The Engagement Party
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Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Cindy. As I was reading the story I was anticipating the end but I was surprised to read the end. I would never have guessed he was being pranked. Caught me by suprise. GOOD! Robert
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Hello Cindy. As I was reading the story I was anticipating the end but I was surprised to read the end. I would never have guessed he was being pranked. Caught me by suprise. GOOD! Robert
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. Glad I could surprise you.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Cindy,
Wow! The past came back to haunt him. I'm glad it turned out to be a prank. The poor man was on his way to having a heart attack. I guess there would never be any appropriate place to receive that kind of news. I stopped breathing just reading it.
I'm not seeing any humor in this type of prank, but I'm told the short flash fictiin stories should have a surprise ending. I think you captured the surprise moment in this little story. Well done.
Best wishes in this contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Hi Cindy,
Wow! The past came back to haunt him. I'm glad it turned out to be a prank. The poor man was on his way to having a heart attack. I guess there would never be any appropriate place to receive that kind of news. I stopped breathing just reading it.
I'm not seeing any humor in this type of prank, but I'm told the short flash fictiin stories should have a surprise ending. I think you captured the surprise moment in this little story. Well done.
Best wishes in this contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. A lot of people thought the prank was mean. Good thing it's just fiction. He did get a surprise tho, didn't he?
Comment from Susan Larson
Scheme-a-Dream, a step beyond those exotic dancers, crazy telegrams and actors hired to be weird party guests. I guess this could be quite a scare for someone who sowed his wild oats with wine and women before DNA testing came out! Funny story, but has proven to be true to so many. I actually know of a couple of cases! Wishing you well in the contest.
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Scheme-a-Dream, a step beyond those exotic dancers, crazy telegrams and actors hired to be weird party guests. I guess this could be quite a scare for someone who sowed his wild oats with wine and women before DNA testing came out! Funny story, but has proven to be true to so many. I actually know of a couple of cases! Wishing you well in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. They do the telegrams and stuff too. I was at a company party once where an actress showed up and pretended to be the mistress in front of the wife and all his friends. The wife, of course, was in on it. I've heard of people finding siblings they knew nothing about when they ordered Ancestry DNA. It does sometimes prove to be true.
Comment from Sylvia Page
A good story of one hundred and fifty words with a great twist at the end...
pranking someone to believe he is the father of someone he has not seen ever. Poor man! Best wishes in the contest.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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A good story of one hundred and fifty words with a great twist at the end...
pranking someone to believe he is the father of someone he has not seen ever. Poor man! Best wishes in the contest.
Sylvia
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. Yep, it would have given him quite a scare.
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Indeed, yes.
Comment from the13thpoet
Happy Monday to you. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction story with us. To tell a story in just a hundred words is difficult, I think you executed well. Though that prank, not so funny. :) Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Happy Monday to you. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction story with us. To tell a story in just a hundred words is difficult, I think you executed well. Though that prank, not so funny. :) Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. A lot of people thoght the prank was mean.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL! The poor man could have had a heart attack and died! What a prank to pull on your husband or boyfriend. This is a really good contest entry, you have a whole story here in only 150 words, that's going some! Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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LOL! The poor man could have had a heart attack and died! What a prank to pull on your husband or boyfriend. This is a really good contest entry, you have a whole story here in only 150 words, that's going some! Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. He might be a little mad at his fiance! I was at a company party once where an actress showed up and pretended to be the guy's mistress. That the wife went along with it made me wonder if there had been a couple of real mistresses. They didn't let it go on too long. They sang him a little song and let him know he'd been had.
Comment from Sallyo
POOR Larry. I suggest you put the sentence
There's a 99.97 chance you are the father.
into italics... Also not sure about the camera zooming in. This seems almost like stage direction. Fix up the spelling of the title and there you go!
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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POOR Larry. I suggest you put the sentence
There's a 99.97 chance you are the father.
into italics... Also not sure about the camera zooming in. This seems almost like stage direction. Fix up the spelling of the title and there you go!
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. I'll fix that typo right now.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The fun ends, truth reveal, the agency Scheme-a-Dream has done its job, pranking is well done between a father and a son; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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The fun ends, truth reveal, the agency Scheme-a-Dream has done its job, pranking is well done between a father and a son; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this fun little piece.
Comment from DonandVicki
WOW! That would be a low blow prank. You really kept the twist surprise until the very last sentence. The plot was well planned out and a pleasure to read. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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WOW! That would be a low blow prank. You really kept the twist surprise until the very last sentence. The plot was well planned out and a pleasure to read. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. Yeah, it would be kind of mean, but funny. Glad you enjoyed this fun little piece.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is not the kind a prank that you present to a man who isn't expecting anything close to this kind of news. I like how you've presented this with the build up to the unexpected conclusion. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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This is not the kind a prank that you present to a man who isn't expecting anything close to this kind of news. I like how you've presented this with the build up to the unexpected conclusion. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thanks. This was a fun write, imagining him getting that news in front of everyone.
