Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Although I believe that we are in the seventh day of creation where Jehovah God is resting, the process of creation is still taking place, in the form of after effects of things set in motion, for example it is said that the universe is still expanding, so are things sill occurring here on the earth.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019

Life blubs up and new things become real.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

That is wonderful artwork. You must be describing a sea change! Sometimes it takes being down to give us the courage and inspiration to move upward. I like your thought about new territories emerging. There are always possibilities if we explore them. judi

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019

Thank you, Judi, for giving this a look. Bill

reply by judiverse on 15-Aug-2019

You're very welcome. judi

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Interesting artwork and
good presentation, Bill.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective description in
the first two lines.
-A good pivot line.
-I like "percolating sea" and
the satori like last line.
-Did you mean tanka
in the description?

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019

I never identify as a tanka. I usually call these pranka, but that?s because they are typically for laughs. Thanks, Pam, for giving this a look. Bill

reply by Pam (respa) on 14-Aug-2019

Thanks for sharing, Bill, now I will know what to look for-a zanka or a pranka, or maybe more! You are welcome for the review.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is a well constructed Tanka (Zanka) with correct line and syllable count throughout. The turn in line three is well executed as is the closing resolution. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019

Thank you, MA, for the kind review. Bill

Comment from Holly Buss

Excellent

Things happen for a reason. Some how, things occur because for a purpose. I really like how this poem captures this. It also does a really good job of of bringing the point of how beginnings come and things always emerge from it. Have a blessed day!

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019

Thanks, Holly

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I had to look up zanka on the net. This is what I found...
Tanka, short poem.
Zanka, left over ember.
There is no sacred
scent, suffering, tradition
for the unfamiliar.
I'm none the wiser! LOL
Your zanka makes a good tanka, in Darwinian terms.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019

Tanka scrutiny leads me to not choosing it as a format. The zanka is whatever I we say it is.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Bill

This is deep and beautifully presented. I like the idea of beginnings having their beginnings in the sea. Wonderful write. I really enjoy these kinds of philosophical writes. Well done.

xoxo deborah

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 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019

Thank you, Deborah

Comment from V McCrary

Excellent

Facts. Quick and to the point, it flows well. It describes my life and how I've journeyed like a vagabond throughout, focusing out of chaos and creating new territories to conquer. Thanks for sharing.

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 Comment Written 14-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019

Thanks, V, for internalizing the poem.