Jeannie and Paul
Spouses make a discovery8 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Great story. It sounds like Karen is the winner here. Or it might be Tim who will be out of the fray after the divorce. In a genderless society, there are all sorts of possible combinations. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Great story. It sounds like Karen is the winner here. Or it might be Tim who will be out of the fray after the divorce. In a genderless society, there are all sorts of possible combinations. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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I am not sure anyone wins in these stories,
Rikki LXVI
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Actually--I agree with you.
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:)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, I'm thinking they should just Karen move in with them and, perhaps, Tim could either play 'referee' or count his lucky stars in the house he would have to himself!! ;) Certainly a fun offering for the day, sir -- thanx for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Well, I'm thinking they should just Karen move in with them and, perhaps, Tim could either play 'referee' or count his lucky stars in the house he would have to himself!! ;) Certainly a fun offering for the day, sir -- thanx for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing The manage' a trois seems quite popular, with readers, wonder why?
Rikki
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. Well, that was odd and took the wind out of Jeannie's sails. But I guess that kind of weird thing actually happens these days.
Suggestions:
"Guess you are both bi, not lesbian (missing end quotes)
"Paul I am leaving you; (suggest comma after 'Paul.')
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Lol. Well, that was odd and took the wind out of Jeannie's sails. But I guess that kind of weird thing actually happens these days.
Suggestions:
"Guess you are both bi, not lesbian (missing end quotes)
"Paul I am leaving you; (suggest comma after 'Paul.')
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing Glad I gave you a laugh, Yes these things do happen, my slow brain and poor eyesight saw the quotes and comma.
Comment from N. Rabwar
Was this written for a flash fiction contest because you pack quite a bit of story in a few words. It is very readable and entertaining. Life can indeed be very deceptive.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Was this written for a flash fiction contest because you pack quite a bit of story in a few words. It is very readable and entertaining. Life can indeed be very deceptive.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Just something I dashed off for quick reads.
RikkiLXVI
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Ultimately truth reveals, spouses make a discovery, no shame, it happens, things are never as they are seen, truths are not seen always; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Ultimately truth reveals, spouses make a discovery, no shame, it happens, things are never as they are seen, truths are not seen always; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Maria Millsaps
That's a mouth full. I was just wondering if this is a chapter of a story? This work has potential, but it needs more dimension of sight and sound. The storyline is too literal and the characters underdeveloped. I recommend you work on the characters, make them come alive for the reader.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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That's a mouth full. I was just wondering if this is a chapter of a story? This work has potential, but it needs more dimension of sight and sound. The storyline is too literal and the characters underdeveloped. I recommend you work on the characters, make them come alive for the reader.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Just a little flash piece. Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Lobber
Hi Rikki66,
What a refreshing presentation of life as it really is for many, many, many folks...except for those in denial or those who are welded to their Bible or those who truly believe they know no one in their life who is gay, bi or A-sexual...Bravo! - Lobber
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hi Rikki66,
What a refreshing presentation of life as it really is for many, many, many folks...except for those in denial or those who are welded to their Bible or those who truly believe they know no one in their life who is gay, bi or A-sexual...Bravo! - Lobber
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the sixth star. I am glad you got my drift.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Excellent funny and witty story. The only one who is getting a divorce here is Tim. Paul and Jeannie will have a Manage en Trois, with Tims wife's since they both are fond of her.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Excellent funny and witty story. The only one who is getting a divorce here is Tim. Paul and Jeannie will have a Manage en Trois, with Tims wife's since they both are fond of her.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Possibilities are endless. Thank you for reading and reviewing.
