That Old Storm Door
For families whose sons and daughters chose another path...74 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Who would have thought a storm door could mean so much! Yes, I get it, if not the storm door there might have been something else, like the mat at the door or the old telephone, yes, I get it and commend you for your innovative poem that from the first line is filled with love as your son grew year after year and then the deep lonely and frightful wait for his return.
A stellar work!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Who would have thought a storm door could mean so much! Yes, I get it, if not the storm door there might have been something else, like the mat at the door or the old telephone, yes, I get it and commend you for your innovative poem that from the first line is filled with love as your son grew year after year and then the deep lonely and frightful wait for his return.
A stellar work!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Raffaelina, for such an awesome review and especially for those lovely stars, ma'am!! You are so very right in that we never know when some silly inanimate object will take on some sort of sentimental significance in our lives... but when they do, there's no turning away from them!! ;) ;) Take care out there and have a wonderful weekend! ;)
Comment from Raul1
I think that this poem has a chance of winning the contest! Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Interesting poem. Good luck in the contest! Nice job.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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I think that this poem has a chance of winning the contest! Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Interesting poem. Good luck in the contest! Nice job.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for your awesome comments, Raul! :) Take care! :)
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You're welcome! :)
Comment from V McCrary
If I had 6 stars to give, you would get them. I could see the toddler and feel your love and concern and later, pride and worry and love again. I pray they all make/made it home safely. My son chose the Air Force and I'm quite proud of him also. Stay blessed. V
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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If I had 6 stars to give, you would get them. I could see the toddler and feel your love and concern and later, pride and worry and love again. I pray they all make/made it home safely. My son chose the Air Force and I'm quite proud of him also. Stay blessed. V
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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I will take your virtual six with all the honor as if they were there shining, V... the fact that my poem touched an Air Force mom is more than thanx enough! Please be sure your son knows how much we out here appreciate him!! ;) :) Blessings to you as well! ;) Yvette
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows the circle of life; a son to finally growing up to have a grown son. It shows the memories that center around the door to the house. I think it is a good celebration for a return. A new door for a new hopeful life.
Good luck and keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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This shows the circle of life; a son to finally growing up to have a grown son. It shows the memories that center around the door to the house. I think it is a good celebration for a return. A new door for a new hopeful life.
Good luck and keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thanx for the wonderful review, Joan -- so glad you found the understanding/ meaning in this one!! ;) Take care and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
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You're welcome. Enjoy yours also, Yvette
Joan
Comment from Coco Jane
What a great chronicle of your son and--a storm door, of all things. The mundane stuff is the most meaningful, after all.
I especially like "don't let it--WHACK--slam."
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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What a great chronicle of your son and--a storm door, of all things. The mundane stuff is the most meaningful, after all.
I especially like "don't let it--WHACK--slam."
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thanx for the wonderful review, Coco (not my son, though :).... see author notes) -- so glad you found the understanding/ meaning in this one!! ;) Take care and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from LisaMay
This is a beautifully expressed poem that connects with the reader on several levels and gives a warm insight to family events as the boy grows from toddler to leaving home. The husband's practicality (it's time to let go) is shown with the mother's sentimentality (memories dictate the door stays for now). The last stanza introduces the Marine, having made the choice to not attend college but to embrace that path (thus introducing fear and a certain degree of pride into their lives.)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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This is a beautifully expressed poem that connects with the reader on several levels and gives a warm insight to family events as the boy grows from toddler to leaving home. The husband's practicality (it's time to let go) is shown with the mother's sentimentality (memories dictate the door stays for now). The last stanza introduces the Marine, having made the choice to not attend college but to embrace that path (thus introducing fear and a certain degree of pride into their lives.)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thanx so very much for all your time on the review for this one, L-M... know it doesn't 'sing' like it should, but I just felt compelled to write it! ;) :) Your review means a lot -- take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Yvette. I love the nostalgia springing forth from this poem. Besides the wonderful rhymes your images are so real and comforting for anyone who has raised children. I remember many things happening with our storm door. Bless you, my friend. Good writing and good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hi, Yvette. I love the nostalgia springing forth from this poem. Besides the wonderful rhymes your images are so real and comforting for anyone who has raised children. I remember many things happening with our storm door. Bless you, my friend. Good writing and good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thanx so much for your review, Bob -- always appreciated. Have a great evening! ;) Yvette
Comment from barkingdog
I love the way you used the storm door to signify the boy's growth into manhood. To me replacing it would mean he was lost forever. Leaving it meant he would return.
Lovely rhyming and even tempo make this a fine entry in the contest. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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I love the way you used the storm door to signify the boy's growth into manhood. To me replacing it would mean he was lost forever. Leaving it meant he would return.
Lovely rhyming and even tempo make this a fine entry in the contest. Best of luck.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thanx for the wonderful review -- so glad you found the understanding/ meaning in this one!! ;) Take care and thanx for the wishes! ;) Have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Yvette,
This is a really touching story in a poem :) I'm filled with emotion of my own thoughts and memories of kids growing up. This is more a lovely story and memory poem. The rhymes are subtle compared to the story.
You have good rhymes happening for the contest requirement. My favorite of your rhymes are sandles and handle. I'm not so keen on step and instead. I guess they'd be near rhymes.
Best wishes in the contest. This seems like a winner to me.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hello Yvette,
This is a really touching story in a poem :) I'm filled with emotion of my own thoughts and memories of kids growing up. This is more a lovely story and memory poem. The rhymes are subtle compared to the story.
You have good rhymes happening for the contest requirement. My favorite of your rhymes are sandles and handle. I'm not so keen on step and instead. I guess they'd be near rhymes.
Best wishes in the contest. This seems like a winner to me.
Joy xx
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Yeah, sorry about the almost-rhyme there... it is what it is, I guess. :) What is it they say: sometimes ya got it and sometimes? Weeeellll... :) :) LOL! Thanx for your review, and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Yvette. A chronicle of milestones and tribulations of guiding an infant into manhood. Sounds easy in writing but we all know better. The difficulty of watching them go off the first time is just a precursor of the subsequent departures. The key line is the last. That's bittersweet. Z
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Hi Yvette. A chronicle of milestones and tribulations of guiding an infant into manhood. Sounds easy in writing but we all know better. The difficulty of watching them go off the first time is just a precursor of the subsequent departures. The key line is the last. That's bittersweet. Z
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Yeah.... it was one of those that the blonde actually finished writing it through tears... I think that's sign of age cuz there's no way that would have happened years ago!! ;) :) Thanx for the review, sir, and have a wonderful weekend! ;) Yvette
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Are you old enough to be melancholy and suffer from nostalgia??? I got weepy writing the poem about the moon and Neal Armstrong this afternoon.
