Cheater
What else are you going to say in this situation?27 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words were filled with anger and rage. The words of this poem were also sad, heartfelt, descriptive and thought provoking. The
reader pondered on the word "Cheater" and how it causes so much pain.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork fits well with the theme
of this poem.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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The author's words were filled with anger and rage. The words of this poem were also sad, heartfelt, descriptive and thought provoking. The
reader pondered on the word "Cheater" and how it causes so much pain.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork fits well with the theme
of this poem.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Gail Denham
Dear me - this is too sad - I only hope it isn't a true story. There can be resolvement of problems but not if they continue. Sorry, I get involved with the story of each poem. But your poem says it all well
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Dear me - this is too sad - I only hope it isn't a true story. There can be resolvement of problems but not if they continue. Sorry, I get involved with the story of each poem. But your poem says it all well
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Thanks for being the review that makes this an All-Time Best. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Appreciate the review.
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Well, you're welcome - I still don't know how all that works.
Comment from Father Flaps
There's lots of home wreckers out there, Brett. The artwork, "Devil girl", is the perfect choice for your poem. How could the average yokel resist?
I hear a lot of anger in your words. I hope this didn't happen to you.
I think some repetition can be effective, but I don't believe you need to repeat the whole first verse. Possibly the final two lines might work just as well.
Gordon Lightfoot wrote a song, describing himself as "the dust cloud on the edge of town". Here's a cover of this song, with Brian Ekard vocal and guitar, Lenny Hansell on bass, and Bob Woolcock on 12-string guitar.
https://youtu.be/QYmfJH6tJig
Cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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There's lots of home wreckers out there, Brett. The artwork, "Devil girl", is the perfect choice for your poem. How could the average yokel resist?
I hear a lot of anger in your words. I hope this didn't happen to you.
I think some repetition can be effective, but I don't believe you need to repeat the whole first verse. Possibly the final two lines might work just as well.
Gordon Lightfoot wrote a song, describing himself as "the dust cloud on the edge of town". Here's a cover of this song, with Brian Ekard vocal and guitar, Lenny Hansell on bass, and Bob Woolcock on 12-string guitar.
https://youtu.be/QYmfJH6tJig
Cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
As much as I dislike reading a 'cheater' poem, I also believe it's true. It's well written. This life was apparently destroyed by another person. Not good when that happens. Nobody should be a homewrecker. Giving you a six star rating.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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As much as I dislike reading a 'cheater' poem, I also believe it's true. It's well written. This life was apparently destroyed by another person. Not good when that happens. Nobody should be a homewrecker. Giving you a six star rating.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Appreciate the six stars and the review.
Comment from Stephen Force
Excellent job. your poem reads like a song. albeit a CW (I'm a jazz find:-)) the rhyme and meter were on point I could almost here a melody as I read it. I could almost feel the heat of anger. Devil girl picture was an excellent representation of the lyrics. nice job and good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Excellent job. your poem reads like a song. albeit a CW (I'm a jazz find:-)) the rhyme and meter were on point I could almost here a melody as I read it. I could almost feel the heat of anger. Devil girl picture was an excellent representation of the lyrics. nice job and good luck.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This skillfully-written, pull-no-punches poem powerfully (accidental alliteration!) states the mindset of a deceived husband--the shock, hurt, and wrath--DONE with her!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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This skillfully-written, pull-no-punches poem powerfully (accidental alliteration!) states the mindset of a deceived husband--the shock, hurt, and wrath--DONE with her!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Pantygynt
For me this reads like a country and western lyric, but then that is understandable knowing your background. Although not mentioned directly, the song title Devil Woman sprang to mind, the Cliff Richard one from the seventies but the country song from 1964 by Marty Robbins, a long time favourite of mine.
The ultimatre message is the same here as it was in 1964
Oh, devil woman, devil woman stay back from me!
Leave me alone, I wanna go home.
thanks for reminding me of an old fave.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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For me this reads like a country and western lyric, but then that is understandable knowing your background. Although not mentioned directly, the song title Devil Woman sprang to mind, the Cliff Richard one from the seventies but the country song from 1964 by Marty Robbins, a long time favourite of mine.
The ultimatre message is the same here as it was in 1964
Oh, devil woman, devil woman stay back from me!
Leave me alone, I wanna go home.
thanks for reminding me of an old fave.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Appreciate your insights and the review. Agreed, this could well be a Country lyric. I am known to write them.
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Yes I know. Lol.
Comment from robyn corum
Brett,
What a horrible story-line. Unfortunately, it happens far too frequently in real life. You portrayed the feelings of betrayal and hurt really well here, making this a great entry for the Love (gone wrong) Poetry Contest.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Brett,
What a horrible story-line. Unfortunately, it happens far too frequently in real life. You portrayed the feelings of betrayal and hurt really well here, making this a great entry for the Love (gone wrong) Poetry Contest.
Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Actually, it is for the Rhyming Contest. But, that is neither here nor there. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Susan Larson
What a wonderful way to get some of the venom out of your system. I wish I had used my words so well when I faced the same situation and told myself I promised God I would put up with whatever crap he dished out until one of us died. I finally realized I could save either my marriage or my self respect, and with a toddler to raise I couldn't afford taking a chance on getting AIDS. This was very cathartic!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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What a wonderful way to get some of the venom out of your system. I wish I had used my words so well when I faced the same situation and told myself I promised God I would put up with whatever crap he dished out until one of us died. I finally realized I could save either my marriage or my self respect, and with a toddler to raise I couldn't afford taking a chance on getting AIDS. This was very cathartic!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Joan E.
You selected the perfect artwork to reinforce your poem's theme. I can only hope that this story of lost love is fictional. Your rhymes and repeats certainly added to its intensity. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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You selected the perfect artwork to reinforce your poem's theme. I can only hope that this story of lost love is fictional. Your rhymes and repeats certainly added to its intensity. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. As I asked, what else are you going to say in this situation? Appreciate the review.
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I am glad you had the courage to write about lost love. Sighs- Joa
