Fly Away
A vision.47 total reviews
Comment from pbomar1115
Now, I know this has to be and possibly hope, death is like this. I can honestly say it sounds like death is a good thing when it is not brought on by tragedy.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Now, I know this has to be and possibly hope, death is like this. I can honestly say it sounds like death is a good thing when it is not brought on by tragedy.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and insightful comments. I am always glad to hear what you have to say. I have great hope when this time comes and dream it will be as wonderful or even more wondrous than I can possibly imagine.
Sending you my best today as always, Sally :+)
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Thanks, Sally.
Comment from Hitcher
My physical body now the phantom limb that had been severed from soul and spirit. ( that is a great line Sally).
The visuals were great, capturing the scene of family and nurses outside of the spiritual realm, emotions flowing, panic and pain. You managed to say a great deal with so few words... Exceptional writing!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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My physical body now the phantom limb that had been severed from soul and spirit. ( that is a great line Sally).
The visuals were great, capturing the scene of family and nurses outside of the spiritual realm, emotions flowing, panic and pain. You managed to say a great deal with so few words... Exceptional writing!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much dear Hitch. I?m so pleased you liked this. That?s my favorite line, too. I am deeply honored by your review and generous six stars.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :+)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a complete story in exactly 150 words. It's hard to judge the content on this having been through the actual experience more than once so I will leave it at this being what most people think and be able to grasp. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a complete story in exactly 150 words. It's hard to judge the content on this having been through the actual experience more than once so I will leave it at this being what most people think and be able to grasp. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and comments. It is always so appreciated. Sending you my best today as always, Sally xo
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Oh boy! That day is coming, isn't it? Why is it wondrous, yet still a bit fearful? I have faith, but I also want to die knowing my sons and their families are "settled". Well, as settled as one can possibly be in this crazy day and age. This is lovely, just as beautiful as can be. You have conveyed the transition in a most wonderful fashion. We will be pulled in whatever direction we are meant to go at our time, won't we? Hugs to you.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Oh boy! That day is coming, isn't it? Why is it wondrous, yet still a bit fearful? I have faith, but I also want to die knowing my sons and their families are "settled". Well, as settled as one can possibly be in this crazy day and age. This is lovely, just as beautiful as can be. You have conveyed the transition in a most wonderful fashion. We will be pulled in whatever direction we are meant to go at our time, won't we? Hugs to you.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and kindest comments, dear Wendy. I always like to hear what you have to say and value your opinion. Sending you my best today as always, Sally xo
Comment from country ranch writer
Sad story of a life's ending in a way folks are prepared for. Nice set up for this one. God works in mysterious way guiding our love one home to the heavens.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Sad story of a life's ending in a way folks are prepared for. Nice set up for this one. God works in mysterious way guiding our love one home to the heavens.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and insightful comments. And I always appreciate what you have to say, dear Barbara. Sending you my best today as always, Sally xo
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is almost indescribably beautiful and moving. Though it is fiction, it DOES tell what happens when the Christian draws that last breath. I was especially moved by the "phantom limb" passage.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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This piece is almost indescribably beautiful and moving. Though it is fiction, it DOES tell what happens when the Christian draws that last breath. I was especially moved by the "phantom limb" passage.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Dear Janice, thank you so much for this wonderful review and generous six stars. It is so good to know that it touched you and I think that?s because you are such a deep, spiritual person. I?m glad to know we share this faith and hope for life eternal in Christ.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment from damommy
I had a similar experience once, but I didn't see angels. Plus, I'm still here. I can't think of a better way to go. I remember feeling very peaceful about it all, even though I saw the nurses and doctor calling my name. Great flash fiction, Sally, and that photo is perfect.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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I had a similar experience once, but I didn't see angels. Plus, I'm still here. I can't think of a better way to go. I remember feeling very peaceful about it all, even though I saw the nurses and doctor calling my name. Great flash fiction, Sally, and that photo is perfect.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind comments. I can only hope that I will be ready for such a day as I?ve described here in this flash fiction. Sending you my best today as always, Sally xo
Comment from Ben Colder
During my 45 years of ministry for Jesus. I have been out of my body twice and entertained angels. Everything true as I say. I love your write and hope someone can understand that Jesus is the answer to all of man's problems. My blessings to you.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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During my 45 years of ministry for Jesus. I have been out of my body twice and entertained angels. Everything true as I say. I love your write and hope someone can understand that Jesus is the answer to all of man's problems. My blessings to you.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Wow, you?re someone who had seen this wonderful place. I?ve only had visions. I have the blessed hope to be with Jesus whether He comes again for me, or I go to Him. I belong to Him is the important thing. :+) Thanks you for the wonderful review and generous six stars. It is always appreciated.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :+)
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Always remember, God is love and when love is not present neither is God.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Oh, Sally, I'm glad that I picked this flash fiction to read. It is very good. Mine is about a lady who is dying as well. Mine has no angel though. Are we getting morbid? Yours has a happy ending for sure. The absolute happiest. Good luck in the contest. Reviewers are gonna like this entry.
There was one sentence that I would reword. "I couldn't move, yet--feeling suspended and floating like a feather" Something is bothersome there. There's tons of ways to fix it like "I couldn't move, yet I was feeling suspended and floating like a feather."
Otherwise, I would not change anything.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Oh, Sally, I'm glad that I picked this flash fiction to read. It is very good. Mine is about a lady who is dying as well. Mine has no angel though. Are we getting morbid? Yours has a happy ending for sure. The absolute happiest. Good luck in the contest. Reviewers are gonna like this entry.
There was one sentence that I would reword. "I couldn't move, yet--feeling suspended and floating like a feather" Something is bothersome there. There's tons of ways to fix it like "I couldn't move, yet I was feeling suspended and floating like a feather."
Otherwise, I would not change anything.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind critique. I did alter it a little bit earlier and according to Alex Rosel?s review. I had to stay with in the strict word criteria for the contest. Sending you my best today as, dear Debbie,
Sally xo
Comment from Alex Rosel
I really liked this entry for the Flash Fiction contest. I hope it does well for you {smiles}.
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
I like the opening paragraph. It immediately pulls the reader into the story {smiles}.
I couldn't move, yet--feeling suspended and floating like a feather. -- If this was mine, I'd place the em dash after "I couldn't move" and before the "yet". Maybe even omit the "yet", although that will impact your word count.
My physical body now the phantom limb -- I really like the concept of your physical body being like a phantom limb. It's very evocative of what is happening here {smiles}.
The angel touched my hand and said, "come with me." -- I'd capitalize "Come". It's the start of the spoken sentence, and it's alright to follow the comma after "and said".
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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I really liked this entry for the Flash Fiction contest. I hope it does well for you {smiles}.
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
I like the opening paragraph. It immediately pulls the reader into the story {smiles}.
I couldn't move, yet--feeling suspended and floating like a feather. -- If this was mine, I'd place the em dash after "I couldn't move" and before the "yet". Maybe even omit the "yet", although that will impact your word count.
My physical body now the phantom limb -- I really like the concept of your physical body being like a phantom limb. It's very evocative of what is happening here {smiles}.
The angel touched my hand and said, "come with me." -- I'd capitalize "Come". It's the start of the spoken sentence, and it's alright to follow the comma after "and said".
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you dear Alex. What a wonderful review and helpful critique. I have employed them all and ready to possibly(?) win this contest. One can only hope at this point. I won a contest this year so I can?t complain. I think it?s a 50 to 1 ratio. Anyway, your reviews mean so much and I am deeply honored by this one in particular. Thank you, again.
Sending you my best today across the pond,
Sal :+))
