Spring showers
Spring is too short so we dream about it17 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ABC poem about the rain in Spring comes and goes and umbrellas pop up to protect humanso from getting wet. Most of the time the rain showers are very welcome after winter here which is dry and dusty.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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A very well-written ABC poem about the rain in Spring comes and goes and umbrellas pop up to protect humanso from getting wet. Most of the time the rain showers are very welcome after winter here which is dry and dusty.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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thank you so much:) I am complaining this year because we had a harsh winter and lots of rain and no summer:(
Comment from Brett Matthew West
The "V" in visitors does not need to be capitalized. Rain can indeed be very enjoyable, especially when it is needed to water crops and for other things. Strong images depicted in this well crafted poem.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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The "V" in visitors does not need to be capitalized. Rain can indeed be very enjoyable, especially when it is needed to water crops and for other things. Strong images depicted in this well crafted poem.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review
Comment from Janetsue
You have done very well with your first ABC poetry. (I'm not very good at writing them at all.) You have offered a lot of good imagery in just five short lines. I hope you continue to write others as good as this one. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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You have done very well with your first ABC poetry. (I'm not very good at writing them at all.) You have offered a lot of good imagery in just five short lines. I hope you continue to write others as good as this one. :-)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Mark D. R.
do like your idea!
you second line needs an edit - if Springs is meant to be plural then the verbs that follow must agree - methinks you meant Spring (-:
'Visitors' may have been intentionally capitalized and again your meaning may make it so.
a fun change for 'raining' might be 'reigning' but that takes on a completely different meaning LOL
good luck in the voting
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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do like your idea!
you second line needs an edit - if Springs is meant to be plural then the verbs that follow must agree - methinks you meant Spring (-:
'Visitors' may have been intentionally capitalized and again your meaning may make it so.
a fun change for 'raining' might be 'reigning' but that takes on a completely different meaning LOL
good luck in the voting
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review and suggestions:)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Your note is appreciated, Iza.
-You followed the directions
well for the prompt.
-A good topic and description.
-Effective nature imagery, too.
-Good personification of umbrellas.
-A good concluding line, as well.
-You might want to change
springs to spring.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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-Your note is appreciated, Iza.
-You followed the directions
well for the prompt.
-A good topic and description.
-Effective nature imagery, too.
-Good personification of umbrellas.
-A good concluding line, as well.
-You might want to change
springs to spring.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Pam thank you so much for your succinct analysis, sounds very encouraging:) Have a blessed day
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You are very welcome, and I am glad it sounded encouraging!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Iza, for your first attempt at that ABC style I think you executed quite well. That is a style I have yet to give a try. Good job and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Hello Iza, for your first attempt at that ABC style I think you executed quite well. That is a style I have yet to give a try. Good job and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review🙃
Comment from Susan X Smith
I especially liked the line "umbrellas run encore as" although I am not sure exactly what you mean. Anyway the poem is effective in setting a mood. Best wishes in your continued poetry writing.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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I especially liked the line "umbrellas run encore as" although I am not sure exactly what you mean. Anyway the poem is effective in setting a mood. Best wishes in your continued poetry writing.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Encore means again and is French, thank you for your review.
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I know that. I meant I didn't understand how the meaning tied into the poem.
Comment from Sally Law
Super fine if this is your first attempt, then you have great promise. I wish my first attempt at anything looked his good! LOL! Bravo!
I will fan you now so that I may catch up with you. I am blind writer in real life and hope you will be patient with me as it may take a little time. I enjoyed this.
One nit: V should start--Visitors in a shadow world. This will keep you qualified for the upcoming contest. :+)
Sending you my best today as always and for the contest,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Super fine if this is your first attempt, then you have great promise. I wish my first attempt at anything looked his good! LOL! Bravo!
I will fan you now so that I may catch up with you. I am blind writer in real life and hope you will be patient with me as it may take a little time. I enjoyed this.
One nit: V should start--Visitors in a shadow world. This will keep you qualified for the upcoming contest. :+)
Sending you my best today as always and for the contest,
Sally xo
Comment Written 20-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your beautiful encouragements, it means a lot to me:) Have a blessed day:)
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Spring showers", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With well chosen words, this talented poet tells it how it is. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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"Spring showers", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With well chosen words, this talented poet tells it how it is. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much:)
Iza Delearnu,
You're more than welcome.
God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess :)))
Comment from misscookie
I love you attempt in writing your first A-B-C poem
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
you did a typo the last letter in the poem is not to be in order'
instead the letter V
It should be different
I hope you have time to change to.
Cookie
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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I love you attempt in writing your first A-B-C poem
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
you did a typo the last letter in the poem is not to be in order'
instead the letter V
It should be different
I hope you have time to change to.
Cookie
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you
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Your very welcome, have a nice day.
Cookie
