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A Novel

27 total reviews 
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Tony. I'm not a long-term member of FS. I have only been here three months so I have not followed your writing. I found this interesting and action-packed so I believe I will continue to read your new releases. Robert

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Hi, Robert. Good of you to drop by to review this chapter. Much appreciated. I?m delighted that you enjoyed it enough to want to read more. All good wishes, Tony.
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 30-Aug-2019
    You're quite welcome.
Comment from Pam (respa)
Exceptional
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-This is a very good chapter,Tony,
and there is plenty of action and suspense.
-You waste no time with Rasheed's
rapid, zigzagging driving and Charles'
efforts to confront him.
-I don't know how Rasheed kept driving!
-As Helen and Charles are set to
relax, the news comes on and
reports on a bombing that has taken place.
-As they watch, it seems Rasheed, as well as
Helen and Charles, are now the suspected terrorists.
-This is certainly a twist in the plot;
can things get any worse?! Probably!
-You did a great job with this chapter;
I could easily visualize it as a movie scene.
-Now we need some good actors-
maybe Charlize Theron as Helen and
Matt Damon as Charles! I will leave Jeanne to you!


 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Pam. I?m delighted that the increasing action and drama as we approach the climax is working OK. Thanks, too, for the sixth star. As always, much appreciated. All the best, Tony.
reply by Pam (respa) on 30-Aug-2019
    You are very welcome and deserving, Tony. You are certainly building to something! Rasheed has spiced up the story, ha,ha.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Wow what drama in Lahore with Rasheed, it seems he is much more than a conman taxi driver. Plenty of twists in this story Tony, you don't know who to trust.
cheers
valda

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Thanks for the review, Valda. They seem to have arrived in dangerous territory. They?d be wise not to take too much at face value, though they may not listen to me! Gratuitous advice usually goes astray! LOL
Comment from rspoet
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Hello Tony.
More twist and turns, you can't trust anyone in a Tony Fawcus story.

That red turban is a bit of an eye-catcher.

There must be some underlying connection between Rasheed and
the mission of Helen and Charles. It would be stretching coincidence
to think Rasheed's appearance was just a random evident.

I think Charles is in over his head, hopefully Helen continues to display
the instincts of an experience operative.

Well done, worthy of a six but I'm a little short of them this week.
Robert



 Comment Written 28-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Yes, you?d have thought Rasheed might have chosen a less distinctive colour if he had any sense. You?re right about stretching coincidence. He must have known they were coming. Question is, who?s the leak, and what?s the connection with Th Lion? As Charles might have said, ?Dashed if I know!?
Comment from Sylvia Page
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Rasheed was building his alibi and it explains the gun. He is a terrorist and is trying to shift the blame to Charles and Helen. It won't be long when Charles and Helen will be interrogated by the authorities. This chapter has built suspense. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Sylvia

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Sylvia. Let?s hope that they can evade capture. Those Pakistani secret police sound like a nasty lot.
Comment from robyn corum
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Tony,

Oh, wow. Good ole Rasheed. Sweet Rasheed. Kind, good, spiritual, divine, helpful, Rasheed. Right. And pigs are flying.

Well, I admit, I didn't see that coming. Nice job. (Though I am puzzled why they immediately thought the bomber was him? I think I would have waited until they said the two others got into the car with him. .. But then, I'm not a spy...)

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    You can?t trust anyone these days, especially in a mystery/thriller. I think the ?red turban? and ?tall man? made them jump to the right conclusion early. Perhaps these two are smarter than they sometimes seem!
    Thanks for continuing to follow the story. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from giraffmang
Exceptional
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Poor old Charles, and all over some old envelop. That's it... no more car boot sales for me. You can't be too careful.

Superb chapter once again as the difficulties for Charles just keep mounting up.

G

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    It makes me glad I gave up stamp collecting some years ago. With luck, these two may think of a clever ruse to get them out of trouble, temporarily at least. Whether it will be another six star effort remains to be seen. They?re working on it.
Comment from Mistydawn
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This is a very interesting chapter. It was the first one I've read in the story, but I could easily understand what's going on. It's very fast-paced, a lot of action, suspense. I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Very many thanks for dropping in on this. I?m delighted that it?s piqued your interest enough to give another chapter a glance. All good wishes, Tony.
    p.s. Love the profile pic. We?re expecting a new grandchild in a few days. Can?t wait!
reply by Mistydawn on 29-Aug-2019
    Congratulations. Grandchildren are the best.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Exceptional
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I really like your story, so finally, I can give you a heavenly rewardð??? With Rasheed on their side, our heroes become very famous in the split of a... Bomb. What's next?

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Iza, for your review and the sparkling six. My firmament glows! All good wishes, Tony
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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Quite the intrigue going on here in this chapter. The driver turns out to be a terrorist, and now Charles and Helen are feeling as if they will be hunted as accomplices of some kind. I sure like the more ordinary details such as a jessamine bush and pye-dog. I had to look up the word "slewed," but you kind of give a clue by using "swung around" in a paragraph soon after that. Not sure what to fix, except to point out that "slewed" did not make sense to a run-of-the-mill American reader.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
    Thanks very much for your review and encouragement, Cookie. A few people have commented on ?slewed?. I may have to reconsider it. Perhaps it?s more common in British English than American English.
    All good wishes. Tony.