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I'm Leaving Her

A man explains why he leaves his wife.

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Comment from Susan X Smith
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Wow, according to your description, she certainly deserved to be "left." The truth usually does "out," as you portray in this poem. as Shakespeare put it "Oh, what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to deceive."

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Susan.

    Phillip
Comment from Bill Schott
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My suggestion for this guy is this. Apply for an uncontested divorce; have papers sent via registered mail to your joint address; when it arrives, sign for it and toss it in the trash. With no response in ninety days, you're divorced. Then, tap it when you want, let her run around, and, when she wants to divorce you, let her know you're not married to her.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Hahaha. Thanks, Bill.

    Phillip
Comment from Susan Larson
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I related to this poem as I've been there with a philandering husband. Only good thing is that I got out of the marriage without any STDs. I don't think the words in your poem flows as well as they could, but I will say I do love your last word!

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Oh, no. Sorry. Thanks for reading, Susan.

    Phillip
Comment from Mistydawn
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What a powerful poem. It's very well-written, interesting, realistic, relatable. It has a nice even flow and rhymes very well. Your great word choice paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. Great job.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Misty.

    Phillip
Comment from Susan Morritt
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The one line of this poem that I liked was "ducks in a row." It fit in with the down to earth tone this poem seemed to convey... However, I find your use of the word, "Ho" very offensive and the moralistic and misogynistic tone of your poem preachy and self-righteous. Sorry

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 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Susan.

    Phillip
Comment from robyn corum
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Phillip,

Unfortunately, this is true. I like this man's way of dealing with things. Arguing and chasing and begging is a waste of time and it looks like he's far too good for her, anyway. Nice work!

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Robyn.

    Phillip
Comment from country ranch writer
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Some. People think the grass is greener elsewhere till they become bored with it.One who comes home all rumpled and worse for wear cares nothing about hiding the straying out like a. House cat.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Country.

    Phillip
Comment from Heather Knight
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I didn't know you wrote poetry too!
Your poem describes a very common situation and I think your narrator is doing the right thing. Why bother to fight?
Just one little thing: I don't understand the third line very well.
Thanks so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Maria.
Comment from Tootsie55
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This was a good poem, probably true for a lot of people. I tried to figure out what to do with this line... this is the best I could suggest. It's not that I followed her(,)explained what I learned. OR
It's not [that I followed](following her that)explained what I learned.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Tootie. I gave it some thought.

    Phillip
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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It is a good proposal ineffective and a fanciful imagination, leaving an untrue wife is easy in imagination; in reality it is not easy to leave a real wife; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    I've learned through experience. I was not a smart champion when I was married. This is my view now, as a single guy.


    Phillip