The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from Loren .
This is so much fun and light-hearted reading. I didn't want the story to end. When Nicholas reached behind the cabinet (or slid it out) I got the feeling this was leading to something like CS Lewis' "The Lion the Witch and the Wardrobe." Sigh, such wonderful adventures there. But if this does not so lead, then staying in the wonderful garden with Constantine will suffice. As ever - Loren
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This is so much fun and light-hearted reading. I didn't want the story to end. When Nicholas reached behind the cabinet (or slid it out) I got the feeling this was leading to something like CS Lewis' "The Lion the Witch and the Wardrobe." Sigh, such wonderful adventures there. But if this does not so lead, then staying in the wonderful garden with Constantine will suffice. As ever - Loren
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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LOL! :) Yeah, didn't want to be a 'copy cat' and at some point I've got to get them out of the shed and out into the gardens! ;) Thanx for the review, Loren, and I'm so very glad you enjoyed! ;) ;) Take care and have a great week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. It seems the saying that plants are choosing humans and not the other way around is true. Some people have no luck to growing plants and flowers while others seem to have a natural talent.
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A very well-written chapter. It seems the saying that plants are choosing humans and not the other way around is true. Some people have no luck to growing plants and flowers while others seem to have a natural talent.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, Sandra -- always appreciate your input! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a fine contribution to the contest and I am sure it will be another winner. It is well written and engaging making for a delightfully fun reading experience. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This is a fine contribution to the contest and I am sure it will be another winner. It is well written and engaging making for a delightfully fun reading experience. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanx so much for taking the time to review this one, Angel -- much appreciated! ;) :) Have a wonderful week ahead! ;)
Comment from Heather Knight
This sounds like fun. It's the first time I read it but I like it.
I find magic characters very attractive.
Your 'sassy gnome' is something else.
Thanks so much for sharing.
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This sounds like fun. It's the first time I read it but I like it.
I find magic characters very attractive.
Your 'sassy gnome' is something else.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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LOL! Glad you enjoyed this one, Lady Maria -- thanx much for giving it a look-see. :) ;) Take care and have a great week! ;)
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Right back at you.
Comment from Colin John
Hi Yvette another amazing write and you really do know how to do it lol xx out of six stars but I will remember that next week although most of your works of art deserve it , kind regards Colin xx
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Hi Yvette another amazing write and you really do know how to do it lol xx out of six stars but I will remember that next week although most of your works of art deserve it , kind regards Colin xx
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you so very much for your review, Colin -- good to hear from you, sir! ;)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL, this gets crazier with each part, it's brilliant! I love Constantine, the gnome, he is a great character. So what's with this pink armadillo? He sounds as if he will be stirring things up. I'll look forward to the next part! :)) Sandra xx
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LOL, this gets crazier with each part, it's brilliant! I love Constantine, the gnome, he is a great character. So what's with this pink armadillo? He sounds as if he will be stirring things up. I'll look forward to the next part! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Yeah, I have a very specific personalty/plan for the little pink guy, Sandra! :) :) So glad you enjoyed, ma'am -- thanx for stopping by! ;) Yvette
Comment from kahpot
What an intriguing read, how come I have not come across "The gardens of Weatherbury" before? I will definitely go back and read more, but this story was very intriguing on it's own and like most good stories has a damn it finish-damn it because I'm in suspense, I am impressed with your writing skills-format, gramma, punctuation...****kahpot
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What an intriguing read, how come I have not come across "The gardens of Weatherbury" before? I will definitely go back and read more, but this story was very intriguing on it's own and like most good stories has a damn it finish-damn it because I'm in suspense, I am impressed with your writing skills-format, gramma, punctuation...****kahpot
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Oh, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it enough to go back and catch up, sir -- I do hope you find the beginning just as intriguing! :) My vision is for this to be for young middle school or even upper elementary once completed.... but hopefully their parent's will enjoy reading along with them!! ;):) Thanx for the review today and have a great weekend! :) Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A pink armadillo? What an imagination you have Yvette, I never know what is going to happen next in your writes which are full of fun and fantasy, love Dolly x
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A pink armadillo? What an imagination you have Yvette, I never know what is going to happen next in your writes which are full of fun and fantasy, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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LOL -- funny, that sounds strikingly similar to what my husband says sometimes... :) ;) ;) Thanx so much for stopping in on this one, Dolly -- I do so appreciate you! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Alex Rosel
I like your writing style and characterizations. Constantine is already "real" to me {smiles}.
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
In fact, curiosity had been the real reason I had opened the shed in the first place - specifically, curiosity about the cabinet Sir Phillipe had spoken of - the one Constantine was standing on. -- Your closing em dash is misplaced here. Remove the whats enclosed by the em dashes and your sentence doesn't make sense. The clause "the one Constantine was standing on" is a continuation of "specifically, curiosity about the cabinet Sir Phillipe had spoken of" and therefore should be enclosed within the em dashes.
He spluttered some more, held his arms out, and spun around in a very ungraceful circle, presumably for me to take a look at him. -- I like the imagery. I can see this in my mind's eye {smiles}.
"Can I get your hat for you?" I asked gently, my grin uncontainable. -- Ha, ha. This made me chuckle {smiles}.
A pink, armored ball rolled out from a hole revealed behind there. -- If this was mine, I'd omit the "behind there". It's a bit too telling, and the reader will understand where the hole is from the immediate previous narrative; it tends to detract from allowing the user to engage. It's a picky point, I know...
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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I like your writing style and characterizations. Constantine is already "real" to me {smiles}.
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
In fact, curiosity had been the real reason I had opened the shed in the first place - specifically, curiosity about the cabinet Sir Phillipe had spoken of - the one Constantine was standing on. -- Your closing em dash is misplaced here. Remove the whats enclosed by the em dashes and your sentence doesn't make sense. The clause "the one Constantine was standing on" is a continuation of "specifically, curiosity about the cabinet Sir Phillipe had spoken of" and therefore should be enclosed within the em dashes.
He spluttered some more, held his arms out, and spun around in a very ungraceful circle, presumably for me to take a look at him. -- I like the imagery. I can see this in my mind's eye {smiles}.
"Can I get your hat for you?" I asked gently, my grin uncontainable. -- Ha, ha. This made me chuckle {smiles}.
A pink, armored ball rolled out from a hole revealed behind there. -- If this was mine, I'd omit the "behind there". It's a bit too telling, and the reader will understand where the hole is from the immediate previous narrative; it tends to detract from allowing the user to engage. It's a picky point, I know...
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanx so much for stopping in to visit Nick and Constantine, Alex -- so very appreciate all the points here... I've fixed the first and last points there so thanx for those!! ;) :) Have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from royowen
You're very good at these type of stories Yvette, I wonder what caught Constantine's eye when the very nifty armadillo rolled very pinkly into the room with an exclamation by Constantine, well done my friend, blessings, Roy
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You're very good at these type of stories Yvette, I wonder what caught Constantine's eye when the very nifty armadillo rolled very pinkly into the room with an exclamation by Constantine, well done my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Guess you get to find out next time... LOL! ;) Thanx for the review, sir -- so good to here from the other side of the world over there!!;) :) Yvette
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Good job
