Our Lord's Delight
My first Villanelle to my heart and love.11 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Villanelle about love that is our Lord's delight when he look down at us and see we love one another unconditionally He is content and know we follow in his footsteps.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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A very well-written Villanelle about love that is our Lord's delight when he look down at us and see we love one another unconditionally He is content and know we follow in his footsteps.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Thank you Sandra. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your first Villanelle--you have a knack for the highly structured form. I admired your rhymes and repeats for emphasis and use of alliteration, as in "darkened doubts demand". Best wishes in the Rhyming Poem contest- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for sharing your first Villanelle--you have a knack for the highly structured form. I admired your rhymes and repeats for emphasis and use of alliteration, as in "darkened doubts demand". Best wishes in the Rhyming Poem contest- Joan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Joan. I wanted to try something different. Boy was it hard. :) I'm glad you liked it,
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Congratulations on meeting the challenge. I look forward to enjoying more of your work. Smiles- Joan
Comment from Sugarray77
What a lovely villanelle, Jose. Really, its well done. Your theme was a good one where you wove your love for your wife into the blessing she is to you. I enjoyed reading this. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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What a lovely villanelle, Jose. Really, its well done. Your theme was a good one where you wove your love for your wife into the blessing she is to you. I enjoyed reading this. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Melissa. Your words made my day. Speaking about day... you write in the wee hours of the morning? :)
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Hi Jose.. yes, I write at any time I feel like I have something to say. Melissa
Comment from Sallyo
I wouldn't know either, but this one reads along very well. Congratulations on carrying off this so-stylised form. As far as I know it obeys all the rules, and anyway, it works as a poem with something to say beyond sticking to a form.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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I wouldn't know either, but this one reads along very well. Congratulations on carrying off this so-stylised form. As far as I know it obeys all the rules, and anyway, it works as a poem with something to say beyond sticking to a form.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Sally. I'm glad you it works for you. It's hard to stick to this style and make sense. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is sweet and devoted. I like the line: Your voice from heaven is our Lord's delight
That may be because I listen to voices all day long and have decided the quality and intention of speech sure can create a heaven or something other than that. "calm you be" sounds like an inversion. But as you say it is your first villanelle, and getting rhymes to work sometimes makes inversions rather necessary. Thank you for posting.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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This is sweet and devoted. I like the line: Your voice from heaven is our Lord's delight
That may be because I listen to voices all day long and have decided the quality and intention of speech sure can create a heaven or something other than that. "calm you be" sounds like an inversion. But as you say it is your first villanelle, and getting rhymes to work sometimes makes inversions rather necessary. Thank you for posting.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Crystie. I had trouble with that line so a little inversion sounded fine. :) I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from royowen
This is a fine villanelle, the structure is perfectly built. Written in pentametric stanzas, with the repeating lines seamlessly applied. The them is a fine one, and the rhyming is excellent and precise. An excellent villanelle, well done Blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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This is a fine villanelle, the structure is perfectly built. Written in pentametric stanzas, with the repeating lines seamlessly applied. The them is a fine one, and the rhyming is excellent and precise. An excellent villanelle, well done Blessings Roy.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Roy. I had to try something different to show my love. I'm glad you liked it.
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Well done,
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and well written Villanelle poem you have penned about our Lord and His delight. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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This is a very beautiful and well written Villanelle poem you have penned about our Lord and His delight. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Teri. I had to try something different to show my love. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A worshipful offering of praise for the contest, Jose -- beautiful in its rhyme and flow.... the uniqueness of it draws the reader in and then its repetitive familiarity and your 'image-painting' words keep them there to the end! That image is almost an indistinct warmth that the reader's faith can put a face to as they feel yours .... great one, sir! Thanx for sharing and best of luck!! ;) :) Yvette
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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A worshipful offering of praise for the contest, Jose -- beautiful in its rhyme and flow.... the uniqueness of it draws the reader in and then its repetitive familiarity and your 'image-painting' words keep them there to the end! That image is almost an indistinct warmth that the reader's faith can put a face to as they feel yours .... great one, sir! Thanx for sharing and best of luck!! ;) :) Yvette
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Well thank you Yvette. Words of praise from you are always welcomed. Though, I know you write better in your unique way. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Raul1
I think of Heaven as a peaceful happy place. It is good that you wrote this poem. I like how you talk about God. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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I think of Heaven as a peaceful happy place. It is good that you wrote this poem. I like how you talk about God. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Raul. I try to write what I feel sometimes it comes out alright. :) Glad you like it.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You describe your love is a divine and stunning sight, smiling is an angel, voice from heaven is your Lord's delight, lips illuminates Lord's light, as Lord's love smiles at lips; well said, well done.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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You describe your love is a divine and stunning sight, smiling is an angel, voice from heaven is your Lord's delight, lips illuminates Lord's light, as Lord's love smiles at lips; well said, well done.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you Al. :) I'm glad you liked it.
