Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

LOL - you did a good job using this image to pair with a one liner. Usually we read poems about dieting and being overweight, so this was a nice change of pace. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019

Thanks Lou. Glad you liked it. Jen

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Dean especially would have liked this poem as a combination of horror and humor--may he rest in peace. Your addition of rhyme and the clever picture is just right. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019

Thanks for the great review. Jen.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Usually, it's the other way around. I don't know many thin people but I know a lot of fat ones. It's a battle for sure to keep the weight in check. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

Thanks Marilyn. Jen

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is hilarious, Jen. I enjoyed reading it. Your one line, as required, fits the prompt well. The picture says it all. Your words are well-chosen and descriptive. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

So glad you like it. Thanks. Jen

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Some people do carry dieting to an extreme. Touch of humor thrown in for good measure. Much said in just one line. Well crafted and enjoyable poem.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

Thanks a lot. Jen,

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Hello jenintorre, I am guessing Toronto Maple leafs is a beer (I'm an Aussie) in which (any) case this is very humorous asking the over indulgent dieter to give it up and have some fun (life) love the artwork, very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

Thanks a lot. Glad you liked it. Jen.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written one-line poem about over dieting when we become so thin we look like a walking skeleton with skin over and wish we could lie somewhere to die.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

Thanks Sandra.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

He he he, this made me smile as this is a fun write! Some young girls diet in the extreme and let this image be a warning to them all! Good luck with the contest, I enjoyed your fun-filled words here Jen, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

Thanks Dolly. Glad you liked it. Jen X

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

You have made excellent use of all of your words in this humorous
reaction to the picture. Approaching the prompt through understatement
was clever and effective.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

Thank you so much for the great review. Jen

Comment from Gail Denham

Good

Funny - I so remember the years of dieting - up and down - this diet, that diet. It just ain't worth it - and I won't do it any longer. What I am, I am. Being careful with small portions - not that I'd ever get to the thinness of your image, mind you.
cute one-liner

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 Comment Written 08-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019

Thanke