Be Wee With Bea Part2
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Step by Step"Continuation of Bea's Strollings
8 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Something strange in the water, what can it be? It is nice that Bee has a direct line with the Maker; this helps a lot with taking the best decision under pressure. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Something strange in the water, what can it be? It is nice that Bee has a direct line with the Maker; this helps a lot with taking the best decision under pressure. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your enthusiasic review. I'm glad you enjoyed Bea. If you haven't read any others feel free to go to my portfolio to read a few.
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I will
Comment from Y. M. Roger
How fun!! You could actually write a funny little poem about the 'burdensome burdocks"! ;) And I just have to ask: did you purposefully write a lot of alliteration into this one...cuz it's REALLY there (especially toward the beginning)!;) :) Another fun episode with Bea and company although this was is a bit 'spookier' and has much more 'suspense' (all the 'words' applied to children, of course) than Bea's usually adventures...look forward to seeing what's in there! ;) Yvette
Puppy in pursuit of something living underground discovered --> Puppy, in pursuit of something living underground, discovered
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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How fun!! You could actually write a funny little poem about the 'burdensome burdocks"! ;) And I just have to ask: did you purposefully write a lot of alliteration into this one...cuz it's REALLY there (especially toward the beginning)!;) :) Another fun episode with Bea and company although this was is a bit 'spookier' and has much more 'suspense' (all the 'words' applied to children, of course) than Bea's usually adventures...look forward to seeing what's in there! ;) Yvette
Puppy in pursuit of something living underground discovered --> Puppy, in pursuit of something living underground, discovered
Comment Written 08-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your loyal following of Bea. Thank you for the all too common comma corrections. On my Grammarly, the common errors they cite me for are leaving out commas. In school, I was corrected for the overuse of commas. There's a balance there somewhere. You are right about my using a lot alliteration. I was feeling extra frisky. A very nice review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is simply delightful! It is really a fun and enjoyable read. You handle the dialog (internal and external) masterfully as it synchs with the characters without being overly weird as I've seen don in a couple of stories here. Well done an thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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This is simply delightful! It is really a fun and enjoyable read. You handle the dialog (internal and external) masterfully as it synchs with the characters without being overly weird as I've seen don in a couple of stories here. Well done an thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your very enthusiastic appreciative review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. If you haven't read any others feel free to go to my portfolio to read a few.
Comment from JLR
Another engaging chapter reading. Your writing continues to reflect thought and depth of character development. Always a delight to read your work....write on and write often.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Another engaging chapter reading. Your writing continues to reflect thought and depth of character development. Always a delight to read your work....write on and write often.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Why thank you. I'm so glad you are following Bea's opportunities to learn and mine also. I am including your name on my list of about 20 whose portfolio I regularly visit. I will see you on the other side.
Comment from Alex Rosel
I've never heard of the burdock plant before. After goggling it, I discovered it was a large herbaceous Old World plant which seems wholly appropriate to you fictive world {smiles}.
something quite concealed by the wringing wet ragged reeds -- I like the alliteration you use here.
This excerpt kept me engaged throughout. Thank you for an entertaining read {smiles}.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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I've never heard of the burdock plant before. After goggling it, I discovered it was a large herbaceous Old World plant which seems wholly appropriate to you fictive world {smiles}.
something quite concealed by the wringing wet ragged reeds -- I like the alliteration you use here.
This excerpt kept me engaged throughout. Thank you for an entertaining read {smiles}.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Wow.thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it as much as you did. I'm glad it challenged you to investigate burdocks. My cat Scruffles in real life along with another dog Zoe whom you will meet soon both go into them. They both had long hair. What a sensitive job to get them out. They grow freely in Vermont usa. I am including your name on my list of about 20 whose portfolio I regularly visit. I will see you on the other side.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Theme has a natural and concordised growth of plot in a realistic development of activities in appreciation, fear raised out of mistakes, and the mystery begins, curious ending; well said, well done. Thanks for sharing; liked your excellent work; enjoyed the read; write to inspire readers to change.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Theme has a natural and concordised growth of plot in a realistic development of activities in appreciation, fear raised out of mistakes, and the mystery begins, curious ending; well said, well done. Thanks for sharing; liked your excellent work; enjoyed the read; write to inspire readers to change.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your positive review. I' glad you enjoyed it. I am including your name on my list of about 20 whose portfolio I regularly visit. I will see you on the other side.
Comment from Janilou
An interesting chapter. Wondering what age group you are targeting?
A couple of notes for you to consider:
But they needn't have bothered worry.
This didn't read quite right for me.
Suggest:
But they needn't have bothered worrying.
All the best.
Jan
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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An interesting chapter. Wondering what age group you are targeting?
A couple of notes for you to consider:
But they needn't have bothered worry.
This didn't read quite right for me.
Suggest:
But they needn't have bothered worrying.
All the best.
Jan
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your interested review. I think the questionable phrase is due to my dialect. I'm from Vermont usa. Translated to " They did not need to worry." I guess my regional dialect sneaks in every so often.
Comment from lyenochka
It seems that the Maker is answering Bea's prayers but in a way that challenges her to walk by faith and not by what she can see with her eyes. I liked how they all worked individually to get their own burdocks off and yet had the closeness of a shared experience. Your beginning with "swishing, swirling, tumbling and plunging up and down" really showed the action!
"and was still bearly wet." (barely?)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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It seems that the Maker is answering Bea's prayers but in a way that challenges her to walk by faith and not by what she can see with her eyes. I liked how they all worked individually to get their own burdocks off and yet had the closeness of a shared experience. Your beginning with "swishing, swirling, tumbling and plunging up and down" really showed the action!
"and was still bearly wet." (barely?)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your enjoyable review. I can never remember the spelling for barely. But I just looked it up in the thesaurus and now I can connect barely with scarcely. I think I've got it thanks to you.
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It's quite understandable as you're writing about Bea who is a bear! :))
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lol...I do love your humor
