Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a well written poem of passionate love. He seems to want her all the time. This is the way love should be. I like the repetition in the poem. It accentuates the emotion.
Keep writing
Joan

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020

Thank you so much Joan as always

dip

reply by dragonpoet on 01-Jan-2020

You are most kindly welcome
Joan

reply by dragonpoet on 01-Jan-2020

You are most kindly welcome
Joan

Comment from Joseph Geraci

Excellent

Great read. The line "I'm your pawn in your game I guess" felt awkward to read to me. In that same stanza the word "just" seems unnecessary. Also in the second line of the first stanza I think the word "something" could be removed to sound better.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

Thanks so much Joseph yeah I know what you are saying I have tweaked it a bit. Appreciate your input and suggestions.

dip

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Being there for a loved one is everything, that listening ear and the support and it can never be underestimated, I know what it is like for that support to be gone overnight, I enjoyed your words here Dip, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

I am glad you could relate Dolly thanks so much for reviewing.

dip