Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Not at all good. They Charles and Helen are being innocently accused of being terrorists simply because their taxi driver is one. Now I'm wonder if it was a coincidence he was their taxi driver. I doubt it.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

I think you might be right there! It would have been a strange coincidence. I wonder what?s at the bottom of it.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written chapter, from tourist to terrorist status in a shorttime. In a foreign country it is quite easy to get it trouble unkowingly. The best option has to stay out of sight for a while.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks, Sandra. Yes - they might be wise to go to ground.

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi Tony. Another big change in events I see. You have no concerns about keeping the story full of action my friend. LOL I had the feeling that Charles never finished his shower?

"I'd scarcely begun to wash the city grime from my body when she called out, "Charles! Come quickly. They are showing details of the bombing on the news."

Did he?

Good job again, my friend. : ) Bob

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks for the review, Bob.
I guess Charles would still have been wet when he hurried back into the bedroom with a towel round his torso. Maybe I should make him drip a bit. LOL

reply by Mastery on 27-Aug-2019

He hadn't even finished soaping down had he? LOL

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

My goodness, Tony, things are really happening here and the good Charles is in the thick of it all. Now, how is this all tied in with the letter, I can't even guess. I'm sure it will all become clear, though. All best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks, Ulla. The letter is still there in the back of my mind!

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

I liked the energy and tension you evoke as you write these pivot points in your story. You have changed the entire dynamics by making Charles and Helen the hunted ones now. I am looking forward to seeing where you take them from here. Well done, Tony.

Melissa

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks, Melissa. I appreciate your comments about the energy and tension. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Rasheed wasn't protecting them. He was protecting himself. If he hadn't raced off like that, they wouldn't be after Charles and Helen, I think. Good chapter with lots of tension.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review, Yvonne. Thanks for your remark about the tension. Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax.

Comment from estory

Exceptional

This is building momentum. I think you did a good job writing Charles and Helen into this terrorist plot, and casting Rasheed as a mysterious possible double faced friend/enemy. This is getting more interesting, as the plot thickens. I liked the tense scene with Rasheed in the taxi, but maybe you could have woven in a little more of the secret police chasing them to keep up the action. The hotel scene was really good. The power outage created some more tension, some more uncertainty, and the dialogue with Helen was tense and this new development sets the story up for some more great tension and action to come. estory

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review, estory, and for the sixth star. I'll have a look at that suggestion about making more of the car chase. I appreciate your remarks about the tension. Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax.

Comment from lyenochka

Exceptional

Wow! You had me on the edge of my seat here. It's like watching an action movie and we never know whom we can trust. I was beginning to like Rasheed and now well, he seems to be a big source of trouble!

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review, Helen, and for the sixth star. Much appreciated! Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax. It looks as if Rasheed may turn out to be more than the minor character that I first envisaged.

Comment from Gail Denham

Excellent

Excellent chapter - enjoyed it - lots of action, good dialog, and believable happenings. I sure don't understand the factions that are fighting, but you explain it very well, slipping in foreign words and descriptions.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review, Gail. I appreciate your remarks about the action and the dialogue. Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Well, it does seem as though Rasheed planted the bombs and Helen and Charles were just in the wrong place at the time, Tony. You did a great job with this chapter. There is much action that is intense and leaves readers wondering many things about all three in the taxi. I still have many suspicions about Rasheed and Helen. I believe Rasheed uses the taxi thing as a cover. How easy it would be to plant a bomb--no one would suspect, then drive away with 2 unsuspecting foreigners who he could blame for the bomb. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review, Jan. I appreciate your encouragement. Things are beginning to hot up for these two now, as we approach the climax. Rasheed has taken on a larger role than at first envisaged.