Make Me Your Lap Dog
5-7-5 - I love the stroking.11 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fun 5-7-5 poem about the affection two lovers show to one another when they seem to be in a world of their own and no around exists.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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A very well-written fun 5-7-5 poem about the affection two lovers show to one another when they seem to be in a world of their own and no around exists.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Sandra. I hope there's no fleas.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Begging may be the only way. LOL
Good entry for the contest entry. Your illustration attracted me to review it.
Petting your lap dog likely will get you some smooches.
Best wishes for the voting.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Begging may be the only way. LOL
Good entry for the contest entry. Your illustration attracted me to review it.
Petting your lap dog likely will get you some smooches.
Best wishes for the voting.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Maybe smooches, maybe fleas. Thanks for your review, Mark.
Comment from Bill Schott
This humorous 5-7-5, Make Me Your Lap Dog, has the right set up and finds that some will use the persona of man's best friend to get a woman.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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This humorous 5-7-5, Make Me Your Lap Dog, has the right set up and finds that some will use the persona of man's best friend to get a woman.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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I think he should stick to having a dog, definitely man's best friend. Women are tricky.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Well now. He finds himself in quite the predicament. He asks to be made her lap dog. When he asked for this privilege then, he has lost his rights to ask for what he wants. She will decide when or if she cuddles and pets him. I think that perhaps at some point, she will make him beg. I like this clever, fun, and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Well now. He finds himself in quite the predicament. He asks to be made her lap dog. When he asked for this privilege then, he has lost his rights to ask for what he wants. She will decide when or if she cuddles and pets him. I think that perhaps at some point, she will make him beg. I like this clever, fun, and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review, Jeffrey. I think we all have to beg for treats from time to time... wagging our tails expectantly doesn't always get noticed. Good dog! I hope his girlfriend doesn't get fleas off of him.
Comment from RodG
I liked the humor of this short poem and especially putting myself in the Speaker's place and enjoying all that attention vicariously. A delightful snapshot of young love.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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I liked the humor of this short poem and especially putting myself in the Speaker's place and enjoying all that attention vicariously. A delightful snapshot of young love.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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I'm pleased you found it entertaining Rod. A couple of reviewers were bored by. What is considered humorous is so subjective.
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Affection?especially when it?s given freely?is NEVER boring. Rod
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Exactly. I'd lap it up.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Exactly 17 syllables and a perfect 5-7-5. You chose just the right photograph to accompany your creation. Your last line certainly made me smile. I loved the comparison of creature comforts and human comforts.
You've got a great contest entry here, and I wish you the very best!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Exactly 17 syllables and a perfect 5-7-5. You chose just the right photograph to accompany your creation. Your last line certainly made me smile. I loved the comparison of creature comforts and human comforts.
You've got a great contest entry here, and I wish you the very best!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review. It's odd how subjective humour is. You thought the last line was funny... I clearly did or I wouldn't have written it, yet 2 other reviewers were bored by it.
Comment from Agate Lucas
Good rhythm and use of the limited amount of syllables. The only comment I would make is that the last line is maybe not as funny as it could be. It doesn't sound quite as comic to me...
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Good rhythm and use of the limited amount of syllables. The only comment I would make is that the last line is maybe not as funny as it could be. It doesn't sound quite as comic to me...
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review. Humour is very subjective... some have smiled at the last line, some don't. I wonder which of the entries is yours so I can see what is your style of humour. Sometimes it depends on where people come from, what mood they are, what time of day they read it, what age group they are in... etc.
Comment from Ricky1024
This fun 575 contest entry was very well written.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and it fllowed well with no Grammar issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional.
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While, Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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This fun 575 contest entry was very well written.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and it fllowed well with no Grammar issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional.
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While, Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks for reviewing! Much appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, I don't think I have ever had a partner who was or wanted to be a lap-dog! Although I have seen friends who have controlled their partners, a fun write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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He he he, I don't think I have ever had a partner who was or wanted to be a lap-dog! Although I have seen friends who have controlled their partners, a fun write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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I never have either... that's probably why I thought it was funny; other reviewers have been underwhelmed by it. Maybe it is normal life for them.
Comment from Sallyo
Hmm, I have one like that. On the serious side, anytime-affection is underrated. Dogs do remind you when they want to be patted or have their ears scratched. People don't necessarily want to have to remind you.
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Hmm, I have one like that. On the serious side, anytime-affection is underrated. Dogs do remind you when they want to be patted or have their ears scratched. People don't necessarily want to have to remind you.
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Yes, you are right about dogs AND humans. Thanks for your review.
