Raining
It's raining today5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This diminished hexaverse poem, Raining, has the proper syllable and line formatting and perceives the rain as a cold and drowning menace that has come to wash away our current joy.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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This diminished hexaverse poem, Raining, has the proper syllable and line formatting and perceives the rain as a cold and drowning menace that has come to wash away our current joy.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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thxs so much for your review, Bill
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, you have certainly painted a wonderful picture of late autumn...missing our warm sunshine!! ;) Thanx so very much for joining the fun on the new form -- the weather shall never be the same!! LOL! Take care! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Oh, you have certainly painted a wonderful picture of late autumn...missing our warm sunshine!! ;) Thanx so very much for joining the fun on the new form -- the weather shall never be the same!! LOL! Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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thxs for your review
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sweet Girl, I wish I had a six for you...
this reminds me of dreary rainy day in Florida...
I love your description of a grey chilling day...
very well written my sweet friend...I love your poem...
and love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Hi Sweet Girl, I wish I had a six for you...
this reminds me of dreary rainy day in Florida...
I love your description of a grey chilling day...
very well written my sweet friend...I love your poem...
and love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Love your comments and your review. Appreciate it.
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your sooooo welcome...always...love xxoo... Linda
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An unusual form as your words drip down from grey black clouds and raindrops fall as the seasons change and summer fades and rain begins, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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An unusual form as your words drip down from grey black clouds and raindrops fall as the seasons change and summer fades and rain begins, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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thxs for your great comments and review.
Comment from Michele Harber
You paint a very effective visual picture of the post-summer months, from the trees losing their leaves, to the gray skies and chilly weather. The one major problem is that the first line of your three-syllables-per-line stanza actually has four syllables: "Heavens open."
You can fix this easily in either of two ways:
- Change "Heavens" to "Skies."
- Drop the last letter of the two-syllable "open," leaving the poetic, monosyllabic "ope."
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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You paint a very effective visual picture of the post-summer months, from the trees losing their leaves, to the gray skies and chilly weather. The one major problem is that the first line of your three-syllables-per-line stanza actually has four syllables: "Heavens open."
You can fix this easily in either of two ways:
- Change "Heavens" to "Skies."
- Drop the last letter of the two-syllable "open," leaving the poetic, monosyllabic "ope."
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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thxs for your awesome comments and tip, that I have corrected. thxs again
