Red and Blue
A picture challenge22 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Unfortunately a lot relationships can be based on lust and not love, physical attraction can be great, not that I think for a minute it should be entertakned, it robs that special someone of a special gift. Beautifully written Christine, what a fine interpretation of this picture this club. Your talent shines in this pentametric aabb ccdd eeff gg work, well done Christine, blessings. Roy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Unfortunately a lot relationships can be based on lust and not love, physical attraction can be great, not that I think for a minute it should be entertakned, it robs that special someone of a special gift. Beautifully written Christine, what a fine interpretation of this picture this club. Your talent shines in this pentametric aabb ccdd eeff gg work, well done Christine, blessings. Roy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Hi Roy Thanks for reading my effort for this challenge and yes tried for a pentameter Sonnet style Seemed to work Nearly Home It is cold and windy Brrr
Cheers Chris
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Yes I find the aabb rhyming natural, but see if the opposite works, it takes work, well done Christine, Roy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and interpretation of the picture. Man and woman are always attracted to one another area first for many reasons. Only time will tell if the attraction will last.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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A very well-written poem and interpretation of the picture. Man and woman are always attracted to one another area first for many reasons. Only time will tell if the attraction will last.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hi Sandra Thanks for your review a good image for this challenge will be interesting to see how other interpret this one ?My immediate thought was her desire to get away LOL Cheers Chris
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your skillfully-written poem is dramatically emotional and moving. Sex
without warmth and a show of love could well be worse than no sex at all,
leaving a huge void in one's life.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Your skillfully-written poem is dramatically emotional and moving. Sex
without warmth and a show of love could well be worse than no sex at all,
leaving a huge void in one's life.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hi Janice, Thanks so much and it is interesting how one interprets images Bit sex without warmth is not the way to go Cheers Chris
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Chrissy, Well done - a good interpretation of the picture. A good Ekphrastic poem. What is even more important - your rhyme and meter are spot on and you tell a good tale. 'No loving warmth from him has ever shown' (was ever shown), tiny comment on an otherwise really very good poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hello Chrissy, Well done - a good interpretation of the picture. A good Ekphrastic poem. What is even more important - your rhyme and meter are spot on and you tell a good tale. 'No loving warmth from him has ever shown' (was ever shown), tiny comment on an otherwise really very good poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hi Dorothy Thanks for your review The first glance at this image just gave me this thought so I went with my initial feeling just something in her eyes Cheers Chris may review your suggestion
Comment from Debra White
Hi Chrissie,
I love your interpretation of the artwork. It really does look like she would rather be anywhere else other than with him.
I enjoyed how you wrote the poem from what you imagine her perspective to be.
Smooth meter and sound rhyme scheme made for a really enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing, best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hi Chrissie,
I love your interpretation of the artwork. It really does look like she would rather be anywhere else other than with him.
I enjoyed how you wrote the poem from what you imagine her perspective to be.
Smooth meter and sound rhyme scheme made for a really enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing, best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hi Debra, Thanks so much and glad you could see where I came from with my interpretation I try to do a smooth meter and rhyme Many Cheers Christine
Comment from Mark Valentine
I love that you wrote this as a sonnet- how the classic form usually associated with romantic love, gets turned on its head a bit to let the reader see the difference between lust and love. You also capture the look in her eyes perfectly, and the line "The colours of her life it must be said
Are bleak and blue while she charades in red." is a brilliant play on the colors of the picture and the double meaning of "blue"
And so, the first six of the week goes to...
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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I love that you wrote this as a sonnet- how the classic form usually associated with romantic love, gets turned on its head a bit to let the reader see the difference between lust and love. You also capture the look in her eyes perfectly, and the line "The colours of her life it must be said
Are bleak and blue while she charades in red." is a brilliant play on the colors of the picture and the double meaning of "blue"
And so, the first six of the week goes to...
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hi Mark. Thanks so much and I thought a sonnet would be the way to go for this but unsure if ai should call it a sonnet as it has aabb ccdd eeff gg rhyme and does a sonnet have abab cdcd etc? I just write what I see and her eyes gave me this feeling that she would rather be elsewhere I enjoyed this challenge and do so appreciate your first six of the week really made my day Cheers Chris.
Have just nearly completed a 2 month holiday to the top end of Australia with my husband long service leave and have had such a good trip but sadly back home to the cold weather in 2 days and then back to work and reality. Have written heaps while away though Hope all is well with you and yours Cheers Chris
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the Club Challenge splendidly. You deliver a beautifully piece that expresses both the colors and the eyes of this artwork. The content is a bit steamy :) your holiday must have sparked a touch of romance as it comes out in this write. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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This meets the Club Challenge splendidly. You deliver a beautifully piece that expresses both the colors and the eyes of this artwork. The content is a bit steamy :) your holiday must have sparked a touch of romance as it comes out in this write. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hi Monica,cThanks for your review and I enjoyed doing this one something about her eyes gave me this thought and ai will enjoy reading others interpretations as well . Not giving any secrets away LOL cheers Chris
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
She now wishes right interpretation of the painting in colours, proper appreciation of colour will help her taking right decision; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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She now wishes right interpretation of the painting in colours, proper appreciation of colour will help her taking right decision; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hi Alcreator Thanks for looking in on this poem for this challenge and the womans eyes gave away her inner thoughts for me Glad you liked my interpretation Cheers Chris
Comment from Pam (respa)
-The artwork is good.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem, Chris.
-Effective rhyme, meter, and message.
-I like the line and verse about
"The colours of her life."
-Very good concluding couplet, too.
-FYI:see's/charade's/it's don't need
the apostrophe.
-I enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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-The artwork is good.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem, Chris.
-Effective rhyme, meter, and message.
-I like the line and verse about
"The colours of her life."
-Very good concluding couplet, too.
-FYI:see's/charade's/it's don't need
the apostrophe.
-I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Oh Pam I Am so pleased I have people like you here on FS that can pick up my spags .one day I will get everything right LOL. Perhaps I need to go back to school Ha Ha never to old. I thought this image for this challenge a good one to have a go at and have had some positive review this far.
Have a great day Cheers Chrisx
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You are very welcome, Chris. I think it was probably too much vacation, and you haven't adjusted yet. It was a good image and poem. I am glad you are getting positive reviews. "Quack!" ha, ha
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Quack Quack
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Ha, Ha! No, I can't make any more quack, quack jokes!
Comment from LisaMay
I like your poem... I think it is an excellent response to the picture. Your words have persuaded me that the situation is as you describe it. He fancies her but she doesn't like his version of love seems clear in their faces, especially hers.
Just a few amendments (looks like you got overexcited and didn't check, haha):
She see's in in his eyes (should be: She sees in his eyes)
She know(s) her beauty does excite this man
At first excit(e)ment for him was her plan.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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I like your poem... I think it is an excellent response to the picture. Your words have persuaded me that the situation is as you describe it. He fancies her but she doesn't like his version of love seems clear in their faces, especially hers.
Just a few amendments (looks like you got overexcited and didn't check, haha):
She see's in in his eyes (should be: She sees in his eyes)
She know(s) her beauty does excite this man
At first excit(e)ment for him was her plan.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Thank Lisa So much for picking up my spags and yes a bit of a rush perhaps to post but I do appreciate your review and help. I just thought she had a haunted look and this just appeared in my brain LOL Again Thanks Cheers Chris
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Hey thanks for the review nomination Chrissy
