Imagine
A Non Rhyming Loop Poem28 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I like this loop poem.
It flows nicely and loops well without being forced.
The message is a good one. I wish we did live in a world where all this was possible. Maybe if we can all imagine it, it will happen.
Sharon
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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I like this loop poem.
It flows nicely and loops well without being forced.
The message is a good one. I wish we did live in a world where all this was possible. Maybe if we can all imagine it, it will happen.
Sharon
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Thank you for these wonderful comments, sorry for the late reply****kahpot
Comment from Susan Larson
I'm just now learning about loop poetry, but this just fascinates me the way the carefully chosen words flow from one line to the next. This is such a positive piece. I love that it acknowledges the Father's empathy, the Father who sent his Son to experience and know true empathy.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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I'm just now learning about loop poetry, but this just fascinates me the way the carefully chosen words flow from one line to the next. This is such a positive piece. I love that it acknowledges the Father's empathy, the Father who sent his Son to experience and know true empathy.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments, sorry for the late reply****kahpot
Comment from Gypsymooncat
This is awesome! I have read a few of this loop poetry form and I like yours the most to be honest. I enjoyed the smooth flow of it, how the reader doesn't really notice that the last word of a line begins the next one; that was done seamlessly. I think you have a winner here, good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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This is awesome! I have read a few of this loop poetry form and I like yours the most to be honest. I enjoyed the smooth flow of it, how the reader doesn't really notice that the last word of a line begins the next one; that was done seamlessly. I think you have a winner here, good luck!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review and comments, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an inventive write and I liked the overall presentation because it is positive and forward thinking, if only we lived in a world that was this united, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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This is an inventive write and I liked the overall presentation because it is positive and forward thinking, if only we lived in a world that was this united, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much and yes it would be nice to be united, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, kahpot.
-A very well written loop
poem with effective imagery
that shows what the world could be.
-You use the idea of
Lennon's "Imagine" very well.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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-Nice image and
presentation, kahpot.
-A very well written loop
poem with effective imagery
that shows what the world could be.
-You use the idea of
Lennon's "Imagine" very well.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your very encouraging review and comments, as always much appreciated****kahpot
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Imaging", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. To me, this is a six, but I'm never given enough of them. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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"Imaging", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. To me, this is a six, but I'm never given enough of them. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Susan X Smith
This poem works very well without a thyme scheme and it certainly meets the requirements for a loop poem. Your words are well chosen and I think it would remind us of the John Lennon song which was your inspiration.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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This poem works very well without a thyme scheme and it certainly meets the requirements for a loop poem. Your words are well chosen and I think it would remind us of the John Lennon song which was your inspiration.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Beautiful!! Loved your loop poem. And instead of rhymes, you've packed a lot of assonance which adds to the sound of imploring of humanity which is silenced by greed.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Beautiful!! Loved your loop poem. And instead of rhymes, you've packed a lot of assonance which adds to the sound of imploring of humanity which is silenced by greed.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your excellent comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I like the technique in the following line:
greed that's taken the needs of people
The reason I like it is because it uses long 'e' assonance with 'greed' and 'needs' and 'people' and shows what its effects are next. I really really like the second to last line, too! Empathy is a hard virtue to achieve, but perhaps the best of them.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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I like the technique in the following line:
greed that's taken the needs of people
The reason I like it is because it uses long 'e' assonance with 'greed' and 'needs' and 'people' and shows what its effects are next. I really really like the second to last line, too! Empathy is a hard virtue to achieve, but perhaps the best of them.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank for this wonderful review and your comments on what you liked most, this all helps me, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from royowen
One of the major problems of humanity is their lack of faith in, not only God, but that creation has provided all we need to exist as an entity on earth, and you know, and I likewise, it has been shattered by the "ME" Syndrome. Beautifully written my friend, I love the narrative, the skill of it, and mostly the care behind it. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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One of the major problems of humanity is their lack of faith in, not only God, but that creation has provided all we need to exist as an entity on earth, and you know, and I likewise, it has been shattered by the "ME" Syndrome. Beautifully written my friend, I love the narrative, the skill of it, and mostly the care behind it. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2019
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Thank you Roy, and yes unfortunately our Faith seems to be lacking, hopefully the me can become we soon, as always much appreciated****kahpot
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Well done
