but am able to travel in my mind.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Your sonnet is the type of verse that engages the imagination of the reader. Your choice of the image helps to transport me to a far away place that I cannot go physically but am able to travel in my mind.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Hello Don... I am very happy that this little verse pleases you and that you traveled with me to a mountaintop to watch the sunrise. Have a lovely evening and blessed Sunday!
Melissa
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Thank you Melissa.
