Timmy
a dog story16 total reviews
Comment from Sylvia Page
Loved this story. Imagine having a racoon as a pet. Here are few spag issues...
Tommy was a good boy
Pisa would cry and searching for him
I felt so fortunate that they let me part of their conspiracy,
I don't know where did you got him from,/ I don't know from where you got him,
I think I did the best thing in my life for taking these two buggers in/ I think I did the best thing in my life, taking these two buggers in
Mom took me in her arms and amused said:/Mom took me in her arms and amusedly said:
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Loved this story. Imagine having a racoon as a pet. Here are few spag issues...
Tommy
Pisa would cry and searching
I felt so fortunate that they let me
I don't know where did you got him from,/ I don't know from where you got him,
I think I did the best thing in my life for taking these two buggers in/ I think I did the best thing in my life, taking these two buggers in
Mom took me in her arms and amused said:/Mom took me in her arms and amusedly said:
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Thank you
Comment from Susan Larson
This was such a delightful read. Even with "normal" pets we never know what idiosyncrasies or strange habits they might have. Timmy is unite unique and I'm glad you were able to write about him.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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This was such a delightful read. Even with "normal" pets we never know what idiosyncrasies or strange habits they might have. Timmy is unite unique and I'm glad you were able to write about him.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much, and my cat looks like a raccoon, she inspired me to write this story.
Comment from Laurel Legion
Cute twist in your story to have the dog actually be a raccoon. I like how you led up to the discovery of the 'dog' really being a raccoon through details like how the 'dog' was 'kind of a burglar.' All in all, your story was well done in its premise.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Cute twist in your story to have the dog actually be a raccoon. I like how you led up to the discovery of the 'dog' really being a raccoon through details like how the 'dog' was 'kind of a burglar.' All in all, your story was well done in its premise.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from LisaMay
You have written a delightful story of a happy childhood and a family providing a happy and secure home for 2 rescue animals. Tucked into the sweet story is a valuable moral tale for humans - that it doesn't matter what people's backgrounds are, or if they are different, they should still be treated with love.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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You have written a delightful story of a happy childhood and a family providing a happy and secure home for 2 rescue animals. Tucked into the sweet story is a valuable moral tale for humans - that it doesn't matter what people's backgrounds are, or if they are different, they should still be treated with love.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you Lisa May you got exactly the message I was trying to send over to the reader:)
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You wrote it so well.
Comment from lyenochka
A very cute story with the innocent voice of a child as the narrator. You've convinced me - a raccoon can be man's best friend!
"Pisa it's an indoor cat. " (is not it's)
""Ok mom." (Okay, Mom.) You can write either OK or okay. We'd capitalize Mom here because it's used like a name. But we would write "my mom" if it's just a regular noun.
"our guest:" No, Peter, please met "
(our guest. No, Peter, please meet)
"He is tamed " (tame)
"happy and care free." (carefree)
"like they need it to be rescued" (needed) not 'need it'
"I told mom:" (Mom)
" We are three musketeers, mommy," (Mommy)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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A very cute story with the innocent voice of a child as the narrator. You've convinced me - a raccoon can be man's best friend!
"Pisa it's an indoor cat. " (is not it's)
""Ok mom." (Okay, Mom.) You can write either OK or okay. We'd capitalize Mom here because it's used like a name. But we would write "my mom" if it's just a regular noun.
"our guest:" No, Peter, please met "
(our guest. No, Peter, please meet)
"He is tamed " (tame)
"happy and care free." (carefree)
"like they need it to be rescued" (needed) not 'need it'
"I told mom:" (Mom)
" We are three musketeers, mommy," (Mommy)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your review and suggestions, I had to add those phrases today, because I had to have 1500 words:)
Comment from pbomar1115
To be honest, the raccoon does look similar to a small dog, but I knew right away the picture shown is clearly not a dog. Nevertheless, you put together a good story.
Phillip
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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To be honest, the raccoon does look similar to a small dog, but I knew right away the picture shown is clearly not a dog. Nevertheless, you put together a good story.
Phillip
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind review I had lots of fun writing it:)
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You're welcome, Iza.
Phillip
Comment from Gloria ....
Timmy is so cute, and your story is most endearing Iza. Animals stories are always high on my list of favourites.
There is one issue with the contest requirements, is you need a minimum of 1500 words, and by my word processor you only have 1097. So you will need to recheck that and add in another 450 words or so to avoid disqualification.
An easy repair I am sure. Good luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Timmy is so cute, and your story is most endearing Iza. Animals stories are always high on my list of favourites.
There is one issue with the contest requirements, is you need a minimum of 1500 words, and by my word processor you only have 1097. So you will need to recheck that and add in another 450 words or so to avoid disqualification.
An easy repair I am sure. Good luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for pointing this out, I will try to add more stuff and also thank you for reading my story.
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Hey, no problem. You will find the perfect spot to flesh out your story. :)
Comment from Gail Denham
That sure explains the stealing of things from neighbors - the squirreling away of food. But one wonders why the other kids didn't notice what he was. Cute story - definitely good for the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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That sure explains the stealing of things from neighbors - the squirreling away of food. But one wonders why the other kids didn't notice what he was. Cute story - definitely good for the contest.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Scarbrems
Aww. The dog that wasn't a dog. I loved this sweet tale. It was gentle and fun. I want a Racoon Dog, now, lol.
A little point:
'When I was six years old, I got a beautiful dog, black and white, I named him Timmy, and as they say, a dog is man's best friend, so he was' - This sentence needs breaking up with a full-stop (period if you are American) after 'black and white' instead of a comma.
Good luck in the contest with this charming entry.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Aww. The dog that wasn't a dog. I loved this sweet tale. It was gentle and fun. I want a Racoon Dog, now, lol.
A little point:
'When I was six years old, I got a beautiful dog, black and white, I named him Timmy, and as they say, a dog is man's best friend, so he was' - This sentence needs breaking up with a full-stop (period if you are American) after 'black and white' instead of a comma.
Good luck in the contest with this charming entry.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from CD Richards
Haha, well they certainly do look like a certain species of dog (which I can't name). Or maybe the dogs look like them. I've never seen a raccoon, other than in books or on TV, but they look very cute and cuddly. I'm sure untamed ones might give a different impression. I love stories where humans and other species appreciate each others' qualities and get along. You've spun a very nice tale here. Best of luck in the contest. Craig
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Haha, well they certainly do look like a certain species of dog (which I can't name). Or maybe the dogs look like them. I've never seen a raccoon, other than in books or on TV, but they look very cute and cuddly. I'm sure untamed ones might give a different impression. I love stories where humans and other species appreciate each others' qualities and get along. You've spun a very nice tale here. Best of luck in the contest. Craig
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much, and I am glad that you enjoyed
