Fly Away
A vision.47 total reviews
Comment from Supe
My goodness. How beautiful this is in every way. Makes you realize you don't need to be afraid. You have really touched me with this. The song if beautiful and your story short and perfect. I going to have to keep an eye out for more of your work. Very moving. I loved it. I would change nothing.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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My goodness. How beautiful this is in every way. Makes you realize you don't need to be afraid. You have really touched me with this. The song if beautiful and your story short and perfect. I going to have to keep an eye out for more of your work. Very moving. I loved it. I would change nothing.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Ah, thank you Supe. I?m glad to hear you were touched by this. I am deeply honored by your generous review and six star rating. Thank you, again. It?s precious to me.
Sending you my best today as well, Sally xo
Comment from Mark Valentine
Love it - most stories start out quiet and build to the noisy crescendoing climax - this one does the opposite. My favorite line is "But for some reason, they couldn't hear me say, "I love you." It so perfectly captures what I imagine a dying person's thoughts might be. One couldn't ask for a more beautiful, peaceful, ending (I'm talking about life and your story).
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Love it - most stories start out quiet and build to the noisy crescendoing climax - this one does the opposite. My favorite line is "But for some reason, they couldn't hear me say, "I love you." It so perfectly captures what I imagine a dying person's thoughts might be. One couldn't ask for a more beautiful, peaceful, ending (I'm talking about life and your story).
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Dear Mr. Valentine, thank you so much for the wonderful review and six star rating. I am always glad to hear from you and what you personally liked. Your have a soft spot and sometimes, I hit it. Thank you, again. Your reviews mean so much.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :+)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Faith in God, internal power, spirit and strength of mind is more effective, so you could only visualize angel's intervention and you were taken for a fly into the beautiful cloud as if you were in heaven; other beside you or nurses could never see; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Faith in God, internal power, spirit and strength of mind is more effective, so you could only visualize angel's intervention and you were taken for a fly into the beautiful cloud as if you were in heaven; other beside you or nurses could never see; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the wonderful review and kind encouragement. It is greatly appreciated.
Sending you my best today as well,
Sally :+)
Comment from Ricky1024
"Fly Away"
Was a flash Fiction Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and it Flowed well with No Grammar issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
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Good luck with this and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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"Fly Away"
Was a flash Fiction Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and it Flowed well with No Grammar issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
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Good luck with this and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Dear Dr. Ricky, thank you so much for the excellent review and kind compliments. It was so good to see you and your comments appreciated.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :+)
Comment from humpwhistle
I wonder if there is an awareness of passing?
I know many people do believe it is so, but I'm undecided.
Believing is a personal matter.
I wonder why her loved ones couldn't see the larger-than-life angel?
I also wonder why she expected they would?
Is this fiction, or faith?
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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I wonder if there is an awareness of passing?
I know many people do believe it is so, but I'm undecided.
Believing is a personal matter.
I wonder why her loved ones couldn't see the larger-than-life angel?
I also wonder why she expected they would?
Is this fiction, or faith?
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind comments. Since this is me, and I?m still here, I?d say this is both fiction and faith based. I have been at the side of three dying relatives. My mother saw angels about just before she went, and it wasn?t the nurses. She kept pointing and asking, ?don?t you see them?? I view both life and death as a Christian. I had this vision, or dream, about a month ago. I thought I?d turn it into a short story.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :+)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness this person (YOU!) died in this story Sally, this is a unique way to look at the end of your life, faithful and serene, peaceful and calm, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Oh my goodness this person (YOU!) died in this story Sally, this is a unique way to look at the end of your life, faithful and serene, peaceful and calm, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and kind compliments, dear Dolly. I?m glad you thought it was realistic that?s what I was going for. This is how I imagine death would be like, a sweet release from earth to heaven and into the arms of Jesus. Sending you my best as always, Sally xo
Comment from the13thpoet
Happy Wednesday to you. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction story with us. To tell a story in so few words is difficult, I think you executed well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Happy Wednesday to you. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction story with us. To tell a story in so few words is difficult, I think you executed well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind comments. It was so appreciated. I?m glad you enjoyed my post. Sending my best today as always, Sally :+)
