Public Transportation
What public transportation looks like17 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
This was excellent! Loved every word. Had to go back when I realized the rhyming lines hehe. Loved the great picture of the doc in specs too. One suggestion..Centre (center- US) the lines for poetic format and would look better. NO SPAGS! WOW!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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This was excellent! Loved every word. Had to go back when I realized the rhyming lines hehe. Loved the great picture of the doc in specs too. One suggestion..Centre (center- US) the lines for poetic format and would look better. NO SPAGS! WOW!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Sankey.
Phillip
Comment from Spitfire
If it's not loud conversations, both women and men have on their cell--good observation. I see this in our dining room a lot and wonder how the speaker can hear his/her friend.
You do need to put a period after every line because it is a complete sentence.
You're a sport to see the entertainment in this.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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If it's not loud conversations, both women and men have on their cell--good observation. I see this in our dining room a lot and wonder how the speaker can hear his/her friend.
You do need to put a period after every line because it is a complete sentence.
You're a sport to see the entertainment in this.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Someone stop me from punctuating poems. Are you sure? I know you are an excellent writer.
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Positive. Take a look at some of the poems written by the best: Robert Frost, Dylan Thomas, for examples.
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Yes, you are right about the punctuation, Spitfire. I went back and did it.
Phillip
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Because you are a skillful writer, I was very much incline to take your word even though I ran across a few who use punctuation some, in one piece. That is what confused me, not your correction. I just needed to make sense why some use punctuation and not get called out on it.
Phillip
Comment from Tiffanny Brooks
I loved this poem! The picture is perfect, too. The look on the dog's face grounds the poem...his gaze implies patient annoyance with humans.
Super fun and funny!
Tiffanny
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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I loved this poem! The picture is perfect, too. The look on the dog's face grounds the poem...his gaze implies patient annoyance with humans.
Super fun and funny!
Tiffanny
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Tiffanny.
Phillip
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I agree with your statement, pbomar. We all have to listen to those LOUD phone calls everywhere. I enjoyed your little 'rant.' Your words are descriptive with good rhyme. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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I agree with your statement, pbomar. We all have to listen to those LOUD phone calls everywhere. I enjoyed your little 'rant.' Your words are descriptive with good rhyme. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Jan.
Phillip
Comment from royowen
We were in New York four times for and extended period of about 6weeks at a time, it's too expensive to own a car there, but the public transport is brilliant, so I've observed the life on those ubiquitous vehicles, here we very rarely travel by public transport, well written Phil, good job, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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We were in New York four times for and extended period of about 6weeks at a time, it's too expensive to own a car there, but the public transport is brilliant, so I've observed the life on those ubiquitous vehicles, here we very rarely travel by public transport, well written Phil, good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Roy.
Phillip
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Welcome Phil
Comment from Charlie.lottie
Rhyming umbrella and salmonella was genius and made me laugh. The poem overall is really fun and light, so the rhyme scheme suits it well. The only thing I can see to improve is the last line, that reads a little clunkily to me
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Rhyming umbrella and salmonella was genius and made me laugh. The poem overall is really fun and light, so the rhyme scheme suits it well. The only thing I can see to improve is the last line, that reads a little clunkily to me
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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I'm not great at poem writing, but I'll take another look at it, Charlie.
Phillip
Comment from Micah Sincere
This was a very good and entertaining read ive used my share of public transportation so i can totally relate never know what can happen thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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This was a very good and entertaining read ive used my share of public transportation so i can totally relate never know what can happen thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Micah, for reading the piece.
Phillip
