Pappa's Memories and Ramblings
Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "You Talking to Me?"Poems, Rants, Short Stories and Ramblings
3 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi George. Your poem is well done. I like your novel interpretation of it. At first I was confused about the capitals mid sentence, all the way through. Then I read your author's note and went back to read it again--a poem within a poem. Great job. Unique, interesting. Welcome to the group. Marilyn
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
  |
Hi George. Your poem is well done. I like your novel interpretation of it. At first I was confused about the capitals mid sentence, all the way through. Then I read your author's note and went back to read it again--a poem within a poem. Great job. Unique, interesting. Welcome to the group. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
-
Thank you for the review and compliments, this is an excellent inspirational club for Writers. Blessings!
-
I'm happy to hear you're enjoying the club, George. It was started by Jax Franklin who has left the site and I've taken it over. Any questions, send me a message. Marilyn
Comment from Henry King
This is an excellent poem, GMARTINEZ, your rhyme and rhythm are very near a march step. I can hear the drums beating. You said it all, where you write, "I'll continue watching your six." There are some things that didn't sound right to me, and they are in the second verse. "... My Insurance of Disasters Prevention?" I believe the plural "Disasters" should be singular, "Disaster". If you want to keep it plural, put "preventing" in front disasters. The, in the last line "Pass" should be "Past". If you want to keep "Pass" delete "Get". Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
 |
This is an excellent poem, GMARTINEZ, your rhyme and rhythm are very near a march step. I can hear the drums beating. You said it all, where you write, "I'll continue watching your six." There are some things that didn't sound right to me, and they are in the second verse. "... My Insurance of Disasters Prevention?" I believe the plural "Disasters" should be singular, "Disaster". If you want to keep it plural, put "preventing" in front disasters. The, in the last line "Pass" should be "Past". If you want to keep "Pass" delete "Get". Well done.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
-
Thank you for the time to read and review this poem offering. I will make corrections shortly.
Greatly Appreciated. Blessings to you.
-
You are welcome.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the Club Challenge splendidly as you deliver a well penned piece that brings the Meerkats in the artwork to life for the reader. He does kind of have that look on his face LOL. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
|
This meets the Club Challenge splendidly as you deliver a well penned piece that brings the Meerkats in the artwork to life for the reader. He does kind of have that look on his face LOL. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
-
Thank you for the review and compliments. Blessings to you for your time to read and positive encouragement.
