Comment from Pam (respa)

Exceptional

-A great picture of Ellie May and a
very good chapter, Sandra.
-I didn't stop to think that she must
be excited about being in the book, too.
-Poor Ellie is so scared, and Herbie is
trying so hard to be gentle.
-I like how you portray that so
a child is not frightened.
-I also like how you show the
trust Ellie has in Hetiwa.
-The scene with Thomas and Eric is
done well, and breaks up the tension.
-Hetiwa's response to Ellie's
singing is very touching.
-The ending is also good, as Ellie is re-united
with her dad, and the Indians want
to have a special celebration.
-But...there's always one of those...
The Medicine Man not only wants to
speak with Eric, but in English!
-I wouldn't be surprised if he wanted Eric and
Herbie to stay, or maybe he only wants
Herbie to because he is a Great Spirit!
-Then, what?!!

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019

Thank you for another of your brilliant review, Pam, and for all the beautiful stars. Your support throughout all my writing has been so encouraging it keeps me writing. Now then, what is it that the Medicine Man wants to chat about? And, more importantly, how come he is speaking perfect English all of a sudden when no one else in the tribe can? Hmm. I think Eric is in for one huge surprise! Biggest hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by Pam (respa) on 30-Aug-2019

You are very welcome and deserving, Sandra. I don't have a clue to the answers, but I am guessing you do! I think it will be a mystery character!

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Sandra,

Another good instalment. I'm sure Eric is loving this. I am also dyslexic so I know how difficult it can be.

body away from that thing that was talking to her. - maybe consider changing the first 'that' to 'the'. It may be a little smoother.

Good stuff
G

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019

You are? That is encouraging. Eric's mother is too, and she coped well. Eric has started to catch the letters and putting them together, and with all the help he'll get at his new school I don't doubt he'll be reading these stories by himself soon.
I hadn't noticed the two 'that' words being so close together, thanks for that, Gareth. I'll go and sort that now. Thanks for the encouraging review, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

Very readable story. I did stumble over "bolshie" and "stroppy." Obstreperous made more sense by itself. Interesting characters meeting these Native Americans. Hetiwa is an interesting name. It feels like there is mutual respect developing stronger in each chapter.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019

Thank you so much for reading this part and your nice review. Obstreperous would make sense to grown-ups, but not to most 11-year-old boy, so because this is written for that age group and younger, the meaning of the word had to come in, and it was better to do it through Herbie, a machine. You aren't the only one to like Hetiwa's name, it was, and might still be, an Arapaho Indian girl's name back in the 1800s and earlier. The Chief's name, likewise. Thanks again, I really appreciate your support. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

Do you make your names up or do you find them online? You always come up with wonderful ones like Hetiwa.

I love the word obstreperous.

For some reason (maybe the sense of adventure), and even though it's very different, this reminds me of reading Famous Five as a little girl. How I loved those books!

Great chapter and great photo.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019

I searched Google for Arapaho Indian names. Chief Niwot, was an actual chief and his name meant 'Chief Left Hand' guess left-handed people were unknown back in the early 1800s. I wrote the meaning of Hetiwa down, and can't find it now. I'll let you know if I do. It was something nice, anyway.
I enjoyed those books too. A long time ago now. Thank you, Maria, for your lovely review. Big hugs. Sandra xxx

Comment from Sylvia Page

Exceptional

Your granddaughter is a beautiful little girl. She must be proud of you putting her in the story and the important role she plays. I really enjoyed ready this chapter. I could just picture the events unfolding.
Take care,
Sylvia

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019

What a lovely review, thank you, Sylvia. And a big hug for the 6 lovely stars. I think she's a beautiful girl, too, lol. I might be a bit biased though. :)) Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Cheryl I

Excellent

Your granddaughter looks very cool in that costume! I really enjoyed reading another part of your story. It is very entertaining and it reads smoothly. Very nice job. Cheryl

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019

Thank you so much, Cheryl, I'll pass that on to her! lol. I'm delighted you are enjoying this story!! :)) Sandra xx

Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Sandra,
Well, it looks like this is turning into a Sandra Stoner-Mitchell family reunion,
next thing you know, Graham will turn out to be the medicine man. :)

An excellent chapter. I especially like the portrayal of Hetiwa.

I told you there was more to that medicine man than met the eye. An excellent twist and ending for the chapter.

The dialogue was excellent, and quite realistic.
Well done
Robert

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019

LOL! Grahm would make a wonderful Medicine Man, I'll mention it to him and see if he'd like the part! Thank you for another lovely review, Robert, and the shiny stars. You'll have a surprise in the next part. :)) Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from WryWriter

Excellent

Oh what an exciting place to leave off! The medicine man will keep readers wondering until the next chapter. This was a most enjoyable reading experience!

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019

Thank you for another fabulous review! My head is quite swollen now! LOL. I'm delighted you are enjoying this story, your reviews are so encouraging. More hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

A really excellent chapter, Sandra. The Indians have softened their attitude but I'm still curious about what drove them to attack Ellie's father and abduct Ellie.

That shaman is turning out to be quite the conundrum!

Good ending leaving your readers gasping for more

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019

Lots more info coming out in the final two parts. Thank you so much, Julia, for this lovely review. I really have appreciated all your support. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

Cute picture of 'Ellie May.' So now she has been found and is reunited with her father and we find out the reason she was taken was because of her beautiful voice. Very interesting. Now the Medicine Man wants to talk to Eric. Humm.. =} Looking forward to the next chapter. Rox

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019

Thank you for another lovely review, Rox. I'm just as flummoxed as everyone else! I had intended to end it here, but this silly Medicine Man stuck his five eggs in! It will be interesting finding out what's going on! lol. Big hugs, dear friend. :) Sandra xx