She Had A Name
Drugs kill19 total reviews
Comment from Susan Larson
Your poem so well tells the story of so many who for whatever reason fall down this path. Very good references to songs that spoke if this tragedy but so many didn't listen. Very well done. It should do well in the competition.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Your poem so well tells the story of so many who for whatever reason fall down this path. Very good references to songs that spoke if this tragedy but so many didn't listen. Very well done. It should do well in the competition.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much Susan, I'm happy you enjoyed this xoxox
Comment from A. Willow Bends
This is absolute, brutal honest truth. This poem is phenomenal. You have nailed it. It has poetic beauty along with the chosen visual, but you have also conveyed the hidden horror. Do not change one thing. It is perfection.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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This is absolute, brutal honest truth. This poem is phenomenal. You have nailed it. It has poetic beauty along with the chosen visual, but you have also conveyed the hidden horror. Do not change one thing. It is perfection.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Thank you very much indeed Wendy, for your kind words and the six stars. I've not had any work of mine called "perfection" until today, and to say I'm honoured is an understatement! Thank you again xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very hard hitting and well written poem and the last stanza really got to me. I think this will do really well in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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This is a very hard hitting and well written poem and the last stanza really got to me. I think this will do really well in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much jenintorre, I'm glad you enjoyed this xoxoxo PS: I hope it does well in the contest, but we'll see!
Comment from lyenochka
This is so beautifully written and at the end my heart just grieves at the loss of life of this woman. I liked how you wove in the snippets of rock lyrics that I could identify like "Lucy" and "Major Tom." Superb!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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This is so beautifully written and at the end my heart just grieves at the loss of life of this woman. I liked how you wove in the snippets of rock lyrics that I could identify like "Lucy" and "Major Tom." Superb!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you lyenochka for your superb review!
Comment from LisaMay
All these druggie references I only know from songs such as David Bowie and The Beatles. I have led a sheltered life compared to some harrowing stories, such as you portray so convincingly with the sad fate of this poor girl. Your last stanza sums up the nameless tragedy of her ruined life.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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All these druggie references I only know from songs such as David Bowie and The Beatles. I have led a sheltered life compared to some harrowing stories, such as you portray so convincingly with the sad fate of this poor girl. Your last stanza sums up the nameless tragedy of her ruined life.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you indeed LisaMay. When I originally wrote this 10 years ago, I included a few more song references, but took them out. In fact, the only original part of the poem is the first stanza, the rest has been rewritten. Thanks again!
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Songs and poetry go very well together as reference material for their imagery.
How's South Durras these days?
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It is slowly warming up! Spring's in the air, the roo's are eating ALL MY PLANTS, but that promise of warmth is so welcoming! How about where you are?
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Those darn roos!
I'm in southern NZ and we have had a succession of balmy days - the blossoms have suddenly come out. I was walking in the botanic garden in Dunedin yesterday, admiring the beautiful magnolia trees and early flowering rhododendrons.
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That sounds lovely! The only things beginning to flower in my place and my neighbour's are the geraniums and hibiscus. Those damn roo's have eaten our roses down, chomped my primula's and I'm pd off as if you can't tell lol! They're lucky I think they're cute!!
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God had it worked out to protect animals by making pests cute. I even think mice are cute.
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** ppsssssttt ** don't want anyone to hear this from an ex bush girl...I think meeces are cute too! I had one in my stove top once that kept popping its little head up and wiggling it's widdle nose and I was completely smitten hahaha. Had to get it out of there though, but after numerous failed attempts, it disappeared anyway. But SSHHHHH!!! It's a secwet...
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Hahaha - perhaps you are better at killing snakes? When I lived in Australia I let them go too.
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Not better at killing snakes! I met more than one Mr Brown, and let them all go on their way, although in saying that, browns usually aren't aggressive and it's best to let 'em go, especially when one is clad in nothing but skimpy shorts or a sarong lol!
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Right enough... they are usually just wanting to avoid you anyway. The most snakes I ever saw was in Tassie.
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem alludes to song titles to tell the sad story of a mistreated or trafficked girl who probably goes to her death unknown and alone.
Keep writng
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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This poem alludes to song titles to tell the sad story of a mistreated or trafficked girl who probably goes to her death unknown and alone.
Keep writng
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much dragonpoet, I'm happy you enjoyed! xoxoxox
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You are most kindly welcome.
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written, creative poem vividly tells the heart-wrenching truth
about so many lives and how they end. Those who are hooked will degrade themselves to get that next fix, then the next--till the end.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Your well-written, creative poem vividly tells the heart-wrenching truth
about so many lives and how they end. Those who are hooked will degrade themselves to get that next fix, then the next--till the end.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you Janice xoxoxo
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from the art work you chose. It was very sad but very good. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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This is a very well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from the art work you chose. It was very sad but very good. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much Teri, glad you enjoyed it xoxoxo
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A very well written story about a drug addict in tetrameter and aabb rhyme. Well done. The meter was very smooth and the story sadly true, but each and every was someone's child. That is what is so sad. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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A very well written story about a drug addict in tetrameter and aabb rhyme. Well done. The meter was very smooth and the story sadly true, but each and every was someone's child. That is what is so sad. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much Nancy, I'm happy you enjoyed this xoxoxo
Comment from Gail Denham
It is a sad end indeed for this "jane doe" - and it does seem as if no one should end their lives like that - unknown. Nor (I believe ) should they sell their souls. That's so precious - and I've heard it said, there's a God-shaped hole inside us - needs to be filled by God's Holy Spirit.
Good poem
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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It is a sad end indeed for this "jane doe" - and it does seem as if no one should end their lives like that - unknown. Nor (I believe ) should they sell their souls. That's so precious - and I've heard it said, there's a God-shaped hole inside us - needs to be filled by God's Holy Spirit.
Good poem
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much Gail xoxox
