Lost
Sometimes you don't know how life is playing you.15 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
Waiting for something you hoped was going to happen and you why it has not. You go out looking for it but instead all you got was lost.
God bless
Patty
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Waiting for something you hoped was going to happen and you why it has not. You go out looking for it but instead all you got was lost.
God bless
Patty
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your review
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning write, requiring just a couple of bits of editing, which are grammatical issues only. With your permission:
2nd stanza - first line - change the word "Have" to "Has,"
2nd stanza - 2nd line - to read, "Or have the memories blazed upward."
A beautiful write...
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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In my opinion, a stunning write, requiring just a couple of bits of editing, which are grammatical issues only. With your permission:
2nd stanza - first line - change the word "Have" to "Has,"
2nd stanza - 2nd line - to read, "Or have the memories blazed upward."
A beautiful write...
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for enjoying the poem and for your corrections, which are much appreciated, English my third language:(
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You are very welcome indeed, Iza, and I presumed as much. Thank you for sharing such an exquisite poem...Eve
Comment from Susan Morritt
I read this poem with interest to begin with but honestly, what are you trying to say? You made grammatical errors with "Have she lost the battle with the knowing" and "Or the memories has blazed upward". I actually have no idea what this poem is supposed to be about, or insinuate. Sorry.
Susan
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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I read this poem with interest to begin with but honestly, what are you trying to say? You made grammatical errors with "Have she lost the battle with the knowing" and "Or the memories has blazed upward". I actually have no idea what this poem is supposed to be about, or insinuate. Sorry.
Susan
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading:)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about how easily we can get lost in our daily troubles before we know what is going on we are completely confused and overwhelmed.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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A very well-written poem about how easily we can get lost in our daily troubles before we know what is going on we are completely confused and overwhelmed.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank You kindly:)
Comment from Janetsue
This is an interesting posting with a great picture to emphasize the words. Just a couple of English grammar corrections:
Have she lost the battle with the knowing? (Has she lost...)
Or the memories has blazed upward.
(Or have the memories blazed upward?)
(But it could also be: Or has the memory blazed upward?)
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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This is an interesting posting with a great picture to emphasize the words. Just a couple of English grammar corrections:
Have she lost the battle with the knowing? (Has she lost...)
Or the memories has blazed upward.
(Or have the memories blazed upward?)
(But it could also be: Or has the memory blazed upward?)
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review and suggestions:)
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Loredana
I enjoyed your poem and the choice of words. However, I have a couple of questions.
Second line: Did you mean to write 'hoping'? I'm asking because you wrote 'hopping'
Third line: I think you meant to write 'staring' and not 'starring'.
Second stanza, second line. I think it should be "memories 'have'" and not memories 'has'.
I hope this helps.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I enjoyed your poem and the choice of words. However, I have a couple of questions.
Second line: Did you mean to write 'hoping'? I'm asking because you wrote 'hopping'
Third line: I think you meant to write 'staring' and not 'starring'.
Second stanza, second line. I think it should be "memories 'have'" and not memories 'has'.
I hope this helps.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review the correction has been applied
Comment from Sallyo
Good rhyme and meter, and an interesting topic. The last line is particularly thought-provoking.
There are a couple of typos in the first stanza and one in the second...
Hopping = hoping
Starring = staring
has = have
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Good rhyme and meter, and an interesting topic. The last line is particularly thought-provoking.
There are a couple of typos in the first stanza and one in the second...
Hopping = hoping
Starring = staring
has = have
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for your review the correction have been applied
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem,they are a perfect match
your words had me thing how many of us feel lost in a tunnel or cave and see no way out
.I know in due time God is near and He did not create me for this purpose then slowly I see the light.
Cookie
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem,they are a perfect match
your words had me thing how many of us feel lost in a tunnel or cave and see no way out
.I know in due time God is near and He did not create me for this purpose then slowly I see the light.
Cookie
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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So true I feel precisely the same
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Oh what a wonderful feeling, huh
Take care
cookie
Comment from Hitcher
It is true, Sometimes you don't...
I'm struggling with this stanza friend;
Has she lost the battle with the knowing? No problem here- good
Or the memories has blazed upward, the gramma is off- should this not be -
have her memories blazed upward
In confusion wandering and praying - Good
Getting lost without purpose... Good
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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It is true, Sometimes you don't...
I'm struggling with this stanza friend;
Has she lost the battle with the knowing? No problem here- good
Or the memories has blazed upward, the gramma is off- should this not be -
have her memories blazed upward
In confusion wandering and praying - Good
Getting lost without purpose... Good
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We find ourselves lost on occasions, a poignant write, the second line: I think you mean 'hoping' and the third line: 'staring', otherwise a good write, best of luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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We find ourselves lost on occasions, a poignant write, the second line: I think you mean 'hoping' and the third line: 'staring', otherwise a good write, best of luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you kindly for your review and wishes. The corrections have been applied.
