Imagine
A Non Rhyming Loop Poem28 total reviews
Comment from Darlene Franklin
This doesn't need rhyme. The rhythm of the words, the looping words say it for you, what a great picture. Imagine, indeed, when the world falls at the feet of Jesus!
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This doesn't need rhyme. The rhythm of the words, the looping words say it for you, what a great picture. Imagine, indeed, when the world falls at the feet of Jesus!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much for these excellent comments, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Cindy Warren
I can imagine it. Wouldn't it be wonderful? Problem is, us imaginers don't have any power. The ones with power are greedy. As long as that greed and hunger for power exists in the world there will be people doing without. Sad.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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I can imagine it. Wouldn't it be wonderful? Problem is, us imaginers don't have any power. The ones with power are greedy. As long as that greed and hunger for power exists in the world there will be people doing without. Sad.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you and you are right we don't have any power, pity, many thanks for your wonderful comments and review****kahpot
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
If we didn't look at the difference in features and skin colour we would join hands and just with closed eyes, realize we feel the connection of human beings with feelings and thought processes, in common. Lovely picture depicting the way it should be, as well as your thoughtful poem.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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If we didn't look at the difference in features and skin colour we would join hands and just with closed eyes, realize we feel the connection of human beings with feelings and thought processes, in common. Lovely picture depicting the way it should be, as well as your thoughtful poem.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your excellent comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Derrick Payton
This was very well done and with a fitting illustration. Loved the concept, especially during these times. The power of empathy can be a true blessing, most just refuse to subject themselvesto it. A good read and successful loop!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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This was very well done and with a fitting illustration. Loved the concept, especially during these times. The power of empathy can be a true blessing, most just refuse to subject themselvesto it. A good read and successful loop!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Sallyo
Fathers ought to be Father's
Great take on the song... and philosophically, there are lots of people who have empathy. They're just not always the ones in power. I wonder how we'd go if governments were chosen by lot!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Fathers ought to be Father's
Great take on the song... and philosophically, there are lots of people who have empathy. They're just not always the ones in power. I wonder how we'd go if governments were chosen by lot!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you and I have corrected, many thanks for your help and wonderful comments****kahpot
Comment from moongirlwriter
OMGsh. . . I do so love this prompt but especially your writing. It's so perfect. I also love that song and am so glad you were inspired by it to write this work. Best of luck, it says so much to us all.
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OMGsh. . . I do so love this prompt but especially your writing. It's so perfect. I also love that song and am so glad you were inspired by it to write this work. Best of luck, it says so much to us all.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Wow! thank you very much, yes it is a great and inspirational song, your comments and stars are very much appreciated****kahpot
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your loop poem, kahpot. Your words read well. The repeated word at the start of each line fits in smoothly. Your words flow well and are thought-provoking. this would have made a great entry in the loop contest. My tiny suggestion, or file 13, is to make the last word a different color--maybe lighter blue--it is hard to read--kinda neon. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Admiration. Jan
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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You did a great job with your loop poem, kahpot. Your words read well. The repeated word at the start of each line fits in smoothly. Your words flow well and are thought-provoking. this would have made a great entry in the loop contest. My tiny suggestion, or file 13, is to make the last word a different color--maybe lighter blue--it is hard to read--kinda neon. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Admiration. Jan
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you, and changed it to black, many thanks for your help and these wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from karenina
I cannot hear or read the word "Imagine" without thinking of John Lennon... He, who so wanted us all to live in peace, was gunned down--as if to dream of a better way is a crime. This is an emotive piece which effectively "loops" throughout. I still imagine...I always will.--Karenina
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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I cannot hear or read the word "Imagine" without thinking of John Lennon... He, who so wanted us all to live in peace, was gunned down--as if to dream of a better way is a crime. This is an emotive piece which effectively "loops" throughout. I still imagine...I always will.--Karenina
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much, yes it is a wonderful song, and yes we should imagine and hope for the best, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are sending good vibes out to this crazy world with your poetry... I appreciate that!--Karenina
