She Had A Name
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem about the dangers of drug use. Once we start using it, it is near impossible to quit without specialized help or stay hooked untI'll death.
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A very well-written rhyming poem about the dangers of drug use. Once we start using it, it is near impossible to quit without specialized help or stay hooked untI'll death.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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A bit like nicotine...! Thanks so much Sandra xoxoxox
Comment from Susan X Smith
I enjoyed reading this poem. While most of the rhymes are conventional I thought that "water" and "daughter" was a good one. The topic is heartbreaking. Thanks for sharing.
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I enjoyed reading this poem. While most of the rhymes are conventional I thought that "water" and "daughter" was a good one. The topic is heartbreaking. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much Susan xoxox
Comment from Cheryl I
This is a great creation for the Rhyming Poem contest. Your rhythm and rhyme are fantastic - I especially liked "water" and "daughter". Very nice job. Good luck in the contest! Cheryl
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This is a great creation for the Rhyming Poem contest. Your rhythm and rhyme are fantastic - I especially liked "water" and "daughter". Very nice job. Good luck in the contest! Cheryl
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much Cheryl, for your kind comments and also for the six stars! xoxoxo
Comment from Colin John
Hi there , although not all your own a great rewrite and wonderful rhymes here to get our teeth into .
This fully deserves a six but out, thanks for sharing kind regards Colin xx
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Hi there , although not all your own a great rewrite and wonderful rhymes here to get our teeth into .
This fully deserves a six but out, thanks for sharing kind regards Colin xx
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanks Colin, very much for your kind review. I need to point out though, that this is all my own work, albeit a poem I wrote 10 years ago and have pretty much rewritten it, not just tweaked! Thanks again xoxoxo
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sorry i though t i read that cheers colin
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No worries Colin, all good. I don't want to be disqualified or accused of plagiarism which is why I mentioned it! xoxoxo
Comment from karenina
Kudos poetess. You've written a saga of the addict that cuts like a knife into the social heart of the matter. Some look down with disdain when in fact this is an illness. So hard to find recovery! So many good souls lost!--Karenina
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Kudos poetess. You've written a saga of the addict that cuts like a knife into the social heart of the matter. Some look down with disdain when in fact this is an illness. So hard to find recovery! So many good souls lost!--Karenina
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much Karenina xoxoxoxo
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Our town librarian's daughter just died a month ago of an overdose of heroin...27 with an eleven year old son. Chasing that high! It's an epidemic!--Karenina
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That is a bloody pity, and even more so that she had an 11 year old son :(
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The granmom is raising him...as his father is also an addict and, in fact is the one who introduced her daughter to drugs... It's heartbreaking!--K
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This tells a story about the lady had transformation of activities through her name, though she lost everything in the process, left an identity a numbered tag; well said, well done.
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This tells a story about the lady had transformation of activities through her name, though she lost everything in the process, left an identity a numbered tag; well said, well done.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you Alcreator, glad you enjoyed xoxoxo
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"She Had A Name", is an exceptionally well-written and heart-wrenching piece. It was a privilege to read and review this talented poet's work. To me this is a six, but unfortunately I don't have any left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"She Had A Name", is an exceptionally well-written and heart-wrenching piece. It was a privilege to read and review this talented poet's work. To me this is a six, but unfortunately I don't have any left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much duchess, for your excellent comments and the mention of it being worthy of a six. It's the thought that counts! xoxoxox
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I liked your clever references here: "Major Tom" a Bowie song and "Lucy" The Beetles, the trips on drugs are not worth the life long damage they cause, fortunately I never tried them as I may have become a victim of them too, I liked your rhyming, but most of all I enjoyed your sentiment here, love Dolly x
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I liked your clever references here: "Major Tom" a Bowie song and "Lucy" The Beetles, the trips on drugs are not worth the life long damage they cause, fortunately I never tried them as I may have become a victim of them too, I liked your rhyming, but most of all I enjoyed your sentiment here, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much Dolly, I'm happy you enjoyed this xoxoxoxox
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow beautiful image that complements your writing. Even the poem is very sad, I really appreciate the clean cut of your sentences and the musicality between the line. The conclusion is a stairway to heaven"And so the metal slab and sheet
cocoons her body, bruised and beat
a life concluded in a bag
Identity: a numbered tag". Thank you for sharing and welcome back, I like your new name:)
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
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Wow beautiful image that complements your writing. Even the poem is very sad, I really appreciate the clean cut of your sentences and the musicality between the line. The conclusion is a stairway to heaven"And so the metal slab and sheet
cocoons her body, bruised and beat
a life concluded in a bag
Identity: a numbered tag". Thank you for sharing and welcome back, I like your new name:)
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Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
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Hey thanks Iza...but I don't remember you?!? Did you change your name too?
Anyways, I'm glad you liked this and appreciate your comments and five stars xoxoxoxoxo
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No, I am new:) I just join in June:)
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Well, welcome! I hope you're enjoying Fanstory. It's a great Site, even though I've tried others, but always come back. And sometimes I run out of $$ to pay my monthly subscription so that's also why I disappear for a while sometimes lol!
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Well I will stick around for a while:)
