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Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "St. Louis Chapter 11 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
A lot has happened. About time they checked Megan's apartment. Did they just find more clues, or just more questions? It's something to work on, at least.
I'm glad to see them admit they're in a relationship. It seems oddly reluctant, though, which just makes it cute. :)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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A lot has happened. About time they checked Megan's apartment. Did they just find more clues, or just more questions? It's something to work on, at least.
I'm glad to see them admit they're in a relationship. It seems oddly reluctant, though, which just makes it cute. :)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from susand3022
OOOOHHHH!!!! Maybe she was doing the bump-and-run with Lefty... and when she got knocked up she went to get a pregnancy test and Lefty's wife was there and saw her. ... Well, it's one thing that her husband's got some little tart somewhere... but he's not going to have a second family somewhere! That she won't have! Thus, Lefty's old lady bumps off Meghan, Lefty's mistress. LOL
Okay... that's enough of that... Six-year-olds!!!! Yeah!!!! Can I come??? Can I?? Huh? Can I? Huh? Huh? LOL Okay, everybody! Now, instead of Mommy and Daddy reading to you at bedtime every night, it's your turn to read to them! So pick out a book, and bring it home so you can read it to Mommy or Daddy before you go to bed. :) I remember those days... :) I was such a classroom mom! I loved reading time, I used to come in and help, sit with the kids and let them read to me, or come in for craft time (unless it was during a holiday... then I wasn't allowed!) lol
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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OOOOHHHH!!!! Maybe she was doing the bump-and-run with Lefty... and when she got knocked up she went to get a pregnancy test and Lefty's wife was there and saw her. ... Well, it's one thing that her husband's got some little tart somewhere... but he's not going to have a second family somewhere! That she won't have! Thus, Lefty's old lady bumps off Meghan, Lefty's mistress. LOL
Okay... that's enough of that... Six-year-olds!!!! Yeah!!!! Can I come??? Can I?? Huh? Can I? Huh? Huh? LOL Okay, everybody! Now, instead of Mommy and Daddy reading to you at bedtime every night, it's your turn to read to them! So pick out a book, and bring it home so you can read it to Mommy or Daddy before you go to bed. :) I remember those days... :) I was such a classroom mom! I loved reading time, I used to come in and help, sit with the kids and let them read to me, or come in for craft time (unless it was during a holiday... then I wasn't allowed!) lol
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Unfortunately at my school, most of my parents can't read. Oh my!!! Thank you for stopping by. You're welcome anytime in my classroom.
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Where is it? If it's close enough I just might walk in the door one day! LOL
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I'm in Texas. How close are you???
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A bit far away Barbara... Rhode Island... Though if you're in Arlington, I've got a great friend there who I bet would be there in a split second with reinforcements!
Comment from Sankey
Another excellent chapter once more. Just sorry I don't have any more SIXES for ya. Just know it was intended. You never disappoint in your writing. Keep it coming.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Another excellent chapter once more. Just sorry I don't have any more SIXES for ya. Just know it was intended. You never disappoint in your writing. Keep it coming.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. Don't worry about the six, virtual sixes are just as good.
Comment from judiverse
As Mac and Logan search Megan's apartment and still have questions. No sign of her phone or a handbag. Then there's a meeting with Sidney, whoever he or she may be. Mac's also puzzled about no autopsy report. The home pregnancy test adds another dimension. If she was pregnant, could that have been a motive for murder? This is really great. Mac is trying to work with what facts she has. Logan apparently that his little sister was no innocent little girl. Good luck with back to school! judi
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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As Mac and Logan search Megan's apartment and still have questions. No sign of her phone or a handbag. Then there's a meeting with Sidney, whoever he or she may be. Mac's also puzzled about no autopsy report. The home pregnancy test adds another dimension. If she was pregnant, could that have been a motive for murder? This is really great. Mac is trying to work with what facts she has. Logan apparently that his little sister was no innocent little girl. Good luck with back to school! judi
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're welcome. Hope the school year is off to a good start. Wondering if you have the same principal. judi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara. I love the story and I'm enjoying reading along. Romance is definitely brewing. It's a great story. The pregnancy could be significant.
After she sighed, she said,= I think this sounds a bit contrite. What about:
'She sighed', and then continue with the dialogue. Just a suggestion.
All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Hi Barbara. I love the story and I'm enjoying reading along. Romance is definitely brewing. It's a great story. The pregnancy could be significant.
After she sighed, she said,= I think this sounds a bit contrite. What about:
'She sighed', and then continue with the dialogue. Just a suggestion.
All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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I will take another look at that area. Thank you.
Comment from royowen
The conversations and innuendo about each other are becoming quite personal for two people who are only having a "casual" relationship, closer and closer to home, heh heh. Poor Logan I know how it would feel having one slightly seedy life paraded in front of his perception of her. An excellent episode, well done Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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The conversations and innuendo about each other are becoming quite personal for two people who are only having a "casual" relationship, closer and closer to home, heh heh. Poor Logan I know how it would feel having one slightly seedy life paraded in front of his perception of her. An excellent episode, well done Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
Thank you for the encouraging review and understanding.
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Good episode Barbara
Comment from Ben Colder
The story is shaping up and leading to an area I think can be a good help. Look for the father and you have purpose. This couple should do well in days to come. Good one Barb. See spot run. Run, run, run. Have a good teaching year.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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The story is shaping up and leading to an area I think can be a good help. Look for the father and you have purpose. This couple should do well in days to come. Good one Barb. See spot run. Run, run, run. Have a good teaching year.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Plot progression is verily organized, structured and expressively worded, I enjoyed small but realistic, relevant and contributory dialogues all the way; characters continue drawn from reality; well said, well done.
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Plot progression is verily organized, structured and expressively worded, I enjoyed small but realistic, relevant and contributory dialogues all the way; characters continue drawn from reality; well said, well done.
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Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Tootsie55
Another great chapter. I started over here fo a change. Don 't forget after I leave this place you may be able to give me a link to this story if you dowanna e-mail the script of ensuing chapters. I hope I make it to the end. I love your stories. Now a pile of Spagarama©G.C.Moore... this time. [You're](Your) dad brought up an
If she[,] was(,) who's the father?"
"I'd like to[o].
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Another great chapter. I started over here fo a change. Don 't forget after I leave this place you may be able to give me a link to this story if you dowanna e-mail the script of ensuing chapters. I hope I make it to the end. I love your stories. Now a pile of Spagarama©G.C.Moore... this time. [You're](Your) dad brought up an
If she[,] was(,) who's the father?"
"I'd like to[o].
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Once again, I made stupid errors. Thank you for the catch. Please remind me before you leave.
